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by thik_luvr6802/04/11

irony

This too has happened to me, funny, I guess great minds think alike!

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by Anonymous02/04/11

Tense

Please, it started well, but try telling in the past. It is otherwise a spoken story without the voice.

This is not a slam, but please try as "She read the ad one last time".

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by Anonymous06/02/11

A little too syrupy, but a good read. Just the right length for a coffee break. You ought to do this more often

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by rightbank10/22/15

she hadn't heard from him for a week

so she moved and changed her phone number. Then wondered why he never got in touch with her?

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