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by Anonymous

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by 02/03/11

Stupid...

Stupid............Stupid..............STupid...... ......

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by Anonymous02/03/11

1 star.

Stupid FETISH STORY.

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by sheridan800002/03/11

patetic

stop writting that shit

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by Spykke02/03/11

Do me a favour -

where was the loving wife part?

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by Anonymous02/03/11

serve me creampies for

I am a cuck

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by Anonymous02/03/11

Good stuff!

Enjoyed it. Please keep going with that dialogue between them. Agonizingly hot!

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by hindsight202002/03/11

untitled

Unwritten would have been better

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by Anonymous02/03/11

utter crap!

what a waste of my time!

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by devioto02/03/11

I want to know ...

actually I want to know as well what she tells him !

I liked this story, the guy looks like one of the NYMPHOCOM victims :-)

thanks for this story and please keep writing
cheers
D.

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by Anonymous02/03/11

Nice beginning

Looking forward to the progression of this relationship.
Fact is, some women just need a new forceful man occasionally, I know, I married one.

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by BigJohn60102/03/11

I will always believe you have to have a wife before you can have a loving wife.......

A good story in fetish or erotic coupling but not in this category. At least the boyfriend could save the cost of a divorce.

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by Anonymous02/03/11

god

This is god awful, some people write for fun others because they have something to say others because they are writers, your just a fool.

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by Britease02/03/11

Yes

I really liked this. I don't know if you're going to end it, but in my mind he dumped her ---- Eventually that is!

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by demantoid02/03/11

Great set up and great tension.

The story is well written with great, crisp dialogue. The cliffhanger was a bit cliched, but at least the reader knows what to expect next. Unfortunately, I see no real redemption for the male character. The author became slightly too impatient in portraying the guy as a wimp, so all the drama and tension that was so delicious in most of the story, was killed off by closing two sentences. The author gave away too much info, resulting in a psuedo dramatic ending. The reader already knows what is going to happen next in #2...the balloon lost its air.

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by Anonymous02/03/11

some like it

I don't. Sorry if I make you think I'm narrow minded. Let them live together as fuck buddies, using protection of course, who knows what she might bring back. Let him go out and let him bring back bring girls to fuck in front of her. Oh, and no free meal ticket here. She has to share the living expenses equally. Think she will like it ??

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by Anonymous02/03/11

pathetic shit

outpourings of a demented mind

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by katib02/03/11

Just another wimp?

The story is well written and interesting. You managed to slip in a number of valid questions by the male character. However, for me, your last sentenced ruined an otherwise good tale.

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by Anonymous02/03/11

I think you (THE WRITER) i9s a wimp and a coward and a closet queer.

How any man (real man ,that is, Not you ,the writer) Can let another guy stretch out his pussy is beyond belief. You are worse than a wimp. You are worse than a queer. You are a coward and eat your own feces for breakfast.

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by chytown02/03/11

AS IF !!!!!!!!!!!!

We did not have enough crap writers on this site we get a new one with two new stories. What a waste. Try a different story line. This one is old and you have only two to your credit. "Good Luck"

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by RHinSC02/03/11

Well...

The first clue was when the man was afraid to walk through his own house. The second was when he started to cry along with the woman. No wait...the second was when he watched another man fuck his woman and not do anything about it. I guess thats hard when you are afraid to come out of the closet. He will have to come out of the closet now won't he? Maybe not, he can get his creampies in secret.

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by speedy4702/03/11

Forget the critics....

Excellent!

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by Anonymous02/03/11

Worthless

Get a life--write on bathroom walls.

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by Anonymous02/04/11

What a pussy the writer is!

She'd have her ass out the door...right after I smashed her face in....

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by Anonymous02/04/11

re: Forget the critics.

Ah, yes, another one who can find little to praise about the story, yet spends most of the comment basically stating that anyone with a different opinion does not have the right to state that opinion.

When people criticize such stories they tend to keep their comments focused on the story. Rarely do they spend it trashing the rights of others to have a different opinion. (I stated "rarely." Obviously there will be exceptions.) However, many, many "praisers" can't seem to talk about the story. Hmmm? Who are the real haters?

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by Anonymous02/04/11

Lifetime of Sadness

I walked away from the woman I loved 15 years ago, I had to - she slept around.

To this day, I still love her, that she could never change was obvious and I know - she still loves me.

Just a story, I know but - it really happens.

Sad

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by Anonymous02/04/11

No lidsten to the critics

The core premise, the characters, and the tale itself is a pile of crap. That's what the critics say, and they are spot on.

Now have him beat both of them with a blunt metal object and you dramatically improve this drivel.

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by lucioz02/04/11

great story

hi, great stories, keep going, you will improve as you go along, as Frank Sinatra, says, 'I DONE IT MY WAY' thats all you have to do.

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by Anonymous02/04/11

Where is the wife

let alone a Loving Wife. This was his girlfriend. How about giving up trying to write a store. I have read(look at) both of your stories and all I see is a lame wimp for a man. He must have had his balls removed to act like he does. 1 star for not know what category to put a story in. If you would fill in your Bio I would not be anonymous either. With a name like Abbey you must be a man hating bitch.

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by Vulcan_in_Ohio02/04/11

Really not surprising

It seems a fair number of female writers have the opinion that it is erotic to have two men, sometimes simultaneously. Nothing wrong there -- many men admit to a fantasy of having two women at the same time. I suspect that three-ways are usually better in fantasy than in actuality, but in any event, it's a nice fantasy. Anyone who can satisfy not just one but two of the opposite sex must be super sexy!

That said, speaking of reality now, most people in love are jealous if the one they love gives love away to another. And with women, excepting prostitutes, sex with a man includes some emotional component -- the cliche, "It was just sex, honey, it didn't mean anything. I still love you," just does not compute, especially when a woman says it. And most men realize it.

So when an author (in this case, apparently female) puts forth the fantasy of having her cake and eating it too, the only way her steady beau can possibly accept it is if he is a wimp, by definition. I'm sure there are some men who are bisexual, and for them it means sex with another partner just as she is experiencing, but these are the exception and not the rule.

The problem for us (male readers) is that the "wimp" is repulsive and does not act the way a normal male would act. So we get upset, or incredulous, end of story. The majority of males reading the Loving Wives category prefer the cheater (generally the wife, or girlfriend in this story) to reap her just desserts. Otherwise, the unknowing cuckold appears a fool, and the knowing one appears a wimp.

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by m48gunner02/04/11

Not my cup of tea!

So it will be OK now, she'll be honest. Sorry but that is really a bunch of bull. He comes off as a wimp, and she as a slut....where is love in any of that, where is concern for her "husband". I find nothing in this story line worth a second glance...

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by Anonymous02/04/11

this is no different than writing about someone with...

any mental illness, no different than writing about a pediofile, or a person who wants to fuck a kitten after roasting it for 10 minutes in the microwave. The only real sad thing here is just how many sad and pathetic scumbags out there seem to not understand how fucked-up they are. THERE IS NOTHING LOVING - EROTIC - SEXY - OR NORMAL about humiliation and self loathing.... get some fucking help before you screw up someone's life!

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by Anonymous02/05/11

Ha Ha Ha Ha!

You little retards crack me up, do you really get off on this?

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by Anonymous02/06/11

Great

Great stuff... good tension in the story.

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by Anonymous02/18/11

Bulls

Run and don't look back the BF can always get new pussy somewhere in this world.The writer is a blockhead and will continue on writing on wimp husband's and BF stories he has no f....... talent at all .

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by Anonymous02/21/11

Both Stories Are Crap

and just a rehash of each other. don't give up your day job. neither was worth reading

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by Anonymous02/28/11

Wow.

Jeez people- you don't like what the story says? Switch to a different one! There are thousands to choose from on this site alone! There are just better things to voice your nasty opinions on than what gets other people off. Yikes! To Author- no it's not my cup of tea, but don't listen to these shitheads- write what you like! It's a porn site for christ sakes. We're all here for different reasons! ;)

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by Anonymous03/28/11

Just another pile of shit.

Pathetic!

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by Anonymous03/28/11

No comment

"1"

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by tazz31708/08/11

CABRONE

Its a spanish word. But once a cuck/wimp always a cuck/wimp/ TK U MLJ LV NV

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by Anonymous09/17/11

SHES A SLUT AND WHO THE FUCK WANTS A WOMAN LIKE THAT! THERE R MILLIONS OF WOMEN OUT THERE WHO TREAT U WITH RESPECT DONT BE A WIMP FOR ANY BITCH EVER

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by Anonymous09/17/11

Relax . 90% of the vitriolic comments are written by a couple of demented trolls with multiple alts. Just creeps.

As for the troll who said 'what a pussy, she'd be out the door just as soon as I'd smashed her face in' or some such nonce rubbish, I'd like to show him the different ways we deal with women beaters as opposed to, say, guys we merely disrespect like cucks or someone. I'd love to show you.

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by Anonymous09/17/11

re: Anon-Relax.........

You're an idiot. The last sentences of this farce tells volumes of the likes of you.

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by betrayedbylove05/15/12

Crap

I hate cucks.

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by tazz31705/15/12

#2 NO MAS THE FUCKS STOP HERE

and I am still out of here. TK U MLJ LV NV

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by Anonymous05/26/12

crap2

What-is it with brits and black Dick...

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by Old5104/26/13

Total shit!!!!

Dont write anymore you suck!!!

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by Anonymous11/29/13

Good thing about girlfriends?

They're easy to dump! This was poorly written, with cardboard characters that never created any feeling in the reader.

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by Anonymous07/07/15

why

She's a slut. Always was always will be. Why would he want to know. Just leave and become one in the line of fuck buddies. At least until you find someone else. After that just leave and make a life for himself. She'll live a lufe of STDs and HIV if your lucky. Once she gone life will be better for all except maybe her pimp.

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by Anonymous12/17/15

Oh my!

This was one of the best stories that I have ever read :) I love the emphasis on her cheating, his loving on her stocking clad legs and feet and the emotional impact on you and your girl. Very well done! I eagerly await more :)

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by Nexttimeround08/07/16

I thought this

was very well written. Never mind that the story line or scenario isn't to one's liking or something that one would put up with oneself. The guy isn't one of those who want the girlfriend or wife to fuck others either, but he is just too weak to do what needs to be done and get away from her. But the interesting thing is her attitude after she's fucked the other guy. She seems genuinely to care that he (the story teller) doesn't leave her. Why doesn't she just kick him out so she can lead a free and easy sex life without him? He is entrapped by his need for her inspite of her cheating but meanwhile she is co-dependent on him sticking around even though she will do it again. Any explanations of this aspect of her need from the ladies? -- Beyond her saying "You are my best friend"? Maybe she really does love him.

Never mind the rants from readers that the guy and by extension the author is a spineless wimp, this was for me one of the best efforts to explain why some people get trapped into this situation. I just need to know her answer to the question:"Why does she still need to have him around?"

The commentator who said he had a true love who was like this was perhaps closest to the mark.

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