All Comments on 'Pink Sunset Lit World'

by vrosej10

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Esperanza_HidalgoEsperanza_Hidalgoabout 13 years ago
ahhh

not even a bridesmaid, just the creator of the dress--bitter ending. I like your experimentation with ten syllables on pattern--something I want to try.

Esperanza_HidalgoEsperanza_Hidalgoabout 13 years ago
I swear I left a comment!

Let me try and remember--okay something like not even a bridesmaid, only a seamstress. I even like the new experimentation with the ten pattern, something I haven't read from you until recently.

AngelineAngelineabout 13 years ago
Very good even if I did think it was gonna be about Lit!

It's complete with the images doing all the heavy lifting to carry the poem along. I'm not wild about semicolons in poems but I think it fits the semi-prosey style in which many of yours are written. Also as short as this one is, full stops could make for a choppy read. Anyway, just wonderful nothing more than that to say!

UnderYourSpellUnderYourSpellabout 13 years ago
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I can see her there a snapshot in time .... a comma after 'hemline' perhaps but that's a minor niggle

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