by vrosej10
not even a bridesmaid, just the creator of the dress--bitter ending. I like your experimentation with ten syllables on pattern--something I want to try.
Let me try and remember--okay something like not even a bridesmaid, only a seamstress. I even like the new experimentation with the ten pattern, something I haven't read from you until recently.
It's complete with the images doing all the heavy lifting to carry the poem along. I'm not wild about semicolons in poems but I think it fits the semi-prosey style in which many of yours are written. Also as short as this one is, full stops could make for a choppy read. Anyway, just wonderful nothing more than that to say!
I can see her there a snapshot in time .... a comma after 'hemline' perhaps but that's a minor niggle