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Great
The story is great, Can't wait for the next. A++
can't wait for more - very unusual story but thats also what I find so intriguing about it!
Only Getting Better
With each new chapter this story only gets better. I can't wait to see what happens next. You certainly leave me with lots of questions. Now that Kale knows who Nara is what will he do next? What will Tony think on finding Nara is now his servant? And who is the real bad guy, Nara's guardian or maybe Kale's uncle Lord Dominic? And what is the deal with Tony bring out a necklace that once belonged to Nara's mom? I know I have to wait for the next chapter for some of these answers. And although you didn't ask this time, the length of this was more than fine considering chapter 2 posted just yesterday. I will definitely be watching for chapter 4 to get some of my questions answered and get the next set of questions I expect to come along. Again I think you are doing a great job on your first story.
Ok Hooked now!
Liking this story very much, can hardly wait to see where we go. Looking forward to next posting.
Wonderful
This is a great story....Please continue it.
I can't wait for the next update!!! What is she going to tell Anthony?
please continue
great story
please write more
Can't wait for more!
I can't wait for the next chapter - I am hooked.
The story flows beautifully and I am so intrigued as to what is going to happen!
MORE...................
please continue this story, i'm hooked and really looking forward to the rest.
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really nice story so far cant wait for the rest of it...................please update soon
Nice start
And I sincerely hope that you haven't abandoned this story.
More?
Though the chapters are short, I do hope you'll return to write more... its a very interesting opener and I'm curious as to where you are taking it.
Sucked ass
No sex scene, very vague to a point it is beyond just "teasing". You don't have a plot, you barely have any details that would keep the reader interested. Child if you wanted to write petty vague and non existent stories...remove yourself from this place and go to wattpad. It would probably take you awhile to become an amateur if that over there.
More back story
It did not suck ass. Needs more back story and character development.
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