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It is pretty
a simple recognition of a fond memory and not overdone. I felt it through all my senses, and wanted to be in the scene. I might not put keep me jazzed, because that can be conveyed by describing what the stubble did, like sending bubbles up my spine, but that is a small point. Fine effort.
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Mmmm a lead up for what to do on a snowy day, a languid sexy moment of a poem
an amber-easy poem
i don't know if this is more a woman's poem than a man's, but i guarantee so many women will associate with this one from the off. enjoyed this, tess
and this in particular:
Cool hands slide in and up
cherishing familiar forms.
nice way to avoid the cliché waiting to appear!
*****
Very nice. A suggestion, if I may:
keeps me aroused.
Warmth within and without,
Five.
Lovely
I love these little slice of life poems and this has sound and movement and some images that really grab me. "spine to ribs" is excellent as is the notion of those out of the loop toes joining the game, which is giggle sweet. Tess you are always a pleasure to read. xo
I was thinking
just the other day as Angeline and I spoke of fires and fireplaces, of something to write on that very subject. You've said anything I could have ever written better and more descriptive. Beautiful poetry, Tess.
~ maria
I like it but too many words
I find the first three lines rather weak and do the rest of the poem no justice at all.
'a sudden noise breaking' seems rather superfluous to me and telegraphs the reader and gives a lazy feel. A suggestion to illustrate what I feel would be better. Reduce the first three lines to two and....
logs collapse and crack
sparks scroll upwards
Doesn't mean I'm right, you can ignore me.
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good call on Bogus's part, this bothers me too "bored to be out of the loop" but doesn't bother much. Fine, Fine 100
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Good poem, solid and well written. STOP muscling in on my game :)! (just kidding).
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Hot stuff.
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