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When?
When are you going to do the next chapter?
Next Chapter
Hey don't leave us hanging this is hot.
Writers with ideas
While you may have a notion or two for how you want to write a story, your skill as a writer nearly wrecks the results you might have been going for. Proof reading is not an option, it's a requirement. If you proof read this piece of work and still did not see how many errors it is full of, you need to ask someone else with some grammar skills to look at it for you. There is a difference between "then" and "than" that makes you look illiterate. You use "lone" where you meant "loan." There's so many errors it's distracting, and certainly not erotic. Capitalization is not a form of emphasis, and you fail with it so randomly it's almost entertaining if it wasn't so sad.
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