All Comments on 'First Week Anniversary Sex'

is made powerful by the mundane details that precede it, like a camera panning through a room and resting on this woman. Some images I think are brilliant (the man in camouflage) others (reddish carnival glass ring dish) feels like too much to me. I think the stuff before that last line needs more oomph, some sound or motion so it doesn't feel too much like a still life. But yes, it's good. :-D

but I like the reddish carnival glass dish. Hmmm, now who should you listen to? A noob, or...

I think it is cool, I wasn't expecting it to end as it did, but the rose petals should have hinted. Nice.

100, no regrets on my part. You are reaching just the right amount. The end could be a little less defined.

though the punctuation is odd and breaks the flow somewhat. I like description, and the details seem just right.

I think you could lose 'alongside that' but it's a pwerful piece nonetheless and very pertinent today

The visuals leading in to the close work very well. Poet Guy agrees with twelveoone that the ending is made perhaps too explicit (not meaning the masturbation, but rather that it is perhaps too obvious about the death of the woman's husband). Poet Guy has no clever ideas about how to recast that, though. Well done.