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I still really like it
though I might switch the third and fourth strophes.
seems like
a poem of longing, hence, I wouldn't lose any of them. I wish it were me, but alas, an ocean separates us. ;)
Enjoyed the read.
~maria
*
tight, terse, musing
OK maybe busy-ness? strikes me as not quite perfect.
100!
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I like the longing in this one. I can relate. Got five and a recommend.
~
As I read it I kept wanting to put in the word 'that' instead of 'which' but perhaps that's just me, liked the whole idea though and enjoyed the read
Today....
.....I'm voting but comments will be brief. This is close to perfection, emotional but not over-wrought.
Tess
*****
Five.
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