Personally I like a good plot, sex only would ruin the good work so far. I also like the brother and sister to be closer romance wise. Mainly because i prefer her than chloe.
But yeah, i enjoy the teasing/ sexual tension. Dont change it
Cheers
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Anonymous02/07/11
Nice story
You got the emotions and feelings put into words very well, don't forget to add that in the climaxing sexual parts also, dump chloe and get matt and libby into a lovers mix, maybe even a preg libby? Your doing great but don't forget, detailed sex feelings and emotions, it makes us feel it is us. Good work so far.
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Anonymous02/08/11
Now I would like to see him come home drunk and end up watching his sister sleeping before becoming over taken with lust oushing him to take his sister.
Awesome story so far! You do it the way u want since your typing it! I know you will get to the incest, but just keeping going the way your going!
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Anonymous02/08/11
Keep it going
This is great the way it is. You are tyeasing the audience, and for one I love it. Keep up the good work.
by
Anonymous02/08/11
Plot first
Just like with good sex an erotic story needs foreplay. Sex only is boring and lacks that lovely anticipation that stimulates the imagination and hopefully a little more.
by
Anonymous02/09/11
Story!
Without the story the sex would be much less satisfying, stay the course!
by
Anonymous02/10/11
good story
The change between the beginning and end of this chapter ROCKED!
Which just gives me the shits. Sorry, but too much teasing is a turn off. I mean that as a reader, by the way.
Oh, and it's hard to get into your characters, they lack both interesting qualities, and human touches. Sorry, just my opinion.
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Anonymous06/01/12
=)
Tbh i like the teasing..makes me wanna read on ^.
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Anonymous05/31/13
not good
worse the watching anime wich is real bad teasing is a real turn off as said before and what little plot there is is way to boring. your characters are one demensional and have no feelings or life to them, i don't think you are cut out to be a writer stick to your day job and reading.
English
Personally I like a good plot, sex only would ruin the good work so far. I also like the brother and sister to be closer romance wise. Mainly because i prefer her than chloe.
But yeah, i enjoy the teasing/ sexual tension. Dont change it
Cheers
Nice story
You got the emotions and feelings put into words very well, don't forget to add that in the climaxing sexual parts also, dump chloe and get matt and libby into a lovers mix, maybe even a preg libby? Your doing great but don't forget, detailed sex feelings and emotions, it makes us feel it is us. Good work so far.
Now I would like to see him come home drunk and end up watching his sister sleeping before becoming over taken with lust oushing him to take his sister.
Awesome story so far! You do it the way u want since your typing it! I know you will get to the incest, but just keeping going the way your going!
Keep it going
This is great the way it is. You are tyeasing the audience, and for one I love it. Keep up the good work.
Plot first
Just like with good sex an erotic story needs foreplay. Sex only is boring and lacks that lovely anticipation that stimulates the imagination and hopefully a little more.
Story!
Without the story the sex would be much less satisfying, stay the course!
good story
The change between the beginning and end of this chapter ROCKED!
--woulda logged in, but don't remember my PW
Rome Was Not Built In A Day
The story rocks, don't break it
This is all about tease,
Which just gives me the shits. Sorry, but too much teasing is a turn off. I mean that as a reader, by the way.
Oh, and it's hard to get into your characters, they lack both interesting qualities, and human touches. Sorry, just my opinion.
=)
Tbh i like the teasing..makes me wanna read on ^.
not good
worse the watching anime wich is real bad teasing is a real turn off as said before and what little plot there is is way to boring. your characters are one demensional and have no feelings or life to them, i don't think you are cut out to be a writer stick to your day job and reading.
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