All Comments on 'Bathroom Incursion'

This was great. leaves me wanting more. So how about another chapter in their sexual awakening?

Terrific story. Each section was very erotic.

I'd also love another chapter. Perhaps with the mom finding out and then joining.

thank you!

Needs fleshing out a lot to get to that next level. What did it feel like; smell like an sound like? Make the sibs a bit more real. Now they're just a guy and a girl very generally.

There is a great span of possibility from tender loving sis to slutty cum dumpster sis. Try exploring there. Not every sis has to turn into a whore or be a dreamy love princess...

I'd like to see another chapter with this...especially with the mother...but continuing with the two of them is fine, you're the writer.

Ignore those demanding further chapters. All of the fascination lies in that first time. After that it is just more of the same. Good story.

really very hot........................

Great story keep up the great job

Don't worry about the three star prick in the comments. This is a five star, you write well.

AWESOME!!!!!

Too bad you did not continue this story. There was lots more types of sex they could have.

great story.

want more!

WE NEED A PART 2 ASAP!

He reaches for "her jugs" and massages them. OK, fine, but what did they look like? Were the nipples large? Small? Soft? Hard? What did they feel like to him? What did it feel like to her? Did he just grab them? Did he 'heft' them. Did he play with her nipples? Did he twist them? Did he pull them? Did she like it? Did she tell him what she liked? Was either of them a virgin when this encounter happened? Wasn't there any reluctance at all?

I agree with the characters being sort of generic. More development would be good, though it can be hard to do. Not enough detail,it's flat. Too much detail and you try to find the story through them. It's a fine line.

If that were my sister I wold of fucked her to

Great story, just like the others, keep writing...

Another one of your good stories, now on to the next.

please a sequel of this! this was such a hot story

A really good story. Short but nicely written. All the best!

I always wished I'd had a sister to fuck and this story tells me what would have happened If I had! Fuck!!!!! You did well in the descriptive fuck areas indicating you know what sexual experiences are like! Keep pumping the stories out so I can read them and cum on my computer screen!

Are you going to add more or is this it

please proof more carefully.

this was good but it wasnt in enough detail. try making the next more long lasting too

Wonderfully written, Sexy as hell. It really turned me on!

Write more,loved the story.Maybe have them fuck in the car.I love road head stories.

This would have been a terrific read if it had been contained on three or more pages. Two much story and like a Reader's Digest condensed book where all the better parts were dropped to make it a one page wonder, which didn't give the read a good time.

Comment title says it all!

My sis was always fascinated with my large thick cock, and I would finger her to orgasm. She was too afraid that I'd hurt her vag with my big cock!

Would love to see a part 2. Nice writing and Hot story.

All your stories are fantastic, please write more

This is at least one of my top 5 favourite stories. I love how short and satisfying it is.

Your story Shift must have got some bad reviews. Can’t rate or comment on it. Amazing power and it’s wasted. Bringing in other guy sucked the most. He could have gave the dude whole club full of chicks but letting have at those two sucked. Sorry comment here but can’t on Shift story page.

Hot and yummy.

Over, hmm, why not continue?

Where is the next sentences ?

I loved this story ... I want more

I enjoyed this