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A riddle...
...at least a good one... is a question whose answer seems obscure and out of reach, and all answers but the right one will fall on one contradiction or another. Until it is known, and then it's so obvious that it really couldn't have been anything else.
You have a metaphor here. Concisely told in a prosaic, didactic way, without much to empasize the emotional impact of the imagery. It works pretty well, creates an interresting detached mood.
But is it a riddle? Only the answer can tell. :)
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I'm begging off, maybe, because I'm not in the mood for thinking. I left 100, I think, maybe I put it in that room
It's lovely writing
and the poem has a fine flow, very fluid. I feel like it needs something more because even as an extended metaphor (for something unobtainable) it doesn't have a passion or tension at its heart. Maybe that's the riddle part? I'm not sure how you'd do that though (yes I am a big help, huh?). I have to think about it. :-)
It is
like a word dance. I'm just beginning to see that in what you do because someone pointed it out to me. Repeated words with similar sounds. I enjoy playing with words in this manner too. I just don't do it with the same acumen while retaining a meaning--yet! :-)
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Love this, I see it as being your mind full of all different furniture at different times
Creepy but cool.
I lived in a house as a child that had doors that would spontaneously open. It was creepy. Like this poem. Five.
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