I don't blame you for getting a little peeved sometimes these little pricks don't give it a chance.If they want to critique a story why don't they give contact info so you can read some of their great stories.Yea right! I forgot they probably have no stories.
The baseball bats were silly, if any, one would have been enough. Love the story so far, other than the bs amount of cum the guy is supposedly shooting out!
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Anonymous10/22/15
Thank you
I'd like to see more of this story to continue beyond 2 chapters. Thanks.
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Anonymous02/03/16
Stopped reading
Stopped reading when they sat down to talk. The guy that he tackled broke five ribs? And in the story he just laughed and threw him out on the lawn? Don't think so... Rick also has no idea about her boyfriends, "being so pretty you must have had lots of boyfriends".. Just sloppy and made me loose interest.
sorry some readers finds it necessary to complain about the ribs, etc. Guess they should have stopped reading before reaching the story's end, and then write critical comments. To those I state, read until you don't enjoy the story and get off the site. Otherwise write your own stories with your names so we can take apart you failure to be half as good in writing as this author. To me you get another five.
English
great story
Great story. I enjoyed it very much. I would like to hear more!!!
Go Dawg
I don't blame you for getting a little peeved sometimes these little pricks don't give it a chance.If they want to critique a story why don't they give contact info so you can read some of their great stories.Yea right! I forgot they probably have no stories.
huh?
like DNY224 has no stories..
"and they somehow all had aluminum baseball bats"
That's just silly. (Yes, I know this is erotica, but fists and kicks would do just as well.)
The baseball bats were silly, if any, one would have been enough. Love the story so far, other than the bs amount of cum the guy is supposedly shooting out!
Thank you
I'd like to see more of this story to continue beyond 2 chapters. Thanks.
Stopped reading
Stopped reading when they sat down to talk. The guy that he tackled broke five ribs? And in the story he just laughed and threw him out on the lawn? Don't think so... Rick also has no idea about her boyfriends, "being so pretty you must have had lots of boyfriends".. Just sloppy and made me loose interest.
enjoyable story
sorry some readers finds it necessary to complain about the ribs, etc. Guess they should have stopped reading before reaching the story's end, and then write critical comments. To those I state, read until you don't enjoy the story and get off the site. Otherwise write your own stories with your names so we can take apart you failure to be half as good in writing as this author. To me you get another five.
5 from me too
and yes please continue with this very hot and yet to develop story
Another great story
Well done. Can't wait to read the next chapter ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
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