I'm really loving this story. Dayton is unlike the other male protagonists you have in this series. I like him very much... and to pair him up with Freya is just amazing!
Well things are jumping now. I'm actually starting to doubt a little, whether Freya and Dayton will end up together in the end. I just can't see it right now. Regardless, I'm glad that Freya made Dayton go back to the pack. The whole time after she made her threat, I was silently hoping that Dayton would make that decision.
Rafe seems to be doing very well in his role as alpha. He's reading people well and making good judgment calls and Freya's gonna be in for it, when the situation is known to Nors and Caleb.
Overall the story is moving faster than I would have thought, but that's not a bad thing. (I really hate waiting sometimes.) Just goes to show that I can still be surprised.
I have no clever analogy to compare this too. So let's go with cookies. Let's say you're starving. You haven't eaten in days and then someone appears with your favorite type of cookie. You want that cookie so bad, but this cruel person will only give you this cookie one crumble at a time. It's torture. Torture I say! I WANT TO GOBBLE UP THIS COOKIE! But you only give me crumbles.. (oh my.. that didn't sound right, did it? meh.. eff it) Please, I need more! Quickly!
But I guess this is just the way the cookie crumbles..
you have managed to told yourself yet again it was a fascinating and i can not wait until Freya and Dayton hook up it should be the scene of the century thank you so much for posting and i can not wait for next chapter
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Anonymous02/09/11
Gr8...
It always gets better and better. How do you manage it jazz ? Im just lookin 4ward 2 next chapter ...
Omkar
but hellaciously awesome as always. So glad i stayed awake to read it. This makes me a loser but oh well. Cant wait for the next chapter. You are still getting better how can this be meh, at any rate, i will be glad instead of questioning :)
What are you trying to do to me! Couldn't you have given us another page or two instead of yet another small cliffie. I have had enough stress this week with the sad loss of our precious dog after over 15 years. I loved this chapter and while reading it was wishing you could have let him get back with his family now I have to wait at least a week to find out. Darn it!
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Anonymous02/09/11
You Tease!
LOL. Dazeygrl here. Ok so this chapter was even more of a tease than the one on your blog. And dang - Frey and Day have more ummm anger issues than Loretta and Andrei. And Cedar and Alexei for that matter. haha. Of course Loretta and Cedar knew those guys were their mates so I guess there was that. I am loving Rayne now though. I wasn't sure about her at first. She's so sassy and ... Ummm... Cheeky? Yeah. That.
And as always, I loved this chapter and am longing for more!!!
i must admit. once i think i have the next chapter figured out you post something that leaves me utterly speechless. [; yuhr amazing jaz. keep it up cant wait to see more. hopefully the chapters will be a bit longer *crosses fingers* q;
Well, once again I find myself up late with classes in the very near future! Ah but being tired in class is well worth it especially with a chapter like this one. I'll say it again, I really don't know how you pull those emotions out, it's an artform you've mastered. And yet again just when I think I have it figured out, of course you change it! Oh well sleep now I'll comment tomorrow more in-depth.
title of my comment..... title of my comment............. hmmm!
So glad I waited!
Isn't Rayne so cute looking up in the trees for HER vampire?
Hmm I wonder how Freya is going to explain herself to her brother and his Alpha not to mention Caleb and how is she going to get around them to torment not only herself but Dayton as well???
Questions we all know will be answered one chapter at a time :)
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Anonymous02/09/11
Darn You!
Why are u doing this to us? You dont write for a month and u leave us on cliff divers after cliff divers... please hurry with the next chapter please.:p Oh and buy the way I love Your work
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Anonymous02/09/11
more! more!
uuuhhhhgggg I can't get enough. It's killing me to wait. Please post the next chapters as soon as possible!
Part of me right now really wants to strangle Freya. That was just mean!
Yes, yes before you all start jumping to her defense - I do understand the drive and nature ruling her thought patterns but come on! You have to admit that she did step over the mark with the kiss so soon after her lick. Positive thinking though, it cracked the shell and brought him one step closer to on his 'long walk home' lol!
Other than that - loved this chapter. I agree with Bulltlr - it was very cute with Rayne looking for HER vampire and it was so nice to have Rafe/Lacey back on the scene. I miss all the originals *hint hint*
Wow, I was wondering how the were-vamp interaction would play out now that the genders are reversed, and the way you've depicted it is really amazing.
I love that Freya's so *bad* here because that's who she's been right from the time we first met her. It would have been laughable if she simply became docile and submissive. But to have her toying with Dayton the way she did in this chapter was... just wow.
I loved seeing Rafe in full Alpha mode. The fact that you set this story five years after the end of The Council meant we didn't get to witness those awkward "growing into his role as Alpha" moments though, which I think I would have enjoyed reading too. I hope your muse will nag you until you indulge us with stand-alone short stories of the Armand-Hanlon pack that can slowly fill in those missing five years through little vignettes. *hint-hint*
Rayne is still my favorite new character, but the idea of Dayton and Freya as a couple is now starting to grow on me, so I can't wait to see how you tackle their relationship in the coming chapters.
so Day and Freya both ended up bring out each others pain and unfortuately i believe they are to be mated, Freya won't believe it, she will fight it to the very end just as Day will.. i am also hoping that Gard will make Annie introduce him to the pack so he can protect Rayne, and you know the kids will try to get everyone to calm down..lol can't wait to read more hon, keep up the excellent work...
I love it and yet need more at the same time. I think Dayton is going to be good for Freya. I'm thinking back to the story where her brother had to have Caleb help him because she was crazy. They can both overcome their pain together. Rayne is cute looking for her vampire and I hope she gets to meet him again soon. I think you have done a wonderful job at pairing the mates together. I can't wait to read more and see how it all plays out.
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Anonymous02/09/11
Awful. Just awful. Unreadable.
I don't believe anyone is reading this trite excitable rubbish. The comments seem to go hand in hand with the style of the writing. They're ALTS. except for a few sad people that have nothing better to do in life.
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Anonymous02/09/11
WANT MORE NOW.........Please
Love this story so much it just feels like I need more. I won't be able to sleep now Jaz. What to do..mmm..hubby still asleep, well not for long. I am sure he will be happy to have me inform him that you have updated your wonderful story. Perhaps he can help me get back to sleep in a creative way! Feel the love Jaz.
i knew there was a reason I woke up at 4 am from a sound sleep
This chapter was calling my name. How excited I was to see a new chapter. I was just checking for lack of anything else to do at this ungodly hour and low and behold here it was. Such a wonderful chapter, one of the best you have ever written. I could feel the anguish from both Dayton and Freya. But so glad it was the final push to take him back to pack. thanks again, for sharing your awesome, amazing, fantabulous talent with us. hugs, Kate
No... you can just leave us hanging like this jaz! And that anonymous person who said this story was rubbish is an IDIOT! You are an amazing amazing writer and all the comments and very high ratings of your stories prove that. Can't wait for next week, hopefully Dayton and Freya will get together soon!
to that last anon: stop being a chicken shit and post on a proper account like we all do. are you just too jealous? cause that's what i'm thinking. yet you keep popping up each chapter to try and put her down. yet you're only providing us many giggles and laughter with your jealous behavior. or it's a cover up, that you secretly admire her skill so much.
either way, posting from an anon account is low, just low, specially if you use it to slander people.
and if you claim we're all alts of J then ask an administrator to delete all the posts send from same IP address, see how many alts are left then ;)
besides this rant. J, hun, you've outdone yourself again, but by now i'm not expecting less, so rue the day you do, then i'm hijacking your muse!!
Jaz I don't usually comment but have to admit to being totally addicted to each and every part since the start with FTI but please don't take any bad comments to heart because anyone with any constructive criticism would login and not just use the Anonymous button. People that do that obviously don't have the integrity or courage to stand up and explain to writers who try hard in using their talents and precious time to entertain us poor mere mortals.
I want to say thank you for your writing and as all your other followers say, please, please pretty please, next chapter PDQ. x
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Anonymous02/09/11
Dieting and craving chocolate but got something better
I got my Jaz fix. Thank you. Love your stories can't wait to see another posting.
Not like a pirate - more a cry of anguish. This chapter length is killing me, Jaz. I might just have to forget you exist for about six months then come back and read it all in one sitting. Of course, I can't do that. So I'll just keep watching Twitter for the next update.
What an interesting and unexpected way to force Dayton back into the pack. The stock thing to do would have been have him fall for Freya and get pulled in slowly. I'm so glad you did it this way. The tension put my heart in my throat a little bit. I am a little nervous about how Nors and Ash will be affected by this. Will Ashleigh immediately see the truth in Freya's actions, or will it damage their bond? You've set yourself some intriguing challenges.
Thanks for writing.
24 more hours and I would have been forced to send you into a coma with some very bad poetry!!As it is you have left us with an all too short chapter and a cliff hanger to boot!!!
How do you get off doing this to your readers?!I vote that we(jazz lovers) let you hang of a real smooth cliff so you can have a first-hand experience of what you so callously do to us!!!!
Please dont be too angry with the anon who didn't like your story.I say to each one his own and if he/she chooses to do so anonymously then that is what freedom of speech is all about.However if I catch said individual,trust me 3 hours of my hardcore,terrible poetry will cause a brain aneurysm the size of that alien thingy in the movie Slither!!(you dont want to watch that movie!!!)
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02/09/11
As per usual Jaz you have us enthralled from the first word..except Anon, who reads the story just to claim we are all alts YET AGAIN!! Lol how much we giggle about the abject jealousy this person is showing towards our Jaz on other formats of the internet..Every week Anon you provide the twitter world with a belly laugh at your green faced comments. Im with Mokkelke..if YOU are so sure we are alts ask the admins to delete to duplicate ip's and see how many stay on the comments...oh no but then NO ONE WOULD COMMENT ON YOUR SUBMISSIONS...humm difficlty there lol.
JAZZY post soon....more more more!
Jaz, you are way to talented to even give that ridiculous anonymous comment any thought and I know you won't. So onto the story, Brilliant as usual!
I'm completely addicted to this story! I start to get the shakes around about the time your next chapter is posted because I'm craving a fix of beautifully crafted and adrenalin filled drama. This story, like its predecessors, is like a drug (to myself and based on your many many other comments other readers), one which given the choice I would never kick. In fact, is there any chance of an overdose?
Your world is truely original, thank you for letting me and many others in it.
I like that your moving the story along, its a good pace, not to fast, not to slow, the chapters are tight and well thought out. I will agree with another poster though, I am always a bit disapointed when I scroll to the bottom of page 1 and there is only one more page :-)
"They're ALTS. except for a few sad people that have nothing better to do in life."
Were you talking about yourself?
Congrats Jaz your stories must be superb to actually get comments like that from those who are jealous of your talent and can't stand to see so many people enjoying your work, because if the didn't like your work they wouldn't keep reading them.
LOL, you sure do seem to keep reading as soon as a new chapter is posted for someone who obviously gets nothing from the story.
Oh, wait, you do keep reading and commenting, hmmm, if you keep reading something that you claim is so horrible it seems to me there are only two options, you are a masochist who just loves the pain these words cause you, or, with each new chapter you find yourself less and less talented, the cold clammy hand of jealousy gently closing around your throat, the precious air that feeds your ego slowly being cut off, the understanding that what you create, or are too scared to try to create looms like a spectre in the deep end of night, eliciting the terror of a soul truth that your life, your meaning is dim compared to others....must really suck being you
You create and enjoyable rollercoaster Jaz, keep adding to it and we'll keep riding hon.
Now I've got to wait another week for the next installation :< and you've made me so desperately addicted to your stories that while waiting for each chapter, I'm re-reading everything starting from FTI. Please tell us we don't have to wait a week for the next chapter!
This is going to be one hell of a ride. I don't know how long you plan for this one to be, but maybe scale the speed back a bit or it'll be over before you, or we, know it. Right now the speed is downright reckless. Someone's going to crash hard at the next bump.
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Anonymous02/09/11
Amazing!
Love the interplay between Freya and Dayton! Looking forwards to the next chapter
Yeah yeah, Freya and Dayton are good too, but I really like your Rayne. She is so sassy and...and...yummy... apart from a few things, your Rayne seems like a Long lost twin sister of MY Rayn...definitely would like to see more of her...
why is Rayne so interested in the kids? Was she the first Were-Vampire child? May be that's why she finds the kids interesting? Hmm... Do post quickly...
Oh, Gard is perfect for her...really like THAT pairing...
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Anonymous02/09/11
longtime lover of Jaz
I've absolutely loved reading your stories, and since I only started reading them in the last two months or so, I haven't had to play this waiting game with you until now.... and now I find it's absolutely KILLING me!!!
What a great Chapter! I loved the interaction between Dayton and Freya. She was able to put a crack in that wall of had and now that he has had a taste of it he has no idea what it really is!
tytyty
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Anonymous02/09/11
Thanks the lord your story was here...
waiting for me when I got home today. Otherwise something verrrrry scary might have happened.... (that was a growl, btw ;p )
Brilliant update, I am in awe of your natural story telling - its unfolding just as it should - although I'm never sure of how it should be until I read it! :) - and then it's, *oh, of course!*
But I really don't want you to get a big head from all of this well-deserved support, so actually:
Horrible, hated it, bleurgh, what rubbish...
(yes, it's me!! 'Unreadable' Anon - I am only looking out for you really, silly - don't all of you realise?!!! ;)))
I am sure you are evil really!!
Sitting down after a difficult day to read my favouite story, I just get into it then. . . . no! it's finished for another chapter, arrgghhh!
Come on mate - keep up with us baying crowds! lol
It's coming along fabulously, think I may have another favourite Jaz male, decisions decisions!
Well done hun - keep it coming
love
sue
XxX
The scenes between Dayton and Fraya were beyond HOT. You have taken foreplay to a whole new level. I don't know what to say other than "Steaming Fucking Hot". You have also taken the story so much deeper. What is the deal with the day Fraya became a Vamp, there has to be a good story behind that. And what of Dayton now that his shield has been cracked? And Rayne, what is she really or maybe I should ask who is she really? The more you give of this story the more I want. Now we are on Pack lands with Alpha Rafe and Lacey about to be parents. Plus almost the entire Alexander clan is a member of the Armand-Harlon Pack. And what of The Guardian, what will he think of Rayne being on Pack lands. Again the more you give of this story the more I want. As a reader you drive me crazy trying to figure out what will happen next. only you always stay one step ahead and surprise the hell out of me. If you can't tell by now, I sort of like this story. hehe he
Freya hummm what an interesting development! The big ole bad vamp has eyes for a "dog" Perhaps pack life is changing her more than she thought!
Day... What an interesting and continually evolving character. I rather like the insecure, closed off nature of Day. You've prefected the character style I want for one of mine, you know who heh.
Rayne, I still can't put my finger on her. You've vailed her past very well Jaz, and its quite annoying lol! No worries though, I like the mystery.
English
hehe!
Oh I love it! :) I can't wait for the next chapter....can you post it super quick ;)
Yay! The first!
I'm really loving this story. Dayton is unlike the other male protagonists you have in this series. I like him very much... and to pair him up with Freya is just amazing!
Keep them coming!
Oh my...
Well things are jumping now. I'm actually starting to doubt a little, whether Freya and Dayton will end up together in the end. I just can't see it right now. Regardless, I'm glad that Freya made Dayton go back to the pack. The whole time after she made her threat, I was silently hoping that Dayton would make that decision.
Rafe seems to be doing very well in his role as alpha. He's reading people well and making good judgment calls and Freya's gonna be in for it, when the situation is known to Nors and Caleb.
Overall the story is moving faster than I would have thought, but that's not a bad thing. (I really hate waiting sometimes.) Just goes to show that I can still be surprised.
Ugh! You're killing me here!
I have no clever analogy to compare this too. So let's go with cookies. Let's say you're starving. You haven't eaten in days and then someone appears with your favorite type of cookie. You want that cookie so bad, but this cruel person will only give you this cookie one crumble at a time. It's torture. Torture I say! I WANT TO GOBBLE UP THIS COOKIE! But you only give me crumbles.. (oh my.. that didn't sound right, did it? meh.. eff it) Please, I need more! Quickly!
But I guess this is just the way the cookie crumbles..
(HAHA I'm so funny) XD
Great chapter
you have managed to told yourself yet again it was a fascinating and i can not wait until Freya and Dayton hook up it should be the scene of the century thank you so much for posting and i can not wait for next chapter
Gr8...
It always gets better and better. How do you manage it jazz ? Im just lookin 4ward 2 next chapter ...
Omkar
too short bc im greedy
but hellaciously awesome as always. So glad i stayed awake to read it. This makes me a loser but oh well. Cant wait for the next chapter. You are still getting better how can this be meh, at any rate, i will be glad instead of questioning :)
Ah jeez Jaz
What are you trying to do to me! Couldn't you have given us another page or two instead of yet another small cliffie. I have had enough stress this week with the sad loss of our precious dog after over 15 years. I loved this chapter and while reading it was wishing you could have let him get back with his family now I have to wait at least a week to find out. Darn it!
You Tease!
LOL. Dazeygrl here. Ok so this chapter was even more of a tease than the one on your blog. And dang - Frey and Day have more ummm anger issues than Loretta and Andrei. And Cedar and Alexei for that matter. haha. Of course Loretta and Cedar knew those guys were their mates so I guess there was that. I am loving Rayne now though. I wasn't sure about her at first. She's so sassy and ... Ummm... Cheeky? Yeah. That.
And as always, I loved this chapter and am longing for more!!!
[;
i must admit. once i think i have the next chapter figured out you post something that leaves me utterly speechless. [; yuhr amazing jaz. keep it up cant wait to see more. hopefully the chapters will be a bit longer *crosses fingers* q;
- aiyanna raine
Well, once again I find myself up late with classes in the very near future! Ah but being tired in class is well worth it especially with a chapter like this one. I'll say it again, I really don't know how you pull those emotions out, it's an artform you've mastered. And yet again just when I think I have it figured out, of course you change it! Oh well sleep now I'll comment tomorrow more in-depth.
Not enough stars!!!!
title of my comment..... title of my comment............. hmmm!
So glad I waited!
Isn't Rayne so cute looking up in the trees for HER vampire?
Hmm I wonder how Freya is going to explain herself to her brother and his Alpha not to mention Caleb and how is she going to get around them to torment not only herself but Dayton as well???
Questions we all know will be answered one chapter at a time :)
Darn You!
Why are u doing this to us? You dont write for a month and u leave us on cliff divers after cliff divers... please hurry with the next chapter please.:p Oh and buy the way I love Your work
more! more!
uuuhhhhgggg I can't get enough. It's killing me to wait. Please post the next chapters as soon as possible!
What the!!
Part of me right now really wants to strangle Freya. That was just mean!
Yes, yes before you all start jumping to her defense - I do understand the drive and nature ruling her thought patterns but come on! You have to admit that she did step over the mark with the kiss so soon after her lick. Positive thinking though, it cracked the shell and brought him one step closer to on his 'long walk home' lol!
Other than that - loved this chapter. I agree with Bulltlr - it was very cute with Rayne looking for HER vampire and it was so nice to have Rafe/Lacey back on the scene. I miss all the originals *hint hint*
So worth the wait!
Wow, I was wondering how the were-vamp interaction would play out now that the genders are reversed, and the way you've depicted it is really amazing.
I love that Freya's so *bad* here because that's who she's been right from the time we first met her. It would have been laughable if she simply became docile and submissive. But to have her toying with Dayton the way she did in this chapter was... just wow.
I loved seeing Rafe in full Alpha mode. The fact that you set this story five years after the end of The Council meant we didn't get to witness those awkward "growing into his role as Alpha" moments though, which I think I would have enjoyed reading too. I hope your muse will nag you until you indulge us with stand-alone short stories of the Armand-Hanlon pack that can slowly fill in those missing five years through little vignettes. *hint-hint*
Rayne is still my favorite new character, but the idea of Dayton and Freya as a couple is now starting to grow on me, so I can't wait to see how you tackle their relationship in the coming chapters.
Another cliff hanger...
as usual. I'm thoroughly enjoying the development of this story. Fabulous!
mmmmm
so Day and Freya both ended up bring out each others pain and unfortuately i believe they are to be mated, Freya won't believe it, she will fight it to the very end just as Day will.. i am also hoping that Gard will make Annie introduce him to the pack so he can protect Rayne, and you know the kids will try to get everyone to calm down..lol can't wait to read more hon, keep up the excellent work...
Donna
hmmmm...
I love it and yet need more at the same time. I think Dayton is going to be good for Freya. I'm thinking back to the story where her brother had to have Caleb help him because she was crazy. They can both overcome their pain together. Rayne is cute looking for her vampire and I hope she gets to meet him again soon. I think you have done a wonderful job at pairing the mates together. I can't wait to read more and see how it all plays out.
Awful. Just awful. Unreadable.
I don't believe anyone is reading this trite excitable rubbish. The comments seem to go hand in hand with the style of the writing. They're ALTS. except for a few sad people that have nothing better to do in life.
WANT MORE NOW.........Please
Love this story so much it just feels like I need more. I won't be able to sleep now Jaz. What to do..mmm..hubby still asleep, well not for long. I am sure he will be happy to have me inform him that you have updated your wonderful story. Perhaps he can help me get back to sleep in a creative way! Feel the love Jaz.
i knew there was a reason I woke up at 4 am from a sound sleep
This chapter was calling my name. How excited I was to see a new chapter. I was just checking for lack of anything else to do at this ungodly hour and low and behold here it was. Such a wonderful chapter, one of the best you have ever written. I could feel the anguish from both Dayton and Freya. But so glad it was the final push to take him back to pack. thanks again, for sharing your awesome, amazing, fantabulous talent with us. hugs, Kate
too much tension between dayton and freya...
but loving it! ;0)
No... you can just leave us hanging like this jaz! And that anonymous person who said this story was rubbish is an IDIOT! You are an amazing amazing writer and all the comments and very high ratings of your stories prove that. Can't wait for next week, hopefully Dayton and Freya will get together soon!
to that last anon: stop being a chicken shit and post on a proper account like we all do. are you just too jealous? cause that's what i'm thinking. yet you keep popping up each chapter to try and put her down. yet you're only providing us many giggles and laughter with your jealous behavior. or it's a cover up, that you secretly admire her skill so much.
either way, posting from an anon account is low, just low, specially if you use it to slander people.
and if you claim we're all alts of J then ask an administrator to delete all the posts send from same IP address, see how many alts are left then ;)
besides this rant. J, hun, you've outdone yourself again, but by now i'm not expecting less, so rue the day you do, then i'm hijacking your muse!!
excellent as always, I'm eagerly awaiting the next installment.
Don't listen
Jaz I don't usually comment but have to admit to being totally addicted to each and every part since the start with FTI but please don't take any bad comments to heart because anyone with any constructive criticism would login and not just use the Anonymous button. People that do that obviously don't have the integrity or courage to stand up and explain to writers who try hard in using their talents and precious time to entertain us poor mere mortals.
I want to say thank you for your writing and as all your other followers say, please, please pretty please, next chapter PDQ. x
Dieting and craving chocolate but got something better
I got my Jaz fix. Thank you. Love your stories can't wait to see another posting.
ARRRRRRGH!
Not like a pirate - more a cry of anguish. This chapter length is killing me, Jaz. I might just have to forget you exist for about six months then come back and read it all in one sitting. Of course, I can't do that. So I'll just keep watching Twitter for the next update.
What an interesting and unexpected way to force Dayton back into the pack. The stock thing to do would have been have him fall for Freya and get pulled in slowly. I'm so glad you did it this way. The tension put my heart in my throat a little bit. I am a little nervous about how Nors and Ash will be affected by this. Will Ashleigh immediately see the truth in Freya's actions, or will it damage their bond? You've set yourself some intriguing challenges.
Thanks for writing.
You are very lucky!!!!
24 more hours and I would have been forced to send you into a coma with some very bad poetry!!As it is you have left us with an all too short chapter and a cliff hanger to boot!!!
How do you get off doing this to your readers?!I vote that we(jazz lovers) let you hang of a real smooth cliff so you can have a first-hand experience of what you so callously do to us!!!!
Please dont be too angry with the anon who didn't like your story.I say to each one his own and if he/she chooses to do so anonymously then that is what freedom of speech is all about.However if I catch said individual,trust me 3 hours of my hardcore,terrible poetry will cause a brain aneurysm the size of that alien thingy in the movie Slither!!(you dont want to watch that movie!!!)
As per usual Jaz you have us enthralled from the first word..except Anon, who reads the story just to claim we are all alts YET AGAIN!! Lol how much we giggle about the abject jealousy this person is showing towards our Jaz on other formats of the internet..Every week Anon you provide the twitter world with a belly laugh at your green faced comments. Im with Mokkelke..if YOU are so sure we are alts ask the admins to delete to duplicate ip's and see how many stay on the comments...oh no but then NO ONE WOULD COMMENT ON YOUR SUBMISSIONS...humm difficlty there lol.
JAZZY post soon....more more more!
Where's the closest Rehab?
Jaz, you are way to talented to even give that ridiculous anonymous comment any thought and I know you won't. So onto the story, Brilliant as usual!
I'm completely addicted to this story! I start to get the shakes around about the time your next chapter is posted because I'm craving a fix of beautifully crafted and adrenalin filled drama. This story, like its predecessors, is like a drug (to myself and based on your many many other comments other readers), one which given the choice I would never kick. In fact, is there any chance of an overdose?
Your world is truely original, thank you for letting me and many others in it.
Brilliant, Brilliant, Brilliant!!!!!!!!!!!
Very nice
I like that your moving the story along, its a good pace, not to fast, not to slow, the chapters are tight and well thought out. I will agree with another poster though, I am always a bit disapointed when I scroll to the bottom of page 1 and there is only one more page :-)
huh
Tell me anon when you wrote and I quote
"They're ALTS. except for a few sad people that have nothing better to do in life."
Were you talking about yourself?
Congrats Jaz your stories must be superb to actually get comments like that from those who are jealous of your talent and can't stand to see so many people enjoying your work, because if the didn't like your work they wouldn't keep reading them.
@ Anonymous Hater
LOL, you sure do seem to keep reading as soon as a new chapter is posted for someone who obviously gets nothing from the story.
Oh, wait, you do keep reading and commenting, hmmm, if you keep reading something that you claim is so horrible it seems to me there are only two options, you are a masochist who just loves the pain these words cause you, or, with each new chapter you find yourself less and less talented, the cold clammy hand of jealousy gently closing around your throat, the precious air that feeds your ego slowly being cut off, the understanding that what you create, or are too scared to try to create looms like a spectre in the deep end of night, eliciting the terror of a soul truth that your life, your meaning is dim compared to others....must really suck being you
You create and enjoyable rollercoaster Jaz, keep adding to it and we'll keep riding hon.
Nooooo...
Now I've got to wait another week for the next installation :< and you've made me so desperately addicted to your stories that while waiting for each chapter, I'm re-reading everything starting from FTI. Please tell us we don't have to wait a week for the next chapter!
Wow
As always wonderfully written. U Rock!! Thank you for another chapter, please keep up the awsome work!!
Yeeeehah!
This is going to be one hell of a ride. I don't know how long you plan for this one to be, but maybe scale the speed back a bit or it'll be over before you, or we, know it. Right now the speed is downright reckless. Someone's going to crash hard at the next bump.
Amazing!
Love the interplay between Freya and Dayton! Looking forwards to the next chapter
Love Rayne
Yeah yeah, Freya and Dayton are good too, but I really like your Rayne. She is so sassy and...and...yummy... apart from a few things, your Rayne seems like a Long lost twin sister of MY Rayn...definitely would like to see more of her...
why is Rayne so interested in the kids? Was she the first Were-Vampire child? May be that's why she finds the kids interesting? Hmm... Do post quickly...
Oh, Gard is perfect for her...really like THAT pairing...
longtime lover of Jaz
I've absolutely loved reading your stories, and since I only started reading them in the last two months or so, I haven't had to play this waiting game with you until now.... and now I find it's absolutely KILLING me!!!
Love your stories! More please!
Kali
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What a great Chapter! I loved the interaction between Dayton and Freya. She was able to put a crack in that wall of had and now that he has had a taste of it he has no idea what it really is!
tytyty
Thanks the lord your story was here...
waiting for me when I got home today. Otherwise something verrrrry scary might have happened.... (that was a growl, btw ;p )
Brilliant update, I am in awe of your natural story telling - its unfolding just as it should - although I'm never sure of how it should be until I read it! :) - and then it's, *oh, of course!*
But I really don't want you to get a big head from all of this well-deserved support, so actually:
Horrible, hated it, bleurgh, what rubbish...
(yes, it's me!! 'Unreadable' Anon - I am only looking out for you really, silly - don't all of you realise?!!! ;)))
lol
F
yey and wow!!!
what took you so long? i have stopped reading coz you have no post. :) do not do that again. hahahaha.
another superb chapter jaz. keep 'em coming!!! :)
amazing stuff
as always perfectly written and of course a great story. keep'em coming
Arrrggghhh!
I am sure you are evil really!!
Sitting down after a difficult day to read my favouite story, I just get into it then. . . . no! it's finished for another chapter, arrgghhh!
Come on mate - keep up with us baying crowds! lol
It's coming along fabulously, think I may have another favourite Jaz male, decisions decisions!
Well done hun - keep it coming
love
sue
XxX
As always......
You are a great story teller, I cannot wait to read the continuation......please don't keep us waiting too long.....:-)
JAZ
The scenes between Dayton and Fraya were beyond HOT. You have taken foreplay to a whole new level. I don't know what to say other than "Steaming Fucking Hot". You have also taken the story so much deeper. What is the deal with the day Fraya became a Vamp, there has to be a good story behind that. And what of Dayton now that his shield has been cracked? And Rayne, what is she really or maybe I should ask who is she really? The more you give of this story the more I want. Now we are on Pack lands with Alpha Rafe and Lacey about to be parents. Plus almost the entire Alexander clan is a member of the Armand-Harlon Pack. And what of The Guardian, what will he think of Rayne being on Pack lands. Again the more you give of this story the more I want. As a reader you drive me crazy trying to figure out what will happen next. only you always stay one step ahead and surprise the hell out of me. If you can't tell by now, I sort of like this story. hehe he
Nice touch
allright all rested.
Freya hummm what an interesting development! The big ole bad vamp has eyes for a "dog" Perhaps pack life is changing her more than she thought!
Day... What an interesting and continually evolving character. I rather like the insecure, closed off nature of Day. You've prefected the character style I want for one of mine, you know who heh.
Rayne, I still can't put my finger on her. You've vailed her past very well Jaz, and its quite annoying lol! No worries though, I like the mystery.
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