This piece is a little short - should have made it a little longer! But it is very well written. I love how you wrote as the narrator and expressed your feelings and hers :) Well done and keep it up. x
loved the story and the sweetness and intimacy of the couple... and enjoyed the naughtiness in the end.
Erotic and exciting. I could clearly picture every scene.
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Very nice!
This piece is a little short - should have made it a little longer! But it is very well written. I love how you wrote as the narrator and expressed your feelings and hers :) Well done and keep it up. x
very romantic!
loved the story and the sweetness and intimacy of the couple... and enjoyed the naughtiness in the end.
Lovely! Verrrry erotic!!
Erotic and exciting. I could clearly picture every scene.
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