Too Late for Goodbye

It is a short story

I think the author got across the point that was to be made and the story is entertaining.

Well written and a complete story.

Thanks

Good

Short and to the point. Happened to a laid back friend of mine a couple of months ago, he isn't laid back anymore. The other guy left town within a week leaving most of his stuff behind, it was the smartest thing that he has ever done. The Tommy's of the world need to be put in their place, there are few men left who will put them there. It is a good thing to find out before it is too late.

Round-up

Love the Story but it would be nice to know how everything turns out. does Tommy get his. does Stella stick by her friend.
Does are Hero get a New Better Woman to Flaunt in Jackies Face,
Nice Story

Well done.

Good short to the point story. Your doing very well with your stories, carry on writing.

You were heading for 5 stars...

... But it seems a little unfinished. I like to see the cheaters face SOME sort of consequences for their actions.

Voice Recognition Software

I can come to terms with Writers using VRS, if you do, but for commenters to use it . . is plain ridiculous, or dumbed-down and lazy.

How do we detect VRS? Bad word choice is the dead give away " Does Are Hero .... " indicated the accent the commenter has, even.

" I bought this Voice program and I'm damned well going to use it " seems to be the motto
Cheers
Kilroy

Since when did

fiance = loving wife. To be frank, too short and nothing new.

I thought this was a good flash story...

It still needed a bit more resolution. While I appreciate its brevity and economy of words, I would have enjoyed a more fleshing out as it may of the main characters. Good story and will forward to more.

FINALY....

A "Flash" story that is complete and not some unfinished BS. Well said, well written, and well done.

Getting "prospective?"

*sigh* This is such self-important writing. It's not particularly well-done, and that makes it worse.

Short and sweet

Thanks for your fine work

Good!

Good! Enjoyed it!

good

This is a good story, albeit a bit short.
However, it is "perspective", not "prospective" as used here.

I thought it was good

I thought is was well written. Her reaction to 'you're out of here' was about right. Endless groveling is generally over done. However, as others have commented, it needs filling out, and some resolution to the revenge aspect. As it stands, there is too little in the plot department.
As to originality, while it is to be encouraged, it's an unrealistic expectation, given the tens of thousands of LW stories.

So keep writing.

I liked it. We didn't have the main character make sorry excuses for her cheating or have him wrestle with the decision to break up. Pretty refreshing!

At least he learned about her cheating ways now instead of after the wedding.

Why go after Tommy

Why go after Tommy? Put the bad behind and go on with the future.

Go After Tommy?

I agree with the comment regarding Tommy. Totally out of character for Mr. "in control" to go postal on the other guy. Tommy is probably just the latest in a string of other guys, anyway. Kick the cheating bitch out and get on with your life.

Nice tight story

No complications to a common plot. Fiancée thinks she can play games and she gets caught. At least he didn't end up married to the bitch.

The whole "I need time to get perspective" is bull even if she hadn't been cheating. She had already accepted his proposal. If she hasn't already got the certainty of wanting to be married to him why would he accept someone who has to talk themselves into marriage. That's a very weak start to a supposedly lifelong relationship. "Yes, I love you but I need to get away from you to think about it." Not someone I would want to be married to. I'm not saying she's bad for having doubts (but she is for cheating). But you don't start a marriage with a maybe/maybe not attitude. Better to set her aside and move on.

And yes, Tommy needs to get his ass kicked. Tommy knew he was dissing him. Maybe a busted nose will remind him in the future not to move in on existing relationships. If Tommy didn't know she was seeing someone else it would be a different story.

I like them...

Short and sweet. Good job.

Very nice quick story.

and a quick reaction from the husband.

loved it

short and to the point a real man.

Short and VERY to the point!

I like it and the NO-NONSENSE way the story was written. In the mean time I disagree with the others who felt Tommy needn't be dealt with. In another case, had she gone out and found someone to connect with (minus her ring) it's entirely on HER (as, by the way, it would be on YOU if the circumstances were reversed). However, in this case, scumbag Tom asked about him by name and screwed with an "engaged woman" deliberately, so all bets regarding Tom are off and he is DEFINITELY fair game for whatever he gets. -LBuddG

Your opening comment.

Your stories are good. You do not need to explain that there is no sex in them. With the way you write sex would only distract from the story line. Please do not change your style you are breath of fresh air.

Very Well Done.

Short, correct and to the point. Keep up the good work.

Perspective,

perspective, perspective.

I like

I like it, will there be more?, will he find Tommy or meet someone else who rocks his world the right way?

"My life isn't a game you can play with and then take a break from...."

was he bitchslappin' the cunt as he said this? He ain't going after anyone. She's Tommy's.

Too short

The set up is great, even the confrontation fast and to the point. But then it stops. We don't get to enjoy her suffering the consequences, and we don't get to enjoy Tommy having the crap beat out of him. I know some authors feel it's stylish to stop the story short, but if you don't want to write then why did you begin the first part? I mean you got things going, so follow through.

Fun read

Well paced and well plotted.

Really good snapshot story

Keep writing your stories are one of the few left that have Men With Balls in them. Way too many castrated cuckold wimpass stories making there way to this catAgory. THANKS!

Extra points for this one!

Short & sweet! She obviously didn't value what she had and valued Tommy more. Tommy may learn a valuable lesson about screwing with a woman that isn't yours.
Thank you

Everything Scorpio said and more!

This is what I wish I would have done with the last woman I married (number three, and no more) , then I would have been far better off. This was a great short story with so much in it. Great job CC. R.T.

Not really in the right category, but Five Stars for you work!

You told the whole tale, but I wish there had been more.

Great Stuff

I read all of your stories on here real powerful and good reading. Keep up the good work

Spelling!!!

It is not prospective. It is Perspective! It sets my teeth on edge when the wrong word is used when a simple dictionary/thesaurus check would give the correct word!

hey anon

How do you know the author meant 'perspective' instead of deliberately misspelling the word?
In the context of the story it could be intended - get off your high horse.

Short and to the point.

They are not married yet. But she should be devoted to him, and not Tommy. She's done something that will certainly dirty her social history, so to speak. This chapter could/should be continued and developed into one of several possible ways: the chapter could form a template for a longer story. Nice job.

Too short

Good point made that she had already been caught doing this before. She didn't learn nor did she love her fiance enough to quit playing around. We did not get any dialogue as to her reasons. Maybe she thought him a wimp? Tommy needs to be at least scared or at least scared enough to say no unless she was breaking her engagement. The writer did not cover that either. Maybe she told Tommy that her fiance was a wimp cuckold to be? Without the "Whys" what do we get from these snapshots? Of course we get the point that the main character is not going to tolerate an unloving and disrespectful slut for a future wife. I mean if he had, that would be describing a willing cuckold wimp wouldn't it?

Too long !!

I started to be bored after four sentences. That's how long it should have been !!

that was great!

i wish it was a little longer, maybe make her cry some more and tell how the hunt for tommy went. lol. would have made a kick ass story. though, that was nice and sweet for a short one.

nice hit right between the eyes

Bye,Bye bitch

OKY - DOKY (long o's)

Very sweet and to the point! Short or not I liked this one.

"Now she was crying and I guess I should have felt bad. But I didn't."

Oh this one sentence.

How pussy-whipped are we as a gender?

Nowadays you have to feel bad about dumping your cheating fiancé because she's crying? Evolution evolves in a sinus-curve, I think the female gender in the west is in for one rude awakening.

Why can't the girl quit the acting?

If she really doesn't love the guy anymore, why the meaningless tear. Why couldn't she straighten herself, take responsibility, and take off with her lover?

And the main guy would be stupid if he went along with his threat, when she obviously isn't worth the risk of putting himself into jail.

User

user (boy or girl); hate them.

Short and sweet

John got rid of a future cheating wife and never even broke a sweat.
My man.

HA

WHAT!!!?????

but she's sorry and didnt mean to hurt you. TK U MLJ LV NV

Great Read!!!!!

Short and sweet and to the point. Thanks for sharing

super

short and not so sweet

Well done...

Short but not too sweet, just like you said; good read.