Not because of the lesbian topic but the way the story was turned and how the sex was handled. This seems unique and well thought so please keep up the good work.
I liked the story very much. Very good sense of humour how tables are turned ... However, you might rather sign stories that are each other's sequels as multi-chapter. I read "once bitten twice shy" first ... and half of the fun as well as that story's understanding was spoilt.
But that's only a blame of the way of how it was edited, I don't have the least objections against either of both stories. They are both extremely intelligent and ironic about the hypnotisizing stuff.
There is no third chapter of Jane and Darla's adventures, is there?
I liked the story very much. Very good sense of humour how tables are turned ... However, you might rather sign stories that are each other's sequels as multi-chapter. I read "once bitten twice shy" first ... and half of the fun as well as that story's understanding was spoilt.
But that's only a blame of the way of how it was edited, I don't have the least objections against either of both stories. They are both extremely intelligent and ironic about the hypnotisizing stuff.
There is no third chapter of Jane and Darla's adventures, is there?
I love how you captured the attitude of the average VTM LARPer perfectly, and I absolutely adore the little story you've created! Please consider writing about the girls' time in Jane's hotel room! :)
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You Are Getting Sleepy
Not because of the lesbian topic but the way the story was turned and how the sex was handled. This seems unique and well thought so please keep up the good work.
Very funny ...
I liked the story very much. Very good sense of humour how tables are turned ... However, you might rather sign stories that are each other's sequels as multi-chapter. I read "once bitten twice shy" first ... and half of the fun as well as that story's understanding was spoilt.
But that's only a blame of the way of how it was edited, I don't have the least objections against either of both stories. They are both extremely intelligent and ironic about the hypnotisizing stuff.
There is no third chapter of Jane and Darla's adventures, is there?
very funny ...
I liked the story very much. Very good sense of humour how tables are turned ... However, you might rather sign stories that are each other's sequels as multi-chapter. I read "once bitten twice shy" first ... and half of the fun as well as that story's understanding was spoilt.
But that's only a blame of the way of how it was edited, I don't have the least objections against either of both stories. They are both extremely intelligent and ironic about the hypnotisizing stuff.
There is no third chapter of Jane and Darla's adventures, is there?
Adorable!
I love how you captured the attitude of the average VTM LARPer perfectly, and I absolutely adore the little story you've created! Please consider writing about the girls' time in Jane's hotel room! :)
Jane's Hotel Room
Actually, the story "Once Bitten, Twice Shy" tells exactly what happens in Jane's hotel room!
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