It was beautifully told.
i cant wait for the seond installment
one minute seduction another minute a bit forceful.
He want to...definetly!
She is kinda 50/50 fearful and want to explore/ feel plesure.
Now we wait for the next chapter and the next dear heaven i hope it will be a short wait.
A very well told maid/master story! I was drawn in right away and can't wait for the next chapter. Only a few minor editing errors. What a great first story! Congrats, and I hope you won't keep us waiting too long.
...that's how this story left me. You are one fantastic writer, and I think that you have what it takes to become a phenomenal one. I am very much looking forward to reading your future work!
I haven't read anything better in quite some time. It's great, I can't wait for the next chapter!
fantastic first story, can't wait to read more
5 stars. amazing. hot. must have more...please???
I can't wait to read the next chapter. This is an achingly hot story.
Wow! great! Thanks for writing/sharing this story with us.. this is indeed a perfect story for me..
really great, I'm looking forward for the next parts
You have really blown me away with this exceptional series. One word for you: Publish. You are a serious talent.
Pls, miss. Complete the rest of the story, in the favor of lena. She deserves compensation for being used so torridly.
OMG... this was so intense, and well written. I almost wish I was a virgin again and had a do-over with Renz... of course with the pain I remember from the first time I have to stop at almost.
you are AMAZING! i kid you not i havent ached like this in a very long time, i wish more men were like renz, fierce,demanding yet loving. god my nipples are hard and my pussy's wet just from this story hahaha. keep up the good work!
If not, you should be. Your talents are wasted elsewhere. This is like reading a deliciously guilty harlequin novel. However, this is infinitely better. I love the sex. It's got my mojo rising. Please, don't be offended. I am not comparing you to the harlequin authors. You are far and away above that crowd of formatted plots and vanilla romance, which is too sickeningly sweet to read seriously. At least, for me. I love the duality of domination and tenderness, combined with raw sexual power. This entirety is a surefire heart and soul grabbing potent cocktail. Almost, if not impossible, to ignore or deny. Please, keep writing. Get an agent! I am looking forward to more of this and your other works.
i enjoyed this so much
i really find it very catching and moving... couldnt find no flaws in ur writing ! congrats ! i write myself and i can tell ur gifted.
What a story! This is exactly how I hope every story like this would be, it's just perfect! Very well done, it's crazily hot and so well written, can't wait to read more! xxx
This is sexy and passionate and twistedly romantic. I am hooked and can't wait for more.
They are two gorgeous characters with depth that you rarely see.
dark and slightly wrong but hot
with the story! hot, sexy, well-written, one of the best stories, I can't help but reading it over and over again!
I look forward to what ended he introduces her to.!
"I will own you" aahh, this so hot and I can imagine Renz as someone who can sweep any woman off her feet. And I'm certain that he is the German lord. Interesting, as it's rare for me to find romance stories that has a German alpha male because the most commonly used alpha males are either Americans, Latin, Meditterranen or British men which is why this story is a breathe of fresh air. And I can't help but imagine Renz with that accent.
Though I have to admit that what he did to Lena and my sympathies to her of course, was creepy. But then again, he is still interesting and hot. By the way, I'm a new reader and I can't wait to read the next parts of this story.
I always find myself returning to this story and this particular chapter when I'm looking for something really really really hot. The sex in this one is sooo intense and primal and just so hot with the way you've written it... same goes for many other chapters as well, but I guess this one being the first time is a little special... love it.
The era, the style everything works!!!!
fantastic writing, cant wait to read all chapters!
Ive read this story at least 5 tines and never get tired of it :)!!!
I m starting to re-read this again I think for the 16th or 15th Time...
Man! I must soon start keeping a count of it!
I love u
Outstanding story, fantastic writing. I have read each chapter about two or three times now. I love the relationship between Lena and Renz...just too hot
It's an incredible thing you have here! I have read and reread this story and each time I am blown away by the caliber of which this story is. Nothing against Lit but darling you ought to be published!! Your work deserves it's dues!
I have read many stories on this website, but I have never felt the need to leave a comment, until now. As others have said, you indeed should be published. You paint such a graphic picture, and I was so afraid as I was reading that this story would end with just one chapter, with me (the reader), begging for more. I have read many stories where the author promises to write more, but never does. Then when I noticed all the following chapters, I was like "phew, thank God!". Please, keep up the good work! :)
Pleeeease!!! You do this world injustice by hiding here :) You're a talented writer. This must be published as a book. And you must continue the story beyond! I started reading chapter 1 part 1 of The Keeping of Lena on your Tumblr blog but I am already starved for more. I love Renz and Lena's relationship. It's so much more than just a non-consent story.
This was such a wonderful story... I agree you need to turn this into a full book... please!!
I've tried looking for another story like this and I've had no such luck. Awesome. Love love love!
Poor Lena. I feel very sorry for her in tha Hands of such a Monster. 5 Stars for this great start!
Oh my... *waving frantically with a fan* Wow!
Can this story be found as a book? It needs to be printed and published. That is all I have to say.
Excellent job creating the plot line and shaping the characters! Most of the stories on here are completely one-dimensional. Just 4 paragraphs of 'wham bam thank ya ma'am". I really appreciate the work that you have put into writing this piece and look forward to reading the next installments.
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