All Comments on 'The Taking of Lena Ch. 01'

It was beautifully told.

i cant wait for the seond installment

one minute seduction another minute a bit forceful.

He want to...definetly!

She is kinda 50/50 fearful and want to explore/ feel plesure.

Now we wait for the next chapter and the next dear heaven i hope it will be a short wait.

A very well told maid/master story! I was drawn in right away and can't wait for the next chapter. Only a few minor editing errors. What a great first story! Congrats, and I hope you won't keep us waiting too long.

...that's how this story left me. You are one fantastic writer, and I think that you have what it takes to become a phenomenal one. I am very much looking forward to reading your future work!

the_quest

I haven't read anything better in quite some time. It's great, I can't wait for the next chapter!

fantastic first story, can't wait to read more

5 stars. amazing. hot. must have more...please???

I can't wait to read the next chapter. This is an achingly hot story.

Wow! great! Thanks for writing/sharing this story with us.. this is indeed a perfect story for me..

really great, I'm looking forward for the next parts

You have really blown me away with this exceptional series. One word for you: Publish. You are a serious talent.

Pls, miss. Complete the rest of the story, in the favor of lena. She deserves compensation for being used so torridly.

OMG... this was so intense, and well written. I almost wish I was a virgin again and had a do-over with Renz... of course with the pain I remember from the first time I have to stop at almost.

you are AMAZING! i kid you not i havent ached like this in a very long time, i wish more men were like renz, fierce,demanding yet loving. god my nipples are hard and my pussy's wet just from this story hahaha. keep up the good work!

If not, you should be. Your talents are wasted elsewhere. This is like reading a deliciously guilty harlequin novel. However, this is infinitely better. I love the sex. It's got my mojo rising. Please, don't be offended. I am not comparing you to the harlequin authors. You are far and away above that crowd of formatted plots and vanilla romance, which is too sickeningly sweet to read seriously. At least, for me. I love the duality of domination and tenderness, combined with raw sexual power. This entirety is a surefire heart and soul grabbing potent cocktail. Almost, if not impossible, to ignore or deny. Please, keep writing. Get an agent! I am looking forward to more of this and your other works.

i enjoyed this so much

i really find it very catching and moving... couldnt find no flaws in ur writing ! congrats ! i write myself and i can tell ur gifted.

What a story! This is exactly how I hope every story like this would be, it's just perfect! Very well done, it's crazily hot and so well written, can't wait to read more! xxx

This is sexy and passionate and twistedly romantic. I am hooked and can't wait for more.

They are two gorgeous characters with depth that you rarely see.

Well done!

dark and slightly wrong but hot

with the story! hot, sexy, well-written, one of the best stories, I can't help but reading it over and over again!

Well written.

I look forward to what ended he introduces her to.!

"I will own you" aahh, this so hot and I can imagine Renz as someone who can sweep any woman off her feet. And I'm certain that he is the German lord. Interesting, as it's rare for me to find romance stories that has a German alpha male because the most commonly used alpha males are either Americans, Latin, Meditterranen or British men which is why this story is a breathe of fresh air. And I can't help but imagine Renz with that accent.

Though I have to admit that what he did to Lena and my sympathies to her of course, was creepy. But then again, he is still interesting and hot. By the way, I'm a new reader and I can't wait to read the next parts of this story.

I always find myself returning to this story and this particular chapter when I'm looking for something really really really hot. The sex in this one is sooo intense and primal and just so hot with the way you've written it... same goes for many other chapters as well, but I guess this one being the first time is a little special... love it.

The era, the style everything works!!!!

fantastic writing, cant wait to read all chapters!

Ive read this story at least 5 tines and never get tired of it :)!!!

I m starting to re-read this again I think for the 16th or 15th Time...

Man! I must soon start keeping a count of it!

I love u

Outstanding story, fantastic writing. I have read each chapter about two or three times now. I love the relationship between Lena and Renz...just too hot

It's an incredible thing you have here! I have read and reread this story and each time I am blown away by the caliber of which this story is. Nothing against Lit but darling you ought to be published!! Your work deserves it's dues!

I have read many stories on this website, but I have never felt the need to leave a comment, until now. As others have said, you indeed should be published. You paint such a graphic picture, and I was so afraid as I was reading that this story would end with just one chapter, with me (the reader), begging for more. I have read many stories where the author promises to write more, but never does. Then when I noticed all the following chapters, I was like "phew, thank God!". Please, keep up the good work! :)

Pleeeease!!! You do this world injustice by hiding here :) You're a talented writer. This must be published as a book. And you must continue the story beyond! I started reading chapter 1 part 1 of The Keeping of Lena on your Tumblr blog but I am already starved for more. I love Renz and Lena's relationship. It's so much more than just a non-consent story.

This was such a wonderful story... I agree you need to turn this into a full book... please!!

I've tried looking for another story like this and I've had no such luck. Awesome. Love love love!

Poor Lena. I feel very sorry for her in tha Hands of such a Monster. 5 Stars for this great start!

Oh my... *waving frantically with a fan* Wow!

Can this story be found as a book? It needs to be printed and published. That is all I have to say.

Excellent job creating the plot line and shaping the characters! Most of the stories on here are completely one-dimensional. Just 4 paragraphs of 'wham bam thank ya ma'am". I really appreciate the work that you have put into writing this piece and look forward to reading the next installments.

We must have more please!!! You are a true author! You really know what you are doing. Other stores get too detailed on nonsexual acts, but yours is the perfect balance! I am loving every second! Your sex scenes actually make me cum! I cannot believe how this story has made me feel. Definitely a reread!

I've been agitated, stressing to get the end of the story. I've even been desperate enough to send emails. However, I've now reached a level of calmness, defeated and accepting that I might not finish this story. I've moved on to other stories however they aren't as good, everything reminds me of this story and it even haunts me in my dreams. I love this story and won't ever forget it, so thank you.

Poor Lena! And yet.......if you aren't a published author in disguise I would not only be surprised but disappointed.

This has got to be the greatest precoetal, coetal and post coetal graphic writing ever! Who needs Viagra? All anyone needs is a reading of this ablondegoddess episode and it will most certainly revitalize any and all psycho-physiological deficiencies that anyone has. Pfizer needs to put this chapter on a prescription bottle and everyone will be cured. Congratulations. Ten stars for this episode.

pongman

Truly a wonderfully thought out piece; some small grammatical errors, and typo's but over all I loved it. Haven't stopped yet.

Another fuckhead that doesn't finish a story. Don't bother reading, leaves you hanging.

I still keep coming back to this first chapter. It's that powerful

But I did notice a small discrepancy to do with the time period. I'm assuming it is set in the late Victorian era, from what I have read of the rest of this wonderful story, and something that bothered me is that during this time period women didn't wear panties as a part of their undergarments. You do however make up for this with supreme descriptions and wonderful character development.

I was sad thar I got to Ch 11 and it seem unfinished. But if you want the continuation go to abondgoddess profile. Ther you will see the next part of the series: The keeping of Lena https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1271485&page=submissions

After reading this a long time ago, I finally found it again. This is seriously the best story I have ever read on here.

Can't get over the offensively rude anonymous commenters on here. As though you're here to serve them. Be gone with you, trolls, and leave the lovely author be to write content at her pace for those who appreciate the story, knowing full well it's worth the wait!

I like that the sex in it was described well, but the character of Renz was kind of a turn off for me. I probably won't read the rest of the series because I am pretty sure there is "love" in the air for these two and quite honestly I find that to be pretty disturbing.

3 stars

Looking forward to reading more!

I love this story! Well done.

Loved It

While I was mildly displeased with the taking of her innocence as she was grieving her loss love, it was deeply erotic and I felt every pleasure and ultimately pain as she was experiencing it. Can't wait to read the next chapter in this story which I am sure will be leaving with wanting more...

As far as "Kick-Starting Romance with Rape" goes, this story is pretty good.

So wrong but undeniably hot. Can't wait to read more!

This nasty and you gross

You didn’t say there would be rape? Put a warning next time

Loving it, more please..(as she thought, no doubt).

Absolutely amazing series. But warning to new readers...it has been left UNFINISHED for years now...:(

Referring to the comment below about the story being unfinished, the does story continues in "The Keeping of Lena".

Regardless of how a reader feels about non consent, this is an incredible read by someone who really knows how to write. Putting aside the erotic, this is worthy of a best selling novel.

A masterful reveal of the powerful erotic currents flowing beneath our civilized veneer.

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Five stars. I first read this story many many years ago and it left an imprint on my mind. I just re-read and it is even better than I remembered. Absolutely delightful.