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and he said something about wanting your horse?

It wasn't Richard the III was it, he's always looking for a horse.

100! BTW. Can it be improved,

of course, of course.

Everything can. I like this though.

interesting write, that I enjoyed reading

several times in order to grasp it's fullness

(~.-)

this compact poem that has some very big ideas in it.

S1 is good, and the first two lines of S2 are excellent, with their inversion of Whitman. The last two don't work so well for Poet Guy, though. "Histrionic histories" seems a bit overdone. Poet Guy might consider dropping the last two lines and removing the S break, but that could just be him indulging his fondness for closing rhyme.

Nice poem.

Evocative of primary school. I could smell the stale sandwichs and orange peel.

and I love it because of similar feelings at that age. It drew me into an uncomfortable past. I LOVE it, truly enjoy each word. Not too long, nor too short, like coming in and punching me in the teeth and then running off.

but not all are great. TK U MLJ LV NV

This is really touching. 這首詩真的很美