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Our Little Man

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by Anonymous

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by twelveoone02/12/11

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well
well
tunnel and little man
Cliched concept in rhyming couplets (we'll forgive that, somehow it's seems to fit)
75, if you are wondering

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by tigerjen02/12/11

Very creative....I enjoyed this one very much....well done! :)

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by UnderYourSpell02/13/11

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Would have been better if you hadn't forced rhymes for the sake of it i.e 'And then withdraws from where he's went'. Grammar suffers there for a forced in rhyme

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