All Comments on 'Lament for Lost Libido'

law of unintended consequences

let alone a leg.

do you really want this line in here

100

but maybe because of the "law"

Five.

......and a little sad, but then it IS a lament. Considering its brevity there are some nice lines - like.......

"swinging from the chandeliers

of my love life"

I like it and wish Annie some renewed ooomph.

Tess

and creative, using swinging ... and the last two lines. After the first two lines I kinda smiled thinking you were going silly, but as I went on, mood changed--good UYS.

immediately accessible to the reader, raises a rueful smile.

the 'let alone a leg' ... well, i see where you're at, but also see it could be read differently, as in a male dog lifts its leg to mark its territory... now, if this was written from the male pov, that'd fit in just dandy!

As in, Truth. Spare and clear. I like it! Thank you!

May I help? x

It's not trying too hard to say anything great but the simple contrast of what you could do then and can do now say it all. Who said it was bittersweet? I agree, but doesn't take itself too seriously either. :-)

It got a five and it's getting a recommend. It is direct and shows economy of word without sacrificing richness of meaning, plus it's a topic I can relate to.