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PLUR Psalms 04

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by fridayam02/14/11

After the first line

I expected something better than lumping words together--it stops being poetry and becomes something a machine come up with. There are lovely touches, but they end up not meaning anything.

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by Angeline02/15/11

I sort of agree with friday

there's some interesting stuff happening in this psalm and the theme seems intact, but it becomes list-like so that I lose the poetry of it. Not a bad piece of writing but it needs work, imo.

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