Past Tense

Instead of:

so we hush talk into each others mouth's.

Suggest:

so we hush talk into each other's mouth.

Or:

so we hush talk into each others' mouths.

Don't understand the eighth line.

I remember

being young and making plans about love and life with my husband, now I make plans for the life I may have when he is gone ( when I am brave enough to leave) and time passes oh so slowly now. when we were happy it flew by. I ache to be happy and your poem reminded me of this. You express your sentiments well. I enjoy reading your work

~ maria

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careful, last two lines look like you're almost crting in your beer in a C&W bar. 100

I loved this

You just gotta watch the sentimentality.