I would not try to be too PC when a woman offers her ass and her face would be on the floor within a minute while I started to work her over to get her really ready. But that would make a two paragraph story so yours is better and I have always been very careful of buttfucking, so I really cannot complain to much. Good story and 5 stars
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Anonymous02/20/11
Story may not be too slow...
...but the narrator definitely is.
I appreciate the effort to draw things out, but the male character's ridiculous cluelessness, with all the "duh, what, lube you?" business, made me wonder if the woman in the story was molesting a mentally handicapped person.
Unlike the other commenter, I wouldn't characterize it as "PC" but the guy is presented as so ridiculously dull-witted and ignorant that it was distracting.
Maybe some sort of explanation, like for instance that the guy grew up on some isolated nutty religious compound or something, would have been in order...
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Anonymous02/21/11
Nice Detail
When so many anal stories omit any mention of lubrication, it's nice to see such detail.
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Anonymous02/21/11
Not really
It's not a "nice detail" when it's done in such a way that the character's total igorance of the very concept of lubrication makes him look retarded.
yeah .. umm i found this really funny, i dont know why. I think its safe to say it wasnt meant to be amusing ...
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Anonymous02/21/11
Some men dont think anal...
While I enjoy anal (given the chance) some of my workmates seem quite squeemish about it....and may be the male in this was so shocked that his girlfriend was offering and willing he couldnt get his mind on the job...
I think your male character was too timid. I suspect most men would react far more enthusiastically - although you got him there in the end, which, like most first time anals I have heard about was too soon (nice realism there).
English
Not bad
I would not try to be too PC when a woman offers her ass and her face would be on the floor within a minute while I started to work her over to get her really ready. But that would make a two paragraph story so yours is better and I have always been very careful of buttfucking, so I really cannot complain to much. Good story and 5 stars
Story may not be too slow...
...but the narrator definitely is.
I appreciate the effort to draw things out, but the male character's ridiculous cluelessness, with all the "duh, what, lube you?" business, made me wonder if the woman in the story was molesting a mentally handicapped person.
Unlike the other commenter, I wouldn't characterize it as "PC" but the guy is presented as so ridiculously dull-witted and ignorant that it was distracting.
Maybe some sort of explanation, like for instance that the guy grew up on some isolated nutty religious compound or something, would have been in order...
Nice Detail
When so many anal stories omit any mention of lubrication, it's nice to see such detail.
Not really
It's not a "nice detail" when it's done in such a way that the character's total igorance of the very concept of lubrication makes him look retarded.
Hey guys...
Don't think ignorant... think reluctant.
Nuance is so wasted sometimes.
perplexed
yeah .. umm i found this really funny, i dont know why. I think its safe to say it wasnt meant to be amusing ...
Some men dont think anal...
While I enjoy anal (given the chance) some of my workmates seem quite squeemish about it....and may be the male in this was so shocked that his girlfriend was offering and willing he couldnt get his mind on the job...
If you didn't carry it off...
"Nuance is so wasted sometimes."
Blame your execution.
What was it's name ?
Her asshole... that you were introduced to.
Oh, I don't know...
" If you didn't carry it off...
02/21/11 By: Anonymous
"Nuance is so wasted sometimes."
Blame your execution."
Seems only one person out of over 14,600 missed the point. Not too bad.
Just me but .....
I think your male character was too timid. I suspect most men would react far more enthusiastically - although you got him there in the end, which, like most first time anals I have heard about was too soon (nice realism there).
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