All Comments on 'Pretty Words'

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twelveoonetwelveooneabout 13 years ago
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Interesting starting on a negative, interesting because my comment, mirrors something on one of mine. The grammar queens may have something to say about this ( I assume you worked out the math, he laughed)

Being not that cruel I will never say

you never were that great

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UnderYourSpellUnderYourSpellabout 13 years agoAuthor
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Not sure but don't think it's a case of two negatives making a positive at least I hope not! It's funny though how many times I read it through I didn't see that ... oops!

Maria2394Maria2394about 13 years ago
I liked it

The overall message was presented well but it seemed a little bit twisty near the end, if that makes sense. But, I don't know how you would say it differently.

~ maria

fridayamfridayamabout 13 years ago
I liked this

until the last two lines, which seem to deflate the poem (for all their understandable nature). Perhaps it's the word "zero" which deflates it? I'm not sure. The beginning is so strong it deserves a better end x

vrosej10vrosej10about 13 years ago
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Original and familiar theme (men can be jerks!). I think this would have been a much stronger poem if it had stopped at 'you never were that great'.

theognistheognisabout 13 years ago

For what it's worth, I really like this part of the poem:

"Being not that cruel I will never say

you never were that great"

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