Nice. Only one quibble - "ass juice." I know anal is smelly and potentially much worse, but "ass juice?" I'll rim my wife anytime she asks for it, but the first time I get "ass juice..." Oof! Anyway, hot shit, man. Damn if I don't love a woman who takes control.
Agree with Chimney Sweep: ass juice is kind of a turn-off term. Other than that, this was amazingly well-written (though I suspected the "twist") and hot. Deservedly a 5 star effort!
I loved the playfulness and humor sprinkled throughout the hot "affair." I, too, suspected the "twist" but really loved the story. I can't wrap my head (or mouth for that matter) around the whole ATM thing, but this was HOT!
I like how you manipulate the PoV. We can see how sexy Lois is, although she thinks she's dull and chubby. Your writing is so real, nothing air-brushed or trimmed, and that makes it extra hot hot hot!
Uh ... excuse me, I must just pop out and buy some more batteries ... ;)
English
pun intended?
Ok, Daddy," she said. "And then you'll pound the shit out of me?" this appeared to be timely entry. was it planned?
Fuckin HOT!
Nice. Only one quibble - "ass juice." I know anal is smelly and potentially much worse, but "ass juice?" I'll rim my wife anytime she asks for it, but the first time I get "ass juice..." Oof! Anyway, hot shit, man. Damn if I don't love a woman who takes control.
santorum time!
Agree with Chimney Sweep: ass juice is kind of a turn-off term. Other than that, this was amazingly well-written (though I suspected the "twist") and hot. Deservedly a 5 star effort!
Fun!
I loved the playfulness and humor sprinkled throughout the hot "affair." I, too, suspected the "twist" but really loved the story. I can't wrap my head (or mouth for that matter) around the whole ATM thing, but this was HOT!
Whew phew! so hot!!!!
I like how you manipulate the PoV. We can see how sexy Lois is, although she thinks she's dull and chubby. Your writing is so real, nothing air-brushed or trimmed, and that makes it extra hot hot hot!
Uh ... excuse me, I must just pop out and buy some more batteries ... ;)
Nasty And Hot Story****
I think I will read it again just to make sure it is as nasty as I think it is!!! Thanks for sharing
A nice tasty ass fuck
Efficient story telling, raunchy and earthy. Found this through Naoko' s blog - bless her wicked heart.
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