You have written ONE hot story!!!! Continue this mom/son series
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Anonymous02/26/11
great
wow!
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Anonymous02/26/11
More.
You've gotta tell us more about when you woke up in the hotel, please...
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Anonymous02/27/11
Reminds me of one or two other stories...............
..........but still enjoyable all the same!
Roll on part two............
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Anonymous02/27/11
To those who...
Stated it is like or copied from other stories. What are the names?
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Anonymous02/27/11
the luggage gets a seat?
Why does your luggage get a chair and your mom has to sit on your lap? Wouldn't it have been easier to have the luggage on your lap?
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Anonymous02/27/11
Great story
Keep going and don't make us wait!
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Anonymous02/27/11
I loved it. Great fun.
Many things are fun, but sexual predicaments are some of the funniest. if written as well as this story is. But I wouldn't run this joke too long or you could turn it into something like the Hypnerotomachia Poliphili or Canterbury Tales. This is Literotica.com. Great short work. More, but different, please.
If there are those who believe this is a remake of someone else's work please, by all means, state story. I wouldn't be mad at all, hell I like this type of story and would love to read some more like it.
In regards to the not putting luggage in his own lap, the intention of the bit about her climbing over the luggage and getting stuck with her ass in the air was to show that the luggage was about head height from sitting down.That much luggage would prolly hurt.
Thank you for the positive comments. I really appreciate it. I am working on a part 2 and few ideas. It prolly won't start out with them professing their love for one another or anything like that. One of them is going ot have to get their mind around it. Prolly the son.
Two pop into my mind without really thinking about it-
'Quikie: The Van Ride' by Agnol
'Mom Takes a Ride' by NakdSalr
And then there's one where a mom/son coupling happens in the back seat of a car (dad's driving) on a cross country trip. I forget the name of the story and author.
I have not red the quicky one, but I will be. I have however read the 5 hour car ride. Although they have the same subject: being forced into a situation that results in eroticism between two people who wouldn't and shouldn't have any eroticism they are far from the same story. In 5 hour car ride they seem a good bit more liberal and sexually open to one another. In mine these are two people who would truly never have had sex if they had not been forced into the situation. There is a lot more reluctance involved. Now if I had taken 5 hour car ride and rewrote it but added my increased reluctance and whatnot but called it my own that would be worthy of a plagiarism accusation. My writings are from my mind.
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Anonymous02/28/11
I like it.
It is similar to several stories on the site. But then again, with this many thousands of submissions, think about how many other stories are similar to each other. Halloween party costume mix-ups? Hundreds of 'em. Forced incest? Hundreds more. Drunk/sleeping incidents? Thousands. So yeah, it's a different spin on a common theme. My only issue is technical. Why didn't they just keep the bags in their laps if they had two seats available to them. It would have made more sense if someone else was next to them, but a big tote was between them and the other person was snoring or something. I did like that instead of being 'driven' to it, the characters start out horrified, then give in to their baser instincts. Next the mom ought to want to 'see' what was inside her, but nothing happen, confusing/relieving the son. Then later, mom has one too many and the son is worked up from some girl he saw or something, and they give in again. Keep it coming.
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Anonymous03/08/11
THE STORY WAS GREAT
But to think ,,"on a bus" kept thinking dam wish it was me in his place,
The scene was played great, to bad it was on a Bus.
Is theer any nmore like this ? :) Jon, trucke2@aol.com
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Anonymous03/31/11
This fic *really* needs more chapters.
Too many times on this site i've seen great fics get started, only for them to never be finished.
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Anonymous06/27/11
Very good story.
I agree that this story is similar to others but it would very hard for it not to be with thousands of posts. You put your own flavor to this one though. I like the fact that they fought it all the way until after his 'Monster' popped in.(That was when I exploded) Keep up the good work. Would be great if two mother/son pairings had to sit side by side on next bus and fed off of each other. One black couple and one white. That would be HOT. Suspense is the key factor for me.
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Anonymous07/16/11
more please
more please
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Anonymous08/23/11
whoaaaa more pls
more more more
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Anonymous08/30/11
Very good "son's lap" variant
Maybe in the next chapter it could be anal insertion...
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Anonymous10/04/11
MORE
please make more chapters
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Anonymous10/06/11
Good one.. Expecting more..
A good story seeming so real.. hope u make more chapters to it. But remember, add elements like resistance.. it makes it even more awesome..
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Anonymous10/12/11
The closest to this is..
The story "The Bus Trip" by Blacksnake. It was on Lit years ago but was pulled when published in an ebook. Its still out there on some websites if you look for it.
"The Bus Trip" by Blacksnake is a very short story : your is much more developped.
His is clearer on the luggage department, yours on everything else.
Plus the big dick witch I agree fits well in the story.
I'm not of english mother tongue and understood well the "barfing cum" part as a very violent orgasm (an image), and did not find that repulsive.
Good work keep it on
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Anonymous08/04/13
Wait, you people masturbate while reading stories?
But damn, 12 inches.. that's absurd but fucking hot at the same time.. Plus it's inside his mother who's enjoying an accidental penetration from her son. Fuck that's hot.
is, while unique, perfectly understandable. Also an appreciated departure from the standard handful of action verbs.
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Anonymous08/22/13
Got to nearly 12''
and stopped reading.
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Anonymous09/23/13
Well done
I'm not a fan of incest but this was well written and I could feel the emotional twists they felt while screwing on the bus. The only bad thing? The author never wrote a followup.
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Anonymous09/28/13
COME BACK PALLMALL COMEBACK
Please write some more stories yours are well written and enjoyable to read. I like the public transportation sex angle, it is a very popular fantasy genre. Thank you.
I don't usually like mother-son stories, but this one was very well done. You persuaded me that these were real people really having sex. I don't know what it says about me, but I hope she gets pregnant. I hope they have that bond forever and ever.
I can't believe there's no second part after nearly four years. C'mon I'm not getting any younger. Any woman who can take 12 inches of dick would have some comment to someone, there has to be more. lol
English
A cute story
I hope that the next chapter is soon, because this one is very entertaining and kinky yet kind of a spoof story.
Thanks for the read.
more
fake
fake repeat of another story on here. substitute cousin for mother.. oi.
Except for the big dick part this was good.
Like more to see what happens.....Later at the motel room.
good story
more like to see what happens next
YES
what a turn on, i liked it it could be real , can not wait till she gets it again
New incest storyline
You have written ONE hot story!!!! Continue this mom/son series
great
wow!
More.
You've gotta tell us more about when you woke up in the hotel, please...
Reminds me of one or two other stories...............
..........but still enjoyable all the same!
Roll on part two............
To those who...
Stated it is like or copied from other stories. What are the names?
the luggage gets a seat?
Why does your luggage get a chair and your mom has to sit on your lap? Wouldn't it have been easier to have the luggage on your lap?
Great story
Keep going and don't make us wait!
I loved it. Great fun.
Many things are fun, but sexual predicaments are some of the funniest. if written as well as this story is. But I wouldn't run this joke too long or you could turn it into something like the Hypnerotomachia Poliphili or Canterbury Tales. This is Literotica.com. Great short work. More, but different, please.
If there are those who believe this is a remake of someone else's work please, by all means, state story. I wouldn't be mad at all, hell I like this type of story and would love to read some more like it.
In regards to the not putting luggage in his own lap, the intention of the bit about her climbing over the luggage and getting stuck with her ass in the air was to show that the luggage was about head height from sitting down.That much luggage would prolly hurt.
Thank you for the positive comments. I really appreciate it. I am working on a part 2 and few ideas. It prolly won't start out with them professing their love for one another or anything like that. One of them is going ot have to get their mind around it. Prolly the son.
Some similar stories...
Two pop into my mind without really thinking about it-
'Quikie: The Van Ride' by Agnol
'Mom Takes a Ride' by NakdSalr
And then there's one where a mom/son coupling happens in the back seat of a car (dad's driving) on a cross country trip. I forget the name of the story and author.
Not the same
I have not red the quicky one, but I will be. I have however read the 5 hour car ride. Although they have the same subject: being forced into a situation that results in eroticism between two people who wouldn't and shouldn't have any eroticism they are far from the same story. In 5 hour car ride they seem a good bit more liberal and sexually open to one another. In mine these are two people who would truly never have had sex if they had not been forced into the situation. There is a lot more reluctance involved. Now if I had taken 5 hour car ride and rewrote it but added my increased reluctance and whatnot but called it my own that would be worthy of a plagiarism accusation. My writings are from my mind.
I like it.
It is similar to several stories on the site. But then again, with this many thousands of submissions, think about how many other stories are similar to each other. Halloween party costume mix-ups? Hundreds of 'em. Forced incest? Hundreds more. Drunk/sleeping incidents? Thousands. So yeah, it's a different spin on a common theme. My only issue is technical. Why didn't they just keep the bags in their laps if they had two seats available to them. It would have made more sense if someone else was next to them, but a big tote was between them and the other person was snoring or something. I did like that instead of being 'driven' to it, the characters start out horrified, then give in to their baser instincts. Next the mom ought to want to 'see' what was inside her, but nothing happen, confusing/relieving the son. Then later, mom has one too many and the son is worked up from some girl he saw or something, and they give in again. Keep it coming.
THE STORY WAS GREAT
But to think ,,"on a bus" kept thinking dam wish it was me in his place,
The scene was played great, to bad it was on a Bus.
Is theer any nmore like this ? :) Jon, trucke2@aol.com
This fic *really* needs more chapters.
Too many times on this site i've seen great fics get started, only for them to never be finished.
Very good story.
I agree that this story is similar to others but it would very hard for it not to be with thousands of posts. You put your own flavor to this one though. I like the fact that they fought it all the way until after his 'Monster' popped in.(That was when I exploded) Keep up the good work. Would be great if two mother/son pairings had to sit side by side on next bus and fed off of each other. One black couple and one white. That would be HOT. Suspense is the key factor for me.
more please
more please
whoaaaa more pls
more more more
Very good "son's lap" variant
Maybe in the next chapter it could be anal insertion...
MORE
please make more chapters
Good one.. Expecting more..
A good story seeming so real.. hope u make more chapters to it. But remember, add elements like resistance.. it makes it even more awesome..
The closest to this is..
The story "The Bus Trip" by Blacksnake. It was on Lit years ago but was pulled when published in an ebook. Its still out there on some websites if you look for it.
nice
continue this was vivid keep it up
When will part 2 be posted?
I'm really looking forward to the second chapter.
More please...
Write more incest stories, you're great at it
Great story
Loved this story man...it's got everything I love, accidental/(reluctant would be hot too) incest, public, big dick...keep them coming
Wow!
I just came in my panties reading your story! thank you.
It's a shame they didn't continue in the hotel
sequel?
please oh please make a sequel!!
Delicious
More please - mum and son MUST fuck in the hotel - then later back at their home - hopefully the son makes his mum pregnant.
Sarah Leather, London England
leathercatsuitgirl@hotmail.co.uk
great!
i love bus fucking stories...well done!
unbelieveable
one of the most erotic stories I have ever read. Just had a mind blowing orgasm
only problem...
barfing cum? Really? I dunno about anyone else but thinking about puking while stroking isn't a turnon.
Loved it!
great story hope there's a sequel.
"The Bus Trip" by Blacksnake is a very short story : your is much more developped.
His is clearer on the luggage department, yours on everything else.
Plus the big dick witch I agree fits well in the story.
I'm not of english mother tongue and understood well the "barfing cum" part as a very violent orgasm (an image), and did not find that repulsive.
Good work keep it on
Wait, you people masturbate while reading stories?
But damn, 12 inches.. that's absurd but fucking hot at the same time.. Plus it's inside his mother who's enjoying an accidental penetration from her son. Fuck that's hot.
Barf as a metaphor for "violent expulsion"
is, while unique, perfectly understandable. Also an appreciated departure from the standard handful of action verbs.
Got to nearly 12''
and stopped reading.
Well done
I'm not a fan of incest but this was well written and I could feel the emotional twists they felt while screwing on the bus. The only bad thing? The author never wrote a followup.
COME BACK PALLMALL COMEBACK
Please write some more stories yours are well written and enjoyable to read. I like the public transportation sex angle, it is a very popular fantasy genre. Thank you.
Nice story, good pace
I don't usually like mother-son stories, but this one was very well done. You persuaded me that these were real people really having sex. I don't know what it says about me, but I hope she gets pregnant. I hope they have that bond forever and ever.
500 miles?
That's like driving across 4-5 States.
Come on, 12", really?
It would have been an awesome story if you hadn't felt the need to exaggerate having a 12" cock, come on man!!!
Part 2?
I can't believe there's no second part after nearly four years. C'mon I'm not getting any younger. Any woman who can take 12 inches of dick would have some comment to someone, there has to be more. lol
Four years?
Time for the next chapter I think.
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