Lying on Quantum Foam

This is remarkable. It evokes so many important things to think about. I might have reversed the order of line 6 and line 7.

Outstanding poem. I look forward to reading more of what you write.

silvery moonlight

abyss, clinging, holding. Can you say cliche?

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I love this poem. Your are getting a recommend. However, it needs an edit as there are some cliches and redundancies. It's easier to show them than tell. This just my opinion:

I hold you tightly,
clinging by moonlight,
but you are only

a shadow ,
my antiself,
a virtual abyss
from the false quantum vacuum,
waiting

reabsorb me,
reunite me

with the perfection
of empty blackness.

well i'll try again, since my last comment seems to have disappeared into the ether

i'm of the opinion that i like what's being said, though i'm not enthusiastic about the way it's being said. that's the overall feeling i get from this. however, your title, and 'my antiself' alone are phrases that make this worthwhile reading, for the imagery they conjure and the thoughts they send rippling outwards....

EDIT

Suggest rewrite first two lines using only one verb, you don't need both "hold" and "clinging"

"silvery moonlight"...Ugggh

last two lines maybe lose "with, the, of, 'tion and 'ness, and reorder perhaps.

But I still like it a lot.