Under an Alien Moon

read this

and read it again

and would come back for more. you throw up interesting work.

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This is really good. Epic stuff, stirring, Wagnerian. I think you lose the meaning thread a bit in the death section though, still excellent though. Getting a recommend. You write very well and I am interested in what comes next.

*****

Another interesting poem that doesn't quite seem to deserve a five, but gets one anyway.

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I've looked at your stuff 3 or 4 times, I can't figure out what's going on, I'll assume it's me.
5

A magnificent poem! I thoroughly got it! The imagery is frightening and I think that is what I like the most about this poem! Well done!

hmmm....

some people had problems with me using the word "squirms" and I was only speaking of maggots ...

I have a teeny problem with "burps up" in a poem that is otherwise close to elegant.

I like this line-

~~alien tubeworms and bacteria~~

especially because I have used something similar in an old poem on the passion thread. Also, I really don;t get the use of the elaborate positioning of the poem, it doesn't do anything for the poem, IMO... anyway, I did enjoy the read :)


~ maria