I have been waiting too long for more of your stories and then to get left with this........ Ugh. Can hardly wait for the next chapter.
Please post them faster.
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Anonymous03/03/11
tease!
you always leave us with the most dreadful/wonderful cliffhangers
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Anonymous03/03/11
You are sooo wrong !!!!!!!!!
All the suspense and then a cliff hanger! please post faster i am excited to see the rest of the story!
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Anonymous03/03/11
Hands up if you read this first...
...YIPPEE, I win!
I'm not usually one to comment (always a voter though!) but couldn't resist since I found this in your profile before it posted in the Stories link. Just want to tell you, Jaz, how much I enjoy your writing. Love the children, love the adults, love you (in a totally non-threatening, reader kind of way, of course).
Thank you for always taking me away from the real world...for the all too brief amount of time it takes to read your all too short chapters. Oops, veering into whiny, need-more-from-you territory so will edit myself now.
will have to re-read some of the earlier chapters as thought faith died in an accident while out for a run.
will this mean the end of dayton and freya even before it's started?
love the children, liam has everyone wraped around his little finger already.
poor lily getting upset after her revelation ... but rayne can do it too!
can't wait for the next chapter.
meanwhile, hope the antibiotics have kicked in and that you are feeling better. ;0)
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Anonymous03/03/11
please hurry and post the next chapter! Even a day seems too long to wait much less a week!!
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Anonymous03/03/11
bits
I read every word and sentence so slowly praying it would not end but it sure had to. One of Ur best chapters to date. Pls keep more coming. Thanks.
Frosty, you are correct, Faith was killed on a run with Dayton.
Dayton was referring to the fact that Freya "stole" the memory of Faith's last kiss from his lips by planting her own kiss there. That's the cause of his anger at her, not for anything having to do with her actual death.
Omg, omg, omg, omg, omg, omg, omg, I knew it, I knew it, I knew it!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This chapter was soooooooo good my heart is still racing! There is so much adreneline pumping through my body right now out of excitement that I just might have to go for a run! Finally the conformation that Rayne is the only other hybrid! Yay! I hope Rafe isn't too hard on her and that its revealing sorts a few things out. Oh and invisibility huh? That's impressive!
Loved the appearance of Rafe and Lacey's boy's. I loved Ben's character and was quite upset when he died, but this was beautiful.
Just one thing when Dayton said that it was Freya's fault for him losing Faith, did that mean what I think it did? If so was it well known or not because noone else mentioned anything. But other than that (which is a very nice twist anyway) this chapter was in my opinion your very best to date. It was...wait for it...BRILLIANT!
was a great chapter and i love the whole story. Ralph better be real careful messing with Rayne or his baby sister may get upset with her other brother for taking Ralph apart
Are you for serious! I kindly demand you add more to this chapter immediately! I am enjoying it immensely and can't wait for more.
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Anonymous03/03/11
OMG
I can't believe I haven't thought of this before. I remember you mentioning that in the past there was a were and vampire mating and that they had a child but the vampire council killed all of them. Maybe somehow they missed the child and Rayne's it.
Where is Caleb???? I think R is going 2 need his protection and his knowledge of her parentage! Poor D completely misunderstood his wolf!! More, please.... Please!!!!
Alright jazz I know u only post once a week and Ive been fine with that throughout every story u have written, I have been here since the first story. But this story right here has the greatest emotion and feeling to it. So please post another quickly or throw a teaser up at least. Iv felt more attached to rayne than the other characters and this is killing me to not know what happens to her. Please post quickly
hmmmm so i am right, she is related to the couple in the past, or she is the daughter of that killed couple ....blimey Jazy....you are so good in teasing us *wink*
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Anonymous03/03/11
OMG
first you make me cry now you have me on edge! please please post asap....
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Anonymous03/03/11
Wow!
this is so amazing! plz plz b fast with the next chapter. i will die of curiosity is i m made to wait too long!
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Anonymous03/03/11
More!!!
I'm waiting to hear what happened to freya and how things will pan out between her and dayton...there's a lot of issue between these two - I can't wait to see how their love story will unfold. Rayne is much more straightforward in a sense that she's not as angst ridden as Freya and Dayton. I'm curious as to who her parents are...and her hot romance with Gard (yummy!)...Can't wait for your next chapter.
D
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Anonymous03/03/11
Excellent as always
And another cliff hanger!!! Pleeeease don't make us wait for the next installment!
I love your writing style and I could read your adventures 24/7. The only criticism, which really isn't a criticism, is that you make me wait too long before posting the next section of the story. And allow me to say that five minutes is too long in my world. Thank you so much. Your story telling skills are amazing and I can never get enough.
So I have a story of my own, so day b4 and yesterday am on your stories page hitting the f5 button every 5 minutes because we all know that JC posts every week...could you imagine the abject disappointment when at 2am yesterday I had to go bed with chapter 6 still being the last story on there???????? I only just woke up and am supposed to be getting ready for work but instead I find myself checking to see what's up with chpt 7 and lo and behold it's up......(YYYAAAAHHHHHHHH). Now I've read the story, am just about ready to have a cardiac arrest.....am happy, am sad, am worried...what's up with rafe and his growls anyway? Please no more waiting a week...I couldn't bear it. The suspense would be making a proper nut bag case outta me. And one more thing JC.....we're back on the 2 page thing now are we????? I'm thinking well am definitely going to get 3/4 pages and end up being late for work so even before I start, I scroll down to see how many pages I have....and bam...just 2. Maybe I should stop whingeing now.....once every 7 days is fine and 2 pages is brilliant. Beggars can't be choosers...and am begging
Most cruel and unusual punishment! To be leaving a chapter just there! Oh, the humanity!! And during your best chapter yet! Oh cruel fates! Enough bemoaning? Okay. LOL
Jaz, I understand that you only want to release a chapter every now and then, and I can respect that. But I've got this craaaazy idea, that may be really cool for you!! Ready? Here goes: combine two or three chapters together and publish those!!!! Yeah!!! What an awesome idea! Then the chapters would be like four or five pages long!! Eh? Eh? Whotcha think of that?!! Eh? Top idea? LOL -C'mon! I had to try! LOL
You know you're a great writer when the first thing I did when I woke up was check to see if chapter posted yet! I may be late to work but it was worth it. Fantastic chapter Jaz. I'm really loving this series. Though I don't appreciate the cliffhanger in this one :P
I want to know more! And can I raise my hand too? I would love to turn invisible. And to think that Lily can already do it...can't wait for the next chapter!
How could you do this to me? My disappointment was staggering not having a story yesterday. Euphoria this morning because it was here. And then you leave me hanging.... OMG You are terrific. The way that your stories flow is incredible. I find that in some instances I have to remind myself to breathe. You certainly have my vote.
With bated breath...
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Anonymous03/03/11
Why? Why?
Seriously? You are killing me slowly, 2 chapters, cliffhanger ending...again? I think you get better everytime. Please dont keep me waiting for long :)
Jaz, your cliffhangers are killin me girl!! That was SOOOO not right...lol. I'm sure you are aware that you have us all in an agony of suspense..lol. Does whining, begging, pleading and groveling help any to get us another chapter posted soon? Preferably about 10 chapters long..hehehehe...ok, I'll be reasonable, I will settle for 5 chapters..:)
YOU CAN'T LEAVE us hanging like this!!!! THIS waas fucking amazing!! Excuse my language but it seriously was aamazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Oh I can't wait for the next chapter. I hope you will post it like...tomorrow? hahaha PLEASE hurry!!! :)
So the mating between Werewolves and vampires create werecats or different wereanimals with powers. Is this something you made up, or you got your information from somewhere. I ask because, I thought is was a very interesting concept of the story.
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Anonymous03/03/11
Great chapter!
Jaz you are evil! Another cliffie?! But honestly, great chapter! I loved all the things going on in it. One tiny typo that I noticed - "didn't quiet trust them".... quite perhaps? Lol. Keep up the awesome work! :D
....you are a cruel, cruel woman. This story gets better with each submission! I just wish they were longer. It's like being hungry for a week, but only being given a half of a saltine cracker to slake it. :) On with the next bit of yummy reading!
love this chapter as much as the rest but it kills me to have to wait so long for more. a weeks not that long i know but when your adicted to something even a days to long.
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Anonymous03/03/11
Nice
Well written moves the story along. Chapter size a little frustrating seems a bit short but ah well it's your to write. Looking forward to more
I absolutely love your work and this chapter is another reason why :) What I am guessing is that Rayne is the original were-vamp hybrid and her parents probably died protecting her (she could even be *the* child that the pack initially learned of). It explains why she has no pack and why she has so much in common with the children. Even if her were parent was of the wolf variety as a hybrid she (and the children) may not be limited to a wolf form... aren't vampires often described as having *feline* features and grace? I've suspected this from the beginning but the last few chapters have made the suspicion stronger... I guess I'll just have to wait and see :)
you're just messing with us right? You've totally written out more of the story, but you've just posted this bit to drag us in further, yes? Okay, probably not, but one can hope. Please, for the love all of that's grand, post the next part soon. Must... know... what... happens!
such thought into your characters. To remember and honor Ben who lost his life in "When Worlds Collide". What a tribute to your readers, to know that you care for the characters as much as we do. I was at first sadden at the memory of Ben, and then realizing his memory would go on, like Rafe I was overjoyed. Damn, this is just a story and here I go getting all emotional. Jaz, you are a damn good storyteller!! Enough Said
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Anonymous03/03/11
Holy wow!
I really love this chapter. Just another testament to how great a writer you are. I have really enjoyed all your stories. There are a few typos, but what totally made up for it was the very last part. I nearly cried when little Lily was getting upset. Those words "She didn't want to play this game anymore" grabbed my heart and away I went on an emotional roller coaster. . .but then it cut right off!!! Please, please, please post the next bit soon, as I love this story and NEED to know what happens next! Also, feeling so worried for our poor main character, who is heardening his heart yet again. Poor fellow. AND I can't wait to see when he finds out that his paintings were in his most hated/loved vamp's house.
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Anonymous03/03/11
Ohmygod!!
GOOD ending!! The hysteria you're causing with another cliffhanger is hilarious LMAO! (Me included by the way ;) ) I can almost hear the cries of outrage and heads hitting the keyboardp0.l/;jafoi;goliu ha ha!
Great new chapter. you managed to pack an awful lot into 2 pages (no further comment on no. of pages... ). I was wondering how you were going to get Dayton looking for Freya and this is a great set up - really looking forward to more of that.
Rafe and Lacey's new family - very sweet and tender.
The scene with the children and how you involved Rayne in it was very skilfully done, in my opinion. It moved the story on a huge amount in a very short space of time (or should that be text?). Your style of writing, I don't know what it is, but it just sort of takes me there. I was in that room with them all. And I was Rayne, and.. and I am invisible... and I am a cat, yes a CAT!... and I . I think I've said that before, but its TRUE! (Morwenna Banks/Absolutely - lol!)
Anyway, enough of the plaudits. I am seriously worried that you're going to get a very big head, but I'm not helping, am I?
It was ok, I suppose.
lol
F
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Anonymous03/03/11
OMG!!!
What the helll. i can't believe u stoped it there. i need more... it was sooooo good. please keep writting and no more cliffhangers!
jqjeiqoie uwhuw uhuehwu uiheytbgcjs uud sd!!!!!!!!!!
juyaTghshuhsdoi hduu tytduhiad toadnamdhha ryyttyuya.......!!!
This is the kind of comment you will be getting if you dont stop with the cliff hanging!!!!
English
Soooo not fair
I have been waiting too long for more of your stories and then to get left with this........ Ugh. Can hardly wait for the next chapter.
Please post them faster.
tease!
you always leave us with the most dreadful/wonderful cliffhangers
You are sooo wrong !!!!!!!!!
All the suspense and then a cliff hanger! please post faster i am excited to see the rest of the story!
Hands up if you read this first...
...YIPPEE, I win!
I'm not usually one to comment (always a voter though!) but couldn't resist since I found this in your profile before it posted in the Stories link. Just want to tell you, Jaz, how much I enjoy your writing. Love the children, love the adults, love you (in a totally non-threatening, reader kind of way, of course).
Thank you for always taking me away from the real world...for the all too brief amount of time it takes to read your all too short chapters. Oops, veering into whiny, need-more-from-you territory so will edit myself now.
Hugs,
~ella
thanks jaz...
will have to re-read some of the earlier chapters as thought faith died in an accident while out for a run.
will this mean the end of dayton and freya even before it's started?
love the children, liam has everyone wraped around his little finger already.
poor lily getting upset after her revelation ... but rayne can do it too!
can't wait for the next chapter.
meanwhile, hope the antibiotics have kicked in and that you are feeling better. ;0)
please hurry and post the next chapter! Even a day seems too long to wait much less a week!!
bits
I read every word and sentence so slowly praying it would not end but it sure had to. One of Ur best chapters to date. Pls keep more coming. Thanks.
Aww come on now!
Sigh... As usual you've left us with a fabulous cliffhanger! Great chapter Jaz. The story is developing very well and secrets are being exposed...
Regarding how Faith died
Frosty, you are correct, Faith was killed on a run with Dayton.
Dayton was referring to the fact that Freya "stole" the memory of Faith's last kiss from his lips by planting her own kiss there. That's the cause of his anger at her, not for anything having to do with her actual death.
Superb!
LOVE this chapter. I think u should just compile these stories and publish a book! Awesome Job Jaz! Made me cry again!
Oh My God!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Omg, omg, omg, omg, omg, omg, omg, I knew it, I knew it, I knew it!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This chapter was soooooooo good my heart is still racing! There is so much adreneline pumping through my body right now out of excitement that I just might have to go for a run! Finally the conformation that Rayne is the only other hybrid! Yay! I hope Rafe isn't too hard on her and that its revealing sorts a few things out. Oh and invisibility huh? That's impressive!
Loved the appearance of Rafe and Lacey's boy's. I loved Ben's character and was quite upset when he died, but this was beautiful.
Just one thing when Dayton said that it was Freya's fault for him losing Faith, did that mean what I think it did? If so was it well known or not because noone else mentioned anything. But other than that (which is a very nice twist anyway) this chapter was in my opinion your very best to date. It was...wait for it...BRILLIANT!
Eternal Groupie Zooey :)
Oh! Surprise surprise a cliffhanger! Grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr!
Wonderful chapter but about ten pages to short.LOL
great chapter
was a great chapter and i love the whole story. Ralph better be real careful messing with Rayne or his baby sister may get upset with her other brother for taking Ralph apart
OH YEEEEEEEEAAAAAaa
GO JAZZY GO!!!!!LOL
Ugh
Are you for serious! I kindly demand you add more to this chapter immediately! I am enjoying it immensely and can't wait for more.
OMG
I can't believe I haven't thought of this before. I remember you mentioning that in the past there was a were and vampire mating and that they had a child but the vampire council killed all of them. Maybe somehow they missed the child and Rayne's it.
OMG
Where is Caleb???? I think R is going 2 need his protection and his knowledge of her parentage! Poor D completely misunderstood his wolf!! More, please.... Please!!!!
Can anyone say Cliffhanger????
Great Chapter cant wait for the next one :)
PLEASE!
DO NOT MAKE US WAIT A WEEK! POST NEXT CH NOW!
Asking a favor
Alright jazz I know u only post once a week and Ive been fine with that throughout every story u have written, I have been here since the first story. But this story right here has the greatest emotion and feeling to it. So please post another quickly or throw a teaser up at least. Iv felt more attached to rayne than the other characters and this is killing me to not know what happens to her. Please post quickly
hmmmm so i am right, she is related to the couple in the past, or she is the daughter of that killed couple ....blimey Jazy....you are so good in teasing us *wink*
OMG
first you make me cry now you have me on edge! please please post asap....
Wow!
this is so amazing! plz plz b fast with the next chapter. i will die of curiosity is i m made to wait too long!
More!!!
I'm waiting to hear what happened to freya and how things will pan out between her and dayton...there's a lot of issue between these two - I can't wait to see how their love story will unfold. Rayne is much more straightforward in a sense that she's not as angst ridden as Freya and Dayton. I'm curious as to who her parents are...and her hot romance with Gard (yummy!)...Can't wait for your next chapter.
D
Excellent as always
And another cliff hanger!!! Pleeeease don't make us wait for the next installment!
Love the story
I love your writing style and I could read your adventures 24/7. The only criticism, which really isn't a criticism, is that you make me wait too long before posting the next section of the story. And allow me to say that five minutes is too long in my world. Thank you so much. Your story telling skills are amazing and I can never get enough.
(Hands clapping until the skin falls out?)
So I have a story of my own, so day b4 and yesterday am on your stories page hitting the f5 button every 5 minutes because we all know that JC posts every week...could you imagine the abject disappointment when at 2am yesterday I had to go bed with chapter 6 still being the last story on there???????? I only just woke up and am supposed to be getting ready for work but instead I find myself checking to see what's up with chpt 7 and lo and behold it's up......(YYYAAAAHHHHHHHH). Now I've read the story, am just about ready to have a cardiac arrest.....am happy, am sad, am worried...what's up with rafe and his growls anyway? Please no more waiting a week...I couldn't bear it. The suspense would be making a proper nut bag case outta me. And one more thing JC.....we're back on the 2 page thing now are we????? I'm thinking well am definitely going to get 3/4 pages and end up being late for work so even before I start, I scroll down to see how many pages I have....and bam...just 2. Maybe I should stop whingeing now.....once every 7 days is fine and 2 pages is brilliant. Beggars can't be choosers...and am begging
Oh no, you did not!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Most cruel and unusual punishment! To be leaving a chapter just there! Oh, the humanity!! And during your best chapter yet! Oh cruel fates! Enough bemoaning? Okay. LOL
Jaz, I understand that you only want to release a chapter every now and then, and I can respect that. But I've got this craaaazy idea, that may be really cool for you!! Ready? Here goes: combine two or three chapters together and publish those!!!! Yeah!!! What an awesome idea! Then the chapters would be like four or five pages long!! Eh? Eh? Whotcha think of that?!! Eh? Top idea? LOL -C'mon! I had to try! LOL
Exciting
You know you're a great writer when the first thing I did when I woke up was check to see if chapter posted yet! I may be late to work but it was worth it. Fantastic chapter Jaz. I'm really loving this series. Though I don't appreciate the cliffhanger in this one :P
I want to know more! And can I raise my hand too? I would love to turn invisible. And to think that Lily can already do it...can't wait for the next chapter!
What is the Matter With YOU?
How could you do this to me? My disappointment was staggering not having a story yesterday. Euphoria this morning because it was here. And then you leave me hanging.... OMG You are terrific. The way that your stories flow is incredible. I find that in some instances I have to remind myself to breathe. You certainly have my vote.
With bated breath...
Why? Why?
Seriously? You are killing me slowly, 2 chapters, cliffhanger ending...again? I think you get better everytime. Please dont keep me waiting for long :)
OMG..You did it again!
Jaz, your cliffhangers are killin me girl!! That was SOOOO not right...lol. I'm sure you are aware that you have us all in an agony of suspense..lol. Does whining, begging, pleading and groveling help any to get us another chapter posted soon? Preferably about 10 chapters long..hehehehe...ok, I'll be reasonable, I will settle for 5 chapters..:)
OMG OMG OMG OMG!!!!
YOU CAN'T LEAVE us hanging like this!!!! THIS waas fucking amazing!! Excuse my language but it seriously was aamazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Oh I can't wait for the next chapter. I hope you will post it like...tomorrow? hahaha PLEASE hurry!!! :)
Awsome.
That was fucking AWSOME......please hurry and post the next Chapter.
Question???????
So the mating between Werewolves and vampires create werecats or different wereanimals with powers. Is this something you made up, or you got your information from somewhere. I ask because, I thought is was a very interesting concept of the story.
Great chapter!
Jaz you are evil! Another cliffie?! But honestly, great chapter! I loved all the things going on in it. One tiny typo that I noticed - "didn't quiet trust them".... quite perhaps? Lol. Keep up the awesome work! :D
Painfully obvious.....
....you are a cruel, cruel woman. This story gets better with each submission! I just wish they were longer. It's like being hungry for a week, but only being given a half of a saltine cracker to slake it. :) On with the next bit of yummy reading!
Wow!
I think that says it best.
love it
love this chapter as much as the rest but it kills me to have to wait so long for more. a weeks not that long i know but when your adicted to something even a days to long.
Nice
Well written moves the story along. Chapter size a little frustrating seems a bit short but ah well it's your to write. Looking forward to more
you gave me hope!!
this chapter got me reading again. Thank God!!!
Do not make me wait long.... i will not read if you will not post. :)
What a wonderful chapter again! ooh....such talent. keep it coming Jazz. :) kudos!!!
Wow!!!
I absolutely love your work and this chapter is another reason why :) What I am guessing is that Rayne is the original were-vamp hybrid and her parents probably died protecting her (she could even be *the* child that the pack initially learned of). It explains why she has no pack and why she has so much in common with the children. Even if her were parent was of the wolf variety as a hybrid she (and the children) may not be limited to a wolf form... aren't vampires often described as having *feline* features and grace? I've suspected this from the beginning but the last few chapters have made the suspicion stronger... I guess I'll just have to wait and see :)
omg omg omg
you're just messing with us right? You've totally written out more of the story, but you've just posted this bit to drag us in further, yes? Okay, probably not, but one can hope. Please, for the love all of that's grand, post the next part soon. Must... know... what... happens!
Now we need to wait another 10 days...
...which are not going to pass fast enough!
withdrawl!
I know your work is worth the wait but gosh it is hard to wait!!
Jaz, You Put
such thought into your characters. To remember and honor Ben who lost his life in "When Worlds Collide". What a tribute to your readers, to know that you care for the characters as much as we do. I was at first sadden at the memory of Ben, and then realizing his memory would go on, like Rafe I was overjoyed. Damn, this is just a story and here I go getting all emotional. Jaz, you are a damn good storyteller!! Enough Said
Holy wow!
I really love this chapter. Just another testament to how great a writer you are. I have really enjoyed all your stories. There are a few typos, but what totally made up for it was the very last part. I nearly cried when little Lily was getting upset. Those words "She didn't want to play this game anymore" grabbed my heart and away I went on an emotional roller coaster. . .but then it cut right off!!! Please, please, please post the next bit soon, as I love this story and NEED to know what happens next! Also, feeling so worried for our poor main character, who is heardening his heart yet again. Poor fellow. AND I can't wait to see when he finds out that his paintings were in his most hated/loved vamp's house.
Ohmygod!!
GOOD ending!! The hysteria you're causing with another cliffhanger is hilarious LMAO! (Me included by the way ;) ) I can almost hear the cries of outrage and heads hitting the keyboardp0.l/;jafoi;goliu ha ha!
Great new chapter. you managed to pack an awful lot into 2 pages (no further comment on no. of pages... ). I was wondering how you were going to get Dayton looking for Freya and this is a great set up - really looking forward to more of that.
Rafe and Lacey's new family - very sweet and tender.
The scene with the children and how you involved Rayne in it was very skilfully done, in my opinion. It moved the story on a huge amount in a very short space of time (or should that be text?). Your style of writing, I don't know what it is, but it just sort of takes me there. I was in that room with them all. And I was Rayne, and.. and I am invisible... and I am a cat, yes a CAT!... and I . I think I've said that before, but its TRUE! (Morwenna Banks/Absolutely - lol!)
Anyway, enough of the plaudits. I am seriously worried that you're going to get a very big head, but I'm not helping, am I?
It was ok, I suppose.
lol
F
OMG!!!
What the helll. i can't believe u stoped it there. i need more... it was sooooo good. please keep writting and no more cliffhangers!
kjndkwejhopjkfekfn!!!!!!!!!
jqjeiqoie uwhuw uhuehwu uiheytbgcjs uud sd!!!!!!!!!!
juyaTghshuhsdoi hduu tytduhiad toadnamdhha ryyttyuya.......!!!
This is the kind of comment you will be getting if you dont stop with the cliff hanging!!!!
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