All Comments on 'Dreaming Of Our Love Affair'

by vrosej10

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
WTF??????????????

I'm sure someone will love it rave about it nominate it for a H or something but if I wanted a puzzle I would buy the Times for the crossword disapointing from you who obviously has talent use it

UnderYourSpellUnderYourSpellabout 13 years ago
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I think Anon has no soul or just read and didn't open his/her mind to the depth of meaning. Must be awful to have such a closed mind. I like this a lot and you know I wouldn't say that if it wasn't true, I don't go round cosying up to people for the sake of it. I love the idea of the flaming hair and the water boiling, one thng I'm not so fond of is the title which I think should have more oomph

ishtatishtatabout 13 years ago
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Not one of vrosej10's best, but the best on a day when there are a bunch of doozies posted. At least half a dozen wouldn't rate a 1

Anon your spelling is disappointing? (that's a cryptic clue!) and in any case anyone with serious pretensions to crossword solving does "The Listener" crossword not "The Times"

twelveoonetwelveooneabout 13 years ago
WTF??????????????

well, I fived it, I was trying to decide, should I really 4 this sucka, saw the comments, decided I didn't...

I like this:

I hide in bracken;

Maria2394Maria2394about 13 years ago
I gave it a 4

It's not bad, but it isn't your best. It feels like something is missing and I just can't put my finger on it....I will say that you never disappoint me, because what you write and how you write it is always interesting and very often, something new. I enjoy reading you. :)

~ maria

buttersbuttersabout 13 years ago
not wild about the title, V, but...

the heat, the passion, the steam of this erupts. love the idea of 'I become obsidian', that melted volcanic glass.. ok, i have to ask: are you taking liberties inasmuch as lava becomes obsidian through fast cooling rather than the actual heat applied, or are you suggesting the look in her eyes super-cools you? which would be great, a fire/ice thing like Tess' write. the viscous, pulsing extrusion of you/your passion (yeah yeah, the narrator's) chilled suddenly by her ice-cold look... i'm going to opt for you knowing full well what you intended since you are far from daft, and sharp as an obsidian flake when the meds aren't muffling your thinking.

the line 'i hide in bracken' does feel slightly off kilter. not quite sure why... bracken is tinder-dry. the heat would set it alight. perhaps this leads to the obsidian but i so want it to be the first interpretation, just for geological correctness ;D

PoetGuyPoetGuyabout 13 years ago
Short, perhaps too short, but interesting.

Sounds like you are having an affair with Dark Phoenix. Poet Guy likes the boiling trout--that's not an image one comes across everyday.

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