by Antonio_y_Cleopatra
Loved the first chapter and the second was even better. Please continue as I can't wait for following chapters.
Every now and then a story comes along that actualy has a dynamic cast of characters that seem to grow and develop. I can't wait to see where your imagination takes us in up-comming chapters.
Thank you for a refreshing story by an obviously talented writer.
This is an exceptional story. Very well written with a very believable character interaction. I find myself getting lost in the story and losing reality for awhile. To me, that is the sign of excellent writing. I really look forward to future chapters.
I like the premise of the story, with some limits:
I think, while it's obvious Cathy needs some help to open up, you've not dealt on why. Most women manage to open up to their sexual without having to go through therapy to do it. So some backfill on why Cathy is struggling with that would make it more believable.
Also, you confuse Kelly and Cathy near the end of this section.
I thought your timing is done extremely well, you aren't rushing into the heat of the story but taking your time to build on different parts of the story. I thought your characters are being developed well. all in all, great story!
I really don't understand why this series gets such a high score. What I see is some low grade pop psychology with the script and choreography for a minor porno. 2* because at least it is literate, unlike a lot on this site.
It's pretty damn good, reasonably literate and rather satisfying.
If i'd paid $47.50 for the hardcover edition, i might be pouting
like the previous commenter.
The ambition here isn't great literature, by in large.
No complaint at all!
I realized that this has been out for a while. I dont understand why people haven't left any comments.
I've mentioned on other posts,...I really enjoy reading you.
Josie
The social and moral considerations are clearly laid ( pardon) out and articulated.
The dialogue is just a bit wooden, but some of that is justifiable.
This story is hot. I’m looking forward to learning how it continues to unfold.