All Comments on 'The Punishment'

Good buildup, but then the 'action' statrt with him fingering her. Why the rush? What (could/should have) happened first? Why not force ther to strip, step by step, slowly -- with reluctance every step of the way? Why not some voyeurism first? Why not slow steps of touching various parts of her body -- first the more innocuous, then -- eventually breasts, ass and pussy? Maybe a little bondage while this is going on?Perhaps blindfolding her so she couldnt see. Perhaps forcing her to touch herself -- after she'd warmed up and wasn't protesting so much? How about a little pussy kissing and eating to an orgasm -- or perhaps to just BEFORE an orgasm to get her so hot that she'd do anything to cum?

The story is in the getting there, not just the fucking.

should write their own story, incorporating all of the elements that he/she lists. This story works very well the way it is, and I look forward to seeing where it goes next.

looking over the feedback few as they are tells you

what life if getting to be like!

i agree..if she had 1 teacher this way,she wouldnt

be as shy about offering herself to others when the need

arose...but forcing her to do something!

shows the age of the post...hehe

chilvery is behind the dumpster,16 is behind the boys club,

and respect for your elders is dead and gone!

there is so much more to read, i can't wait for the next chapter...

please don't make us wait for the next one that is on the edge of your mind.... lol i can feel it, and i know you want to write it

thank you for this very exciting chapter in what looks as though it could be many chapters..... please

You see i read well over 60/70 stories per day and the ones like yours simple yet

explanatory are the best KEEP up the good work.

That was so hot, the way he wanted her so bad that he just took her. And the way she let it happen, so hot. I had a teacher this year and I woud have loved it if he did this to me. Of course he never would, but mmmmmmmmm if he did.

Very Hot, but she got off lightly. Hope you have more in store for her!