Glory Hole Surprise

Nice

Good story liked the ending keep it up

A possible twist?

It would have been funny if their father had come in as well.

My god man what do you eat to produce that much cum in a day?

An alright story, not as good a some of your others.

thats a lot

Thats a lot of cock in one night. Bet her jaws hurt like hell. Like someone else said wonder if Daddy didn't show up a time or two.

Big Chief, that's gross!

But it is 1 helluvan interesting premise! JGC, suppose he ran into her brother 1 night?

To Big Chief and all

Yes that would have been interesting, but that story has already appeared on Literotica. (The girl wants to do her boyfriend through the glory hole so they go to the adult bookstore that has some. She goes to get ready, then the boyfriend goes to the wrong booth where he gets a great blow job. After leaving he walks out and waits for her. While waiting the girl's dad walks around from the other side while fixing his belt and gives him kudos for coming here instead of corrupting his little angel. Then dad leaves and the girl walks around from that same side while the boyfriend realizes what just happened.) Can't remember the title at this time. Other than that, I guess you will just have to let your own imagination run wild!

does she end up preggers?

what would daddy think then?

I was hoping Brother would have told her to keep the glory hole job.

Very best

fantastic… astonishing… incredible….very good….very hardware fuck incest brother/sister wow! OH MY GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOODDDDDD!!!!

fucking Awesome

two points. the glory hole works both ways.. how many times can you make her cum with your tongue/cock???

From a literary point of view

The dialogue was borderline horrible. Fun story and I read through to the end. Very enjoyable, but the dialogue was so against the flow it was a struggle for me to get past it.

Help me oh literary Anonymous one

Thank you for your most helpful comment. Please take the next step and get an author name, then post your own works so I can know what to emulate! This is not sour grapes, your comment tells me nothing so please help.

Don't change a thing.

Dude, love what you do, your stories kick ass. To hell with these anon fucktards that think they're literary critics and editors. Keep it up, more of us like what you do than not.

Not a writer

I am not a writer but a reader... and I just had to say this story blew me away thank you

Very Good.

So what if the dialogue is contrived and stilted? So what if every girl/woman has multiple orgasms and the guy is like a fuck machine with an enormous cock? It's fantasy, people, and pretty damned good fantasy at that.
Reality is depressing and all around us so take a few moments to diddle (or stroke) yourself while you use your imagination to imagine it was you. That's what this site is all about, isn't it?

My Aching Balls!

Great story. I know it's fantasy, but it's great fantasy, and my balls will only be aching for a little while... Then, I'll relieve them.

re d-dawg

He said you need to work on your dialogue, asshole.
Good stories, lousy attitude. And don't give me that write your own shit. If you've ever said "that movie sucked" then slap yourself, 'cause how many films have YOU made. Or some other example, if you're actually the third Cohen brother in disguise.

Wow people can be so bitter lol. Good story D Dawg, if critics and cowards don't like it, fuck em.

An excellent story

by a highly gifted writer, very original and creative. Pay no attention to the niggling critics. Personally, though, I would have preferred it if it had been his mother sucking off his big stiff prick and draining his hot young balls. Moms do that so well to their boys. Maybe next time.

Thanks!

Loved your hot hot story! I added you to my favorites list and look forward to reading more hot writings you have posted here. Stay hot, stay hard, have fun of any and all kinds. You have made the day for this older bi man in Missouri.

wow i wish

that was the best story i read yet

VERY beautiful story

Loved the brother and sister interaction. Would suggest a followup where the sister misses the numerous and casual blowjobs to others. Maybe work out an arrangement where she can blow lots of other guys in a controlled setting. Focus on the sweetness of the sister giving head, swallowing cum and her pleasure along the way.

I'm a Gloryhole slut

My brother taught me to suck cock when I was very young and I struggled to find guys to suck for years. I then found out about glory holes. I have sucked hundreds of guys threw those holes. I have been told I am very good . There is no better compliment than to have a line of guys waiting to get into the booth next to you when they see you go in to it. Glory holes are getting harder to find in Allentown, Pa.I miss the old days of doing 10 or 12 guys one after the other. Thanks for giving me back some of my memories with your story.

good story

Glory holes are a thing of the past here in Denver, at least I can't find one. I sure could use a good blow job. I like the story, thanks

Regular old gloryholes are going away. In bigger cities there are some club like places but most of them require a membership and/or a monthly fee.

Most people seem to hookup online now, either a membership site like Squirt.Org or something like CraigsList.com......

I loved this story

The best thing is that it falls within the realm of possibility and is not totally farfetched.

Good story.I enjoy going to gloryholes where guys take their wives to suck anonymous cock. Gloryhole wives are so hot. At an adult theater near us they let women in unescorted and I've been sucked by some very young women with a cum fetish. I stick around to see who leaves the gloryhole booth and a few times I've seen some couples I recognized.

Fun, if a bit improbable story

This is a fun read, though it does require a leap of faith that for some may be a bit too much. The notion that a woman can give blowjobs for hours on end without really any break borders on the silly. Moreover, a club paying women to provide sexual services would violate the law in most of the US.

That aside, there is some real heat here. The characters are written with affection. While their relationship lacks any emotional depth, they are obviously having fun; call it siblings with benefits.

My only serious issue is with the dialog; something that has been raised before. You asked for some advice, so here it is.

Dialog is especially difficult because it requires the writer to get inside his characters. In order for dialog to be convincing, you must first ask yourself why are they speaking? How are they feeling as they speak (i.e. what is their inflection?)? And, what are they trying to say (i.e. the point they are trying to get across)? If you think it through, you will probably find that less is more.

Finally, with respect to dialog, think of your story as a script for a play. Try acting out your character's lines by reading them out loud in front of a mirror. I know it sounds corny, but it works. For example, in the movie Taxi Driver, Robert De Niro practised the line "You talkin' to me?" in front of a mirror some 23 times before settling on the screen version.

Good luck!

Really liked the story

I especially liked the fact that there was no forcing of sexual activity. I like incest porn more often than anything else because it usually does not (or at least much more of the time does not) involve forced situations. I find it to usually involve much more love than much/most other porn involves.
That being said... I have only one problem with the story... The last night, she says she gave 193 blowjobs, starting at 6:00 pm... Now since I have never gone to a gloryhole, nor did my wife usually do BJs, I don't know how long it would usually take ON AVERAGE. But, if it averaged 2 minutes each, we are talking like 6 and 1/2 hours, and I would have to guess that it probably averages more like 5 minutes so we are talking 16 hours; that means 10:00 am the next morning... Can't see that happening no matter how much I like the idea ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

finding out your sister is a prostitute in STD city

It would have been hotter if she hadn't sucked off hundreds of other guys, and done it without protection, perhaps if it had been her first night, or invited by a girlfriend to take a single turn at the hole, it wouldn't be so off putting.
It might just be a stroke story, but he should probably also have been bothered by the fact that his sister is a prostitute, or where her mouth has been when she kissed him.
He should also have tried to stop her from going back to the club at all, her saying that she has commitments, as if there was no way to get out of it, just sounds stupid.