...you need a little work on spelling. The errors weren't major and were probably just typing errors (like inside becoming insider twice in the story). Just clean up the few errors and you have a truly amazing story.
Be more like EH, less like Dickens...
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Great story, but...
...you need a little work on spelling. The errors weren't major and were probably just typing errors (like inside becoming insider twice in the story). Just clean up the few errors and you have a truly amazing story.
long sentences, paragraphs difficult to follow.
Be more like EH, less like Dickens...
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