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I tried to read this...
...and parts of it were good. But in a story, it's YOU not U, and capitalization if names and sentences is important. The kind of typing that works in chat doesn't work here. "we both know that u don't want me anymore than I want you so don't look at me that way." Doesn't cut it. Lit has editors available for free, that can help you catch things like lower case at the beginning of a sentence, or starting someone's name with lower case.
ok really???
if you have read the things that are on here they are not the only person that has made a mistake. i'm so sorry that you can't look past one letter
@ 1st anonymous
The 2nd Anon is corect! git off ur high horse and take the stick out of ur ass!
PS @ Ellianna18 don't let morons get u down. this was good writing, although u my want a flash back or three later on. Not the best but it's far above OK statis.
good story
I wish you would finish it .........I read other comments .....wow such a pompous ass........your writing will improve as you go along ........I thought the story was good and the idea was good keep it up
Stephen J
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