You told us exactly where you were going - and then did a step-by-step, with nothing approaching a twist. There seemed to be no attempt to build tension or create a conflict of any sort. The sex was mechanical
wait...what? newlyweds show up at boss' house. next paragraph: newlywed husband is fucking boss' wife. huh?? what did I miss here...how did his character get to that spot, physically and mentally?
I should have put the reader's e-mail request at the end of the story. As the one commenter stated I took away the surprise effect by leading off with the e-mail. Sorry!
What unrealistic BS. Even John Holmes, 1 in millions, wasn't that long.
At that point, I stopped reading since no normal humans have such cocks, and even if they did a vagina doesn't stretch that much except perhaps over weeks or months; therefore, would be extremely painful and likely result in tearing of the vagina.
Since I don't care to read stupid, I then skipped to the end and gave the story the 1* rating it deserves.
Regardless of the other comments, I enjoyed the story immensely. I was very disappointed you didn't provide the week-end scenario with the Duncan's and friends. It would be interesting to see how Cathy would react to probable DP and how Richard would react. Would his response lead him to total acceptance and broaden their relationship? Why do you not write it? You seem to write stories almost monthly.
Must agree with the comment about not continuing on with the swingers weekend party at the Duncans.It would have been interesting about Cathy & other women. Also,would Robert be jealous about Cathy or would he join right in.
English
I'm afraid it was BORING
You told us exactly where you were going - and then did a step-by-step, with nothing approaching a twist. There seemed to be no attempt to build tension or create a conflict of any sort. The sex was mechanical
huh?
wait...what? newlyweds show up at boss' house. next paragraph: newlywed husband is fucking boss' wife. huh?? what did I miss here...how did his character get to that spot, physically and mentally?
Should have put the E-mail at the end.
I should have put the reader's e-mail request at the end of the story. As the one commenter stated I took away the surprise effect by leading off with the e-mail. Sorry!
9" cock
What unrealistic BS. Even John Holmes, 1 in millions, wasn't that long.
At that point, I stopped reading since no normal humans have such cocks, and even if they did a vagina doesn't stretch that much except perhaps over weeks or months; therefore, would be extremely painful and likely result in tearing of the vagina.
Since I don't care to read stupid, I then skipped to the end and gave the story the 1* rating it deserves.
Fiction Is Better Than Truth
Regardless of the other comments, I enjoyed the story immensely. I was very disappointed you didn't provide the week-end scenario with the Duncan's and friends. It would be interesting to see how Cathy would react to probable DP and how Richard would react. Would his response lead him to total acceptance and broaden their relationship? Why do you not write it? You seem to write stories almost monthly.
Agree
Must agree with the comment about not continuing on with the swingers weekend party at the Duncans.It would have been interesting about Cathy & other women. Also,would Robert be jealous about Cathy or would he join right in.
How about not leaving us wondering about the swinger party. Please write about it. What a wonderful experience for Richard when he returns,
Is there more for us?
Reread and was on edge like crazy. Too bad the swinger party has not yet been written.
Excellent story Walter, well written and very pacy. I am looking foprward to the next instalment!
So what,
if anything, was in the coffee?
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