I meant to score you a 5, for some reason though the F^%$ing program gave you a 3.
I wish that the end had been done a little differently...ie Rick comig home to a preggo wife solidly in love with her bro or similar
Oh WOW! GREAT story! And thanks for the climax; it was a really wet one! ;) I'll probably read this one over again.
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Anonymous03/20/11
Exciting
Oh fuck you made me so wet reading this I was using my fingers and vibrator to bring me to a great orgasm. I wish I had Rick at home for a night and I would give him everything he wanted.
Julie
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Anonymous03/22/11
Since we are all at the end, I can say, what a set-up. You hooked us all. Great story!!
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Anonymous03/27/11
umm
anonymous, I think you meant you wish you had DAVE. remember, rick is the worthless excuse of a husband. Dave is the brother fucking his sister, while she CALLS him rick because she's pretending to be sleepwalking.
You get a solid ten for knowing which of the guys was a good fuck and which was a dud! I was afraid I would have to respond to that anonymous comment and the implications of that were just.....bad! Again thanks for paying attention to my story. And to all of you who read it, THANKS!
I always pay attention to the details of stories I enjoy, and this was unquestionably one of them. In fact, while I know it's probably difficult to picture how you could extend this storyline, I still must say that a sequel would not be unwelcome.
-anubelore (aka umm anonymous [I was too lazy to sign in])
I guess that pretty much says it all. It also reminds me of happier times with my "ex" when she couldn't remember the next day.
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Anonymous08/25/11
Bahaha!
Great story! Laughed the whole time! I think "purple invader" pretty much sums it up. Bahaha! Thanks DezurtDawg.
Your handle inspires great confidence in your writing ability.
Really, you could've done great things with this. *sad face*
Try again maybe? Less corny dialogue, less creativity in sexual naming, and more mature character development and description.
Thanks and good luck!
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Anonymous09/08/11
hot
i caught my step sister using a dildo to this and she blew me so i wouldnt tell... so thx i guess
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Anonymous09/09/11
yes yes
to the two anonymous if i had a hot sister it would of been a pleasure to please lol.
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Anonymous10/11/11
hate the cheating
she should have been divorced before this. you need to write a new chapter with her getting divorced and moving in with bro permanetly.
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Anonymous10/25/11
Epic story.
This was simply an epic story. It certainly kept me entertained.
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Anonymous10/31/11
sexapnia
lol i have this disorder myself! i regularly have sex with my wife and never know. she just tells me the next day. love this story really hit home.
WELL THIS IS ONE GREAT STORY YOU DONE A GREAT JOB OF PUTTING IT ALL TOGETHER WELL DONE I LOVED IT I WOULD GIVE YOU A SKY FULL OF STARS
BUT AT LEAST YOU 5 PLUS STARSLOVED THE SEX PART AND JUST ABOUT EVERY PART FROM START TO FINSH GREAT JOB KEEP IT UP,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
,........................."R"..................... ...............
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Anonymous02/16/12
kool
Ok good one .....so does she leave rick?....do they live together and does she get prego
i loved the story. its what i did to my brother. hes the best lover a sister could want he dosent have an 8" cock he does have a nice thick 6" cock with even biger head thanks becky
This story was so hot!!! I pray you have more written like this!!!!!!!!!
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Anonymous08/30/13
Awesome!
I bookmarked this before i was even halfway down The first page! I was not disappointed :-). Great story on an awesome theme, you did a good job!
My only suggestion is to never ever use the phrase "man batter" ever again :-)
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Anonymous12/05/13
Reality
Reality check. Sleep fucking? I don't think so. Do some research. Keep it real.
Nice story about the subject and well written I think.
Regarding the user commenting on reality check...I would tell him/her to go do the research him/herself.
Sleep fucking is real. Probably not as common as one would like, but it happens. 15-20 years ago I had a female friend who did just that, had sex in her sleep.
She called it sleeping with her eyes open and it always intrigued me a lot. I never came across anyone doing it since but thinking about it sure is a turn-on still.
Thinking about it, why would it surprise anyone? People sometimes drive cars etc while sleeping so why couldn't they fuck?
Too bad you apparently just 'skimmed' my tale instead of actually 'reading' it! Perhaps you could have put in the time to read the comment from "Anonymous" of 5-5-2013 who wrote, "That was amazing!! the detail and how the sister planned the whole thing." Did you notice where he/she wrote 'the sister PLANNED the whole thing.'? What that means (as did I) is that the sister was NEVER sleep walking but was using that as a way of getting to fuck her brother while making him THINK she had no control over what she was doing!
I liked the way she used her sleep walking to get what she desired from loving brother and he accepted it and still loved her even more
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Anonymous04/20/14
To Anonymous, Reality
There really is such a thing as sleep sex it is know as sexsomnia. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sleep_sex
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Anonymous04/30/14
once AGAIN
a story that COULD have been good ruined by the worthless DAWG. rushed no plot buildup no end and it has cheating all make it a waste of the sites space. add all the fake rave reviews ( writers should not post their own raves or get freinds, family and other writers to do it ) and it needs to be deleted.
Anonymous should go back to reading children's fairy tales.
The story is fiction and everyone knows it's fiction but it's also a fantasy that many men have, can identify with, would give their right arm for it to happen to them. It's also the typical fantasy of many men to have a bigger than normal cock and be able to fuck his female partner until she's worn out with orgasms.
So you think that makes a story bad? I think you're in the minority here. If you don't like this kind of story, then search Literotica for what you do like. I guarantee it's on this site, whatever you want.
For your information, I don't know the author, never heard of him till I came upon one of his stories. I've commented on most of them as anonymous rather than log in but for this one I'm going to log in.
I'll read every story this author will write and love every one of those stories. I think they're great, despite having a super human cock pounding a super human pussy. And yes there are a few grammatical errors but so what? None of these authors are professional, if they were they'd be writing for a living. (Actually some of them should be doing that now instead of giving it away.)
So shove your criticism where the sun doesn't shine or write the story yourself if you think you know better.
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Anonymous03/15/15
God I wish i was your sister..
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Anonymous07/11/15
I'm not sure which is funnier or more sad, the losers that totally slam a story for no apparent reason other than they have serious mental problems, or the losers that like to play as the comment area police, going off on other posters under the false assumption that this is a message board, not a comment area for the author, rofl. ...the funniest bit is that for all their policing, its pointless since the posters never come back after they post, so it never gets read, lol.
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Anonymous09/22/15
gr8 m8 no d-b8 i r8 it an 8 i h8 2 b in an ir8 st8 but its my f8
1 thing that would have improved your story would be if you had told about the dream he was having before his sister climbed on top... all in all I gave you 5 stars though. Nice story! :)
English
another excellent story! keep it up!
screwed score
I meant to score you a 5, for some reason though the F^%$ing program gave you a 3.
I wish that the end had been done a little differently...ie Rick comig home to a preggo wife solidly in love with her bro or similar
WOW
hell, can I fuck Dave too???
Oh WOW! GREAT story! And thanks for the climax; it was a really wet one! ;) I'll probably read this one over again.
Exciting
Oh fuck you made me so wet reading this I was using my fingers and vibrator to bring me to a great orgasm. I wish I had Rick at home for a night and I would give him everything he wanted.
Julie
Since we are all at the end, I can say, what a set-up. You hooked us all. Great story!!
umm
anonymous, I think you meant you wish you had DAVE. remember, rick is the worthless excuse of a husband. Dave is the brother fucking his sister, while she CALLS him rick because she's pretending to be sleepwalking.
"Thanks "Umm Anonymous'
You get a solid ten for knowing which of the guys was a good fuck and which was a dud! I was afraid I would have to respond to that anonymous comment and the implications of that were just.....bad! Again thanks for paying attention to my story. And to all of you who read it, THANKS!
dezurtdawg
not a problem
I always pay attention to the details of stories I enjoy, and this was unquestionably one of them. In fact, while I know it's probably difficult to picture how you could extend this storyline, I still must say that a sequel would not be unwelcome.
-anubelore (aka umm anonymous [I was too lazy to sign in])
Incredible
Best story I have read yet, well written and thanks for sharing
Fantastic
That was amazing.....one of the best stories I have read on here!! Thanks for the great read and hot, hot, hot story!!!
best story ever!
I read a lot of stories and this was without a doubt the best I have ever read.
Great storyline
I cum twice with my friend reading story. She got off also
Once I fucked my sister in sleep.
Add more Ch.
It need a little more
WOW!
I guess that pretty much says it all. It also reminds me of happier times with my "ex" when she couldn't remember the next day.
Bahaha!
Great story! Laughed the whole time! I think "purple invader" pretty much sums it up. Bahaha! Thanks DezurtDawg.
Your handle inspires great confidence in your writing ability.
Really, you could've done great things with this. *sad face*
Try again maybe? Less corny dialogue, less creativity in sexual naming, and more mature character development and description.
Thanks and good luck!
hot
i caught my step sister using a dildo to this and she blew me so i wouldnt tell... so thx i guess
yes yes
to the two anonymous if i had a hot sister it would of been a pleasure to please lol.
hate the cheating
she should have been divorced before this. you need to write a new chapter with her getting divorced and moving in with bro permanetly.
Epic story.
This was simply an epic story. It certainly kept me entertained.
sexapnia
lol i have this disorder myself! i regularly have sex with my wife and never know. she just tells me the next day. love this story really hit home.
To: Anonymous 'sexapnia'
ROFLMFAO!! Thanks! And enjoy your 'problem'!
dezurtdawg
loved it, hot and sexy.
SLEEP SEX
WELL THIS IS ONE GREAT STORY YOU DONE A GREAT JOB OF PUTTING IT ALL TOGETHER WELL DONE I LOVED IT I WOULD GIVE YOU A SKY FULL OF STARS
BUT AT LEAST YOU 5 PLUS STARSLOVED THE SEX PART AND JUST ABOUT EVERY PART FROM START TO FINSH GREAT JOB KEEP IT UP,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
,........................."R"..................... ...............
kool
Ok good one .....so does she leave rick?....do they live together and does she get prego
family love
i loved the story. its what i did to my brother. hes the best lover a sister could want he dosent have an 8" cock he does have a nice thick 6" cock with even biger head thanks becky
It could use a sequel!
It could use a sequel where the sister finds out she's pregnant by her brother.
Great Story
I am still reeling after reading this story. I am in the market for a Dave-like creature. Or a Christian Grey like! My! My!!!!
More
Need more, he needs her ass, and needs to fuck her when Rick is home. Needs to give him the baby his ex took away from him.
Wow
That was pretty good defiantly need more
brill!!!!!!!
that was amazing please write more!!!!!!!!!!!!!
That was great need more. It made me cum..
wow
great story
If I was a betting person, I'd bet her husband is going to be on the road a lot more and for longer periods if she has her way.
Amazing
That was amazing!! the detail and how the sister planned the whole thing.
HOT!!!
This story was so hot!!! I pray you have more written like this!!!!!!!!!
Awesome!
I bookmarked this before i was even halfway down The first page! I was not disappointed :-). Great story on an awesome theme, you did a good job!
My only suggestion is to never ever use the phrase "man batter" ever again :-)
Reality
Reality check. Sleep fucking? I don't think so. Do some research. Keep it real.
Well written
Nice story about the subject and well written I think.
Regarding the user commenting on reality check...I would tell him/her to go do the research him/herself.
Sleep fucking is real. Probably not as common as one would like, but it happens. 15-20 years ago I had a female friend who did just that, had sex in her sleep.
She called it sleeping with her eyes open and it always intrigued me a lot. I never came across anyone doing it since but thinking about it sure is a turn-on still.
Thinking about it, why would it surprise anyone? People sometimes drive cars etc while sleeping so why couldn't they fuck?
To: Anonymous, Reality, 12-14-2013
Too bad you apparently just 'skimmed' my tale instead of actually 'reading' it! Perhaps you could have put in the time to read the comment from "Anonymous" of 5-5-2013 who wrote, "That was amazing!! the detail and how the sister planned the whole thing." Did you notice where he/she wrote 'the sister PLANNED the whole thing.'? What that means (as did I) is that the sister was NEVER sleep walking but was using that as a way of getting to fuck her brother while making him THINK she had no control over what she was doing!
Good grief!
very good
I liked the way she used her sleep walking to get what she desired from loving brother and he accepted it and still loved her even more
To Anonymous, Reality
There really is such a thing as sleep sex it is know as sexsomnia. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sleep_sex
once AGAIN
a story that COULD have been good ruined by the worthless DAWG. rushed no plot buildup no end and it has cheating all make it a waste of the sites space. add all the fake rave reviews ( writers should not post their own raves or get freinds, family and other writers to do it ) and it needs to be deleted.
Anonymous should go back to reading children's fairy tales.
The story is fiction and everyone knows it's fiction but it's also a fantasy that many men have, can identify with, would give their right arm for it to happen to them. It's also the typical fantasy of many men to have a bigger than normal cock and be able to fuck his female partner until she's worn out with orgasms.
So you think that makes a story bad? I think you're in the minority here. If you don't like this kind of story, then search Literotica for what you do like. I guarantee it's on this site, whatever you want.
For your information, I don't know the author, never heard of him till I came upon one of his stories. I've commented on most of them as anonymous rather than log in but for this one I'm going to log in.
I'll read every story this author will write and love every one of those stories. I think they're great, despite having a super human cock pounding a super human pussy. And yes there are a few grammatical errors but so what? None of these authors are professional, if they were they'd be writing for a living. (Actually some of them should be doing that now instead of giving it away.)
So shove your criticism where the sun doesn't shine or write the story yourself if you think you know better.
God I wish i was your sister..
I'm not sure which is funnier or more sad, the losers that totally slam a story for no apparent reason other than they have serious mental problems, or the losers that like to play as the comment area police, going off on other posters under the false assumption that this is a message board, not a comment area for the author, rofl. ...the funniest bit is that for all their policing, its pointless since the posters never come back after they post, so it never gets read, lol.
gr8 m8 no d-b8 i r8 it an 8 i h8 2 b in an ir8 st8 but its my f8
5 stars
Fuck! That was a good story! Made me cum 4 times! I'm still a virgin but I wouldn't mind a guy pounding into me like that!!! 😉😍
nice.
1 thing that would have improved your story would be if you had told about the dream he was having before his sister climbed on top... all in all I gave you 5 stars though. Nice story! :)
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