I get the idea from your story that the husband has already shown signs of giving too much to the job, possibly that he and his wife have had arguments about this in the past. What I did not get in your introduction was that she was already such a bitch that she was ready to go out and cheat on him, rub his nose in it and then repeat the performance all over again at the drop of a hat. And what did she expect he, or rather them, to do if he lost his job? Apparently she works but it is not hinted at that his income was unnecessary; rather the opposite. Overall this got my emotions up for a bit, but left me something less than sated. Also, I was expecting the truncated ending: it is your calling card in short pieces like this. I do appreciate giving us at least one concessionary sentence in that she is out the door, but one sentence does not a short story resolution make.
He knows she is cheating on him...
Sees it happening...and decides to let her come into the house to sleep before throwing her and her stuff out the next day (all i one sentence.)
Its a very truncated sentence.)
There is no question one's job is important. Most spouses who have a less demanding job (or who don't work at all) will express frustration at the long hours of their partner's job (whether they be a doctor, a lawyer, a business person, or whatever), but they won't cheat on their partner if they truly love them. Sometimes an overly-demanding job plays a role in the break-up of a marriage, so the theme of this story is plausible in that sense. But it is the way in which it is presented that causes this reader to have questions.
I agree with another comment that there most probably has been prior discord in this marriage. Sally's statement, basically an ultimatum, suggests that he has been neglecting their relationship and her feelings for some time. I also suspect that "boyfriend Sam" has been coming on to Sally at work, and even if she did not fuck him previously, their flirting and other preliminaries were probably over the line long before the current theater incident. But it is likely (since hubby is totally clueless to problems in their marriage) that Sally never made her emotional needs known, and instead, she was passive-aggressive in this regard.
Sally no longer loves, let alone respects, her husband. That much is obvious. But it seems she is rather shallow and he is pretty insensitive to her. He thought their sex was good. Just what does that mean? Men, at least most men these days, are not so clueless about their wives. We men realize women can be high maintenance, that women need to feel that their men put them first, at least a goodly percentage of the time, so that they feel loved. Would Sally have fucked Sam and gone to the theater with him if hubby's Mom just had a heart attack and he had to suddenly fly across the country to be with her, breaking his theater date with Sally? Why is a high-pressure job so different? It's not like getting a job during this recession is so easy. Can they do without his job if he told his boss to shove it, and he was going to the theater with his wife, instead?
My regret about the ending concerns the lost opportunity to explore the actual relationship between the two. All we have from Sally is anger, resentment, and spite (I'm fucking him, listen to the sounds we make). But this reader would like to learn more about the actual conflicts in their relationship and especially more about what goes on in Sally's here-to-for shallow mind. I think a second chapter would be interesting should JPB wish to write it.
your stories are a mixed bag. Never know what you're going to get. Sometimes the stories are loved, sometimes they're hated. The worst is when they're not finished.
Thanks for writing, but please finish them before you post them.
A bunch of people crying: "Incomplete *blah blah*" or "Finish the *mumble grumble*" Yay for no anonymous posts! But, I liked it. Short and simple (can't really call it sweet), with the writing on the wall, as it were. Not much room for misinterpretation but still leaves the reader room to polish it off in their own head to her or his proper level of revenge or despair.
To other commenters: you want someone to write out your fantasies. This is an actual story, meaning it has character deftly sketched out, conflict or drama and then ambiguity. JPB writes these short form stories very well. He can't write long form stories at all but he's a master of this form. You should learn to appreciate good work.
Ooohhh ... Great treachery with spite thrown in, surely deserves some kickass response from hubby. Look forward to your conclusion, or open it up to others.
Your last line pulled the story out for me...Tomorrow she will be history - Thanks!
Thought provoking, he never mentioned any history of problems with her and now, in an instant, she's a slut...wow.
Bad day, mostly - but - he got to witness his wife's infidelity and now, at an early stage in life, gets to dump her while he is still young enough to have a life with an honest woman.
Not to mention that she will be known around her office as a cheating slut so, her sexual escapades calendar will be full.
Bad Day but still - a Lucky guy! He gets to find a New One!
Thanks Bob, as a guy, hurt a bit but liked the ending - no wimp!!!
Why write more as some have suggested? The guy is an idiot for wasting all the time he had just sitting in his fog and having a drink. Sally is obviously history, so do some financial planning and save your ass instead of waiting for her to come in the house and throw reality in his face.
Since Bob never fleshes out his female, or even male characters, I always fill in the details myself. Sally is 41 years old and has let herself go, so she looks more like 51. She is overweight and doesn't bother to hide the grey in her hair. Her breasts were never large and now they sag to boot. Why Sam from work finds her attractive is hard to say, but maybe because she has false teeth and can take them out for oral sex.
Find a newer model and move on with life, because there are obviously no kids as they have not been mentioned.
I liked your story, short and straight to the point,but it really needs a second chapter, to find out how it got to this point in their marriage. A missed play just doesn't cut it. For her to get his bags packed and arrange a ride to the airport and a date, sounds like she was, already having an affair with him beforehand
She had crossed the line. In a marriage, as least in a traditional marriage, a man is expected to provide for his family. This is actually his primary function, so that the wife is able to take care of the children. He was doing his best to keep the money coming in, and she stepped on his manhood.
is quite correct in his phrasing. For me, he was very wimpish... He should have started divorce while he was still in Boston. In fact, he should have hung up on her when she called back... Very well done from the operational point of view, but I did feel that the last line was weak and should have been delivered earlier.
Bob I know you love writing "half" a story and then saying.......
...let the reader fill in their own ending because "they may not/won't/I could care less if they" like my ending, but what you're doing is like painting half (or in some cases less than half) a picture and then handing out crayon's to everyone looking at it and saying "Here, finish what I started because I'm sure I can't finish it to your liking anyway".
Most of us don't know what is in you're mind and have no idea where you were going to take the ending, well the virtual ending (^_^). Only you know where you are going with the characters that you created and "started" to develop.
I really believe that only a few people like the "Half a story" style of writing. Most of us disengage from what is going around us to try to be entertained by a story.
But having to create the "rest of the story" ourselves means we might as well had just written it from the start instead of having the expectation of letting you the writer entertain us like we thought you were going to do when we started reading the story.
I don't mind when JPB lets us use our imagination to fill in the details of the ending, even though some of us feel his phrase indicated the path to take, but I wonder? This "hero" was so wimpish that he may change his mind in the next minute! Furthermore I am not usually into revenge, but I the more I think about it, the angrier I get at his wife and Sam. Both of them deserve to be drawn and quartered. Sam because he should know that he was really setting himself up when he let her transmit the swish-swish of his cock and did not react. Come on JPB.... Have the protagonist demonstrate how level things out! (Personally I think that only sudden death would balance the books) Hmmm, what was in my afternoon tea??
I maybe wrong but this could be one of those wife tricking hubby stories, what he sees is not what he thinks he sees and this was all simulated sex to punish him.
I leave that door open, based upon several lines in the story, that leaves the reader to assume a blowjob in the parking lot and a hot fuck in the back seat. But he never really saw the sex act and she probably saw him at the airport and since he did not call Sam had to convince her to pretend again in the car, that why she was leaving.
I know this maybe a stretch, but explains the quick response to his knowing about the blow job in the parking lot and explains the actions in the car prior to coming in the house.
Or not, she could be just a bitch!
GPB is a talented writer, but his stories remind me about the movie "a never ending story". GPB started out good (check his old stories) but recently is not cool.. I hope he could finish this one. Part of the fun in Cheated wives stories are how the cheated spouses' explaination (logic) on how/why this happen and their suffering. Without these, the story will be somewhat hollow. My 2 cents
Yup, sometimes a story with no ending can leave the reader to fill in the details and enjoy it as they would like. However, THIS story spends a lot of time making the wife a real bitch. She is not only cheating, she goes out of her way to rub his face in it. The issue about his job is pure baloney. He was told to go into a very undesirable situation. This wasn't him chasing after opportunities on his own, something he would have control over. He had no choice in the matter. Should he have bitched at his wife? No. Does that make it OK for her to cheat? No.
So this story spends all it's time establishing the wife as a bitch. That was easy. All that's left is balancing the scales. And to that JPB contributes NOTHING. Not a hint or a clue. We don't know if the husband is a tiger or a wimp. Is he real cleaver or kind of helpless? If he is a clever tiger we suspect the wife is going to get her ass kicked. If he's a helpless wimp she'll get away with it and make out like a bandit in the divorce. But JPB gives us nothing.
I don't think JPB gives a shit about his scores. And because that is so and I fucking HATE stories that are "unfinished" I always give these stories a "One Star".
JPB is undoubtedly ONE of the most talented writers on Lit. To bad he does this shit.
Several of us have commented already on JPB's talent. If you read some of his earlier work, he did quite often deliver great endings. Maybe he intends to finish this one. He's very prolific, so it might happen soon. If not like one of his last stories someone else might take a stab at finishing it. The also very talented Mandy01 finished a JPB story not very long ago. This one looks like he set me up to finish it, after all there's already a Mustang in the story so half of my work would be done. Let's give JPB a chance. We know that he can deliver the goods, although sometimes we just don't see his stories the way he does.
The story is short and to the point. We can draw a lot of conclusions from the story about him and her.
She lacks the respect for him, his job, their marriage and has no problem publicly fucking around on him.
JPB, nice, short and good...THANKS!!!
Now, someone, maybe Mandy or Stang, can write a similar but not me too type of story along theses lines and we'd all enjoy it. Maybe Vulcan can step up?
Anyway, it's perfect the way it is, damn thought provoking, makes some of us have 2ndThoughts about our relationships but not me, I'm happy.
While it's always nice to read about how the victim of an affair rips the guts out of the cheating spouse it isn't needed if the story conveys the emotions and damage done by the cheating spouse. I thought that this did that pretty well. What would be the chain of events that is going to surprise us? There are only so many outcomes you see in a cheating wife tale.
Will she claim "It was just sex. I was angry at you"? Based on her actions I don't think so.
Will she beg forgiveness and grovel at his feet? Again- based on her actions I don't think so.
Will he relent and take her back when he realizes that she's right and that he put his job ahead their marriage? Probably. Then again with JPB- probably not.
Will he go to a lawyer, change the locks, drain the accounts and humiliate her with her family? I don't think that's JPB's M.O.
Will she have a mental collapse and be institutionalized? Doubt it.
Will they go through marriage counseling and either make the marriage better than ever or part ways knowing they tried? That's not his style.
Will he ask if he can watch? Or get a cream pie when she gets home? That's consistent with his style.
This story was a departure for JPB, in a way. In a lot of his works he'd have kept quiet about knowing and cheated on her as a way to get back at her. In some of them he just breaks up/leaves without telling them why and makes them ask him (Rob) why he isn't calling/coming home/etc.
We got what we needed and he left open the door to either continue or not. And we know what direction the main character is headed in as far as his wife is concerned.
Nobody wins in this one. And, does she understand or care about the obvious consequences of her actions? Who is the victim in this little story? We'll never know.
Their marriage died with the argument. I have watched the debate over how a person can't just turn off the love for another for years on this site. A small argument can change the way you view a person. When the fuck yous start to fly, it will never be the same again. Some people can forgive and forget, or is it a form of denial to keep the status quo? After a few good arguments married people loose some of the love and become roommates. I for one, know men who no longer give a fuck what their wife thinks, I think we all do. Most will not forget hurtful words. The couple in this story were on the path to divorce without the cheating. I wonder if she will be so full of herself when her life starts falling apart. Those attitude adjustments can be a bitch.
They generally go with PMS and bad hair. Good set up Bob, but I’ll leave this one to someone else. Stang? You doing anything of late...lol
I’m happy with the ending, but I know it pisses some of JPB’s readers off. It’s only when I see one character or other getting the raw end of the stick that I get involved, and this one seems to be heading along nicely.
Sally is brain dead from what I see. She’s lost any interest in her marriage. Whether that could be put at John’s feet or not isn’t totally developed. John is just trying to keep everyone happy and not having much luck...well actually he’s having heaps of luck, just not good luck. Only two ways to go here from Bob’s demented mind...
One...John capitulates and allows Sally to walk all over him. From prior stories, this is not totally out of the question for one of JPB’s endings.
Two...Sally’s toast and it’s only the mechanics of the separation that need to be fleshed out. Two ways to go with that as well...One is for her to beg for forgiveness, but I don’t see this being the case with her prior attitude. Second is for her to shrug her shoulders and take whatever she can off John and make out like a bandit. I don’t like this idea and I’d be going for John to secure his property from a bitch slut and kick her to the curb.
No doubt this is not the first time she has cheated on him. sally just did not care whether he knew. How does he avoid being screwed in the courts? The lack of attention due to a job is no reason to be treated like shit in a marriage otherwise soldiers would not get married.
I am sorry I bothered to read the story as I doubt that you will ever finish it. If you believe it is finished then it deserves the one star I gave it.
I don't like blue balls when a girl gives them to me. I certainly like them just as little when an author does it to me.
Bob...bubbala...I don't mind your hanging endings where I have to figure out what's happening in the future. Ususally there's this little twist which gives A resolution of sorts.
But this one just sucks. You hint at something awesome and...nothing.
One way or another...FINISH the damn thing and YES - we know, she was history!
Personally, I would have liked him to turn on his car alarm and the outside lights, call the police for someone attempting to burgle his car and then acted dumb while he got a police report and witnesses!!!
English
Disappointing
I don't have a problem with short and sweet stories, but this wasn't up to your usual standard.
Good plot but not developed
Unfulfilled
I get the idea from your story that the husband has already shown signs of giving too much to the job, possibly that he and his wife have had arguments about this in the past. What I did not get in your introduction was that she was already such a bitch that she was ready to go out and cheat on him, rub his nose in it and then repeat the performance all over again at the drop of a hat. And what did she expect he, or rather them, to do if he lost his job? Apparently she works but it is not hinted at that his income was unnecessary; rather the opposite. Overall this got my emotions up for a bit, but left me something less than sated. Also, I was expecting the truncated ending: it is your calling card in short pieces like this. I do appreciate giving us at least one concessionary sentence in that she is out the door, but one sentence does not a short story resolution make.
He knows she is cheating on him...
Sees it happening...and decides to let her come into the house to sleep before throwing her and her stuff out the next day (all i one sentence.)
Its a very truncated sentence.)
I, too, was disappointed with the ending
There is no question one's job is important. Most spouses who have a less demanding job (or who don't work at all) will express frustration at the long hours of their partner's job (whether they be a doctor, a lawyer, a business person, or whatever), but they won't cheat on their partner if they truly love them. Sometimes an overly-demanding job plays a role in the break-up of a marriage, so the theme of this story is plausible in that sense. But it is the way in which it is presented that causes this reader to have questions.
I agree with another comment that there most probably has been prior discord in this marriage. Sally's statement, basically an ultimatum, suggests that he has been neglecting their relationship and her feelings for some time. I also suspect that "boyfriend Sam" has been coming on to Sally at work, and even if she did not fuck him previously, their flirting and other preliminaries were probably over the line long before the current theater incident. But it is likely (since hubby is totally clueless to problems in their marriage) that Sally never made her emotional needs known, and instead, she was passive-aggressive in this regard.
Sally no longer loves, let alone respects, her husband. That much is obvious. But it seems she is rather shallow and he is pretty insensitive to her. He thought their sex was good. Just what does that mean? Men, at least most men these days, are not so clueless about their wives. We men realize women can be high maintenance, that women need to feel that their men put them first, at least a goodly percentage of the time, so that they feel loved. Would Sally have fucked Sam and gone to the theater with him if hubby's Mom just had a heart attack and he had to suddenly fly across the country to be with her, breaking his theater date with Sally? Why is a high-pressure job so different? It's not like getting a job during this recession is so easy. Can they do without his job if he told his boss to shove it, and he was going to the theater with his wife, instead?
My regret about the ending concerns the lost opportunity to explore the actual relationship between the two. All we have from Sally is anger, resentment, and spite (I'm fucking him, listen to the sounds we make). But this reader would like to learn more about the actual conflicts in their relationship and especially more about what goes on in Sally's here-to-for shallow mind. I think a second chapter would be interesting should JPB wish to write it.
finish your stories occasionally
your stories are a mixed bag. Never know what you're going to get. Sometimes the stories are loved, sometimes they're hated. The worst is when they're not finished.
Thanks for writing, but please finish them before you post them.
Feels unfinished
So every time he goes away for work she is going to screw somebody? Odd view of what marriage is all about.
Not a whole lot of written resolution to this one. Have to finish it in my mind. Thanks for sharing (most of it).
Your really wearing the patience of your fans
1 star for an unfinished story. 5 stars waiting in the wings for the final chapter. Please write one
Good Begining
I predict...
A bunch of people crying: "Incomplete *blah blah*" or "Finish the *mumble grumble*" Yay for no anonymous posts! But, I liked it. Short and simple (can't really call it sweet), with the writing on the wall, as it were. Not much room for misinterpretation but still leaves the reader room to polish it off in their own head to her or his proper level of revenge or despair.
This is a well-crafted story
To other commenters: you want someone to write out your fantasies. This is an actual story, meaning it has character deftly sketched out, conflict or drama and then ambiguity. JPB writes these short form stories very well. He can't write long form stories at all but he's a master of this form. You should learn to appreciate good work.
Ooohhh
Ooohhh ... Great treachery with spite thrown in, surely deserves some kickass response from hubby. Look forward to your conclusion, or open it up to others.
Last Line
Your last line pulled the story out for me...Tomorrow she will be history - Thanks!
Thought provoking, he never mentioned any history of problems with her and now, in an instant, she's a slut...wow.
Bad day, mostly - but - he got to witness his wife's infidelity and now, at an early stage in life, gets to dump her while he is still young enough to have a life with an honest woman.
Not to mention that she will be known around her office as a cheating slut so, her sexual escapades calendar will be full.
Bad Day but still - a Lucky guy! He gets to find a New One!
Thanks Bob, as a guy, hurt a bit but liked the ending - no wimp!!!
Hopefully ended
Why write more as some have suggested? The guy is an idiot for wasting all the time he had just sitting in his fog and having a drink. Sally is obviously history, so do some financial planning and save your ass instead of waiting for her to come in the house and throw reality in his face.
Since Bob never fleshes out his female, or even male characters, I always fill in the details myself. Sally is 41 years old and has let herself go, so she looks more like 51. She is overweight and doesn't bother to hide the grey in her hair. Her breasts were never large and now they sag to boot. Why Sam from work finds her attractive is hard to say, but maybe because she has false teeth and can take them out for oral sex.
Find a newer model and move on with life, because there are obviously no kids as they have not been mentioned.
The Good wife!!
I liked your story, short and straight to the point,but it really needs a second chapter, to find out how it got to this point in their marriage. A missed play just doesn't cut it. For her to get his bags packed and arrange a ride to the airport and a date, sounds like she was, already having an affair with him beforehand
this story was published here a few years ago
it sucked shit then... it sucks shit now
Liked the ending.
She had crossed the line. In a marriage, as least in a traditional marriage, a man is expected to provide for his family. This is actually his primary function, so that the wife is able to take care of the children. He was doing his best to keep the money coming in, and she stepped on his manhood.
Old Hideki
is quite correct in his phrasing. For me, he was very wimpish... He should have started divorce while he was still in Boston. In fact, he should have hung up on her when she called back... Very well done from the operational point of view, but I did feel that the last line was weak and should have been delivered earlier.
Bob I know you love writing "half" a story and then saying.......
...let the reader fill in their own ending because "they may not/won't/I could care less if they" like my ending, but what you're doing is like painting half (or in some cases less than half) a picture and then handing out crayon's to everyone looking at it and saying "Here, finish what I started because I'm sure I can't finish it to your liking anyway".
Most of us don't know what is in you're mind and have no idea where you were going to take the ending, well the virtual ending (^_^). Only you know where you are going with the characters that you created and "started" to develop.
I really believe that only a few people like the "Half a story" style of writing. Most of us disengage from what is going around us to try to be entertained by a story.
But having to create the "rest of the story" ourselves means we might as well had just written it from the start instead of having the expectation of letting you the writer entertain us like we thought you were going to do when we started reading the story.
-Risq
Normally
I don't mind when JPB lets us use our imagination to fill in the details of the ending, even though some of us feel his phrase indicated the path to take, but I wonder? This "hero" was so wimpish that he may change his mind in the next minute! Furthermore I am not usually into revenge, but I the more I think about it, the angrier I get at his wife and Sam. Both of them deserve to be drawn and quartered. Sam because he should know that he was really setting himself up when he let her transmit the swish-swish of his cock and did not react. Come on JPB.... Have the protagonist demonstrate how level things out! (Personally I think that only sudden death would balance the books) Hmmm, what was in my afternoon tea??
JPB Story
I maybe wrong but this could be one of those wife tricking hubby stories, what he sees is not what he thinks he sees and this was all simulated sex to punish him.
I leave that door open, based upon several lines in the story, that leaves the reader to assume a blowjob in the parking lot and a hot fuck in the back seat. But he never really saw the sex act and she probably saw him at the airport and since he did not call Sam had to convince her to pretend again in the car, that why she was leaving.
I know this maybe a stretch, but explains the quick response to his knowing about the blow job in the parking lot and explains the actions in the car prior to coming in the house.
Or not, she could be just a bitch!
never ending story
GPB is a talented writer, but his stories remind me about the movie "a never ending story". GPB started out good (check his old stories) but recently is not cool.. I hope he could finish this one. Part of the fun in Cheated wives stories are how the cheated spouses' explaination (logic) on how/why this happen and their suffering. Without these, the story will be somewhat hollow. My 2 cents
No ending leaves story gasping
Yup, sometimes a story with no ending can leave the reader to fill in the details and enjoy it as they would like. However, THIS story spends a lot of time making the wife a real bitch. She is not only cheating, she goes out of her way to rub his face in it. The issue about his job is pure baloney. He was told to go into a very undesirable situation. This wasn't him chasing after opportunities on his own, something he would have control over. He had no choice in the matter. Should he have bitched at his wife? No. Does that make it OK for her to cheat? No.
So this story spends all it's time establishing the wife as a bitch. That was easy. All that's left is balancing the scales. And to that JPB contributes NOTHING. Not a hint or a clue. We don't know if the husband is a tiger or a wimp. Is he real cleaver or kind of helpless? If he is a clever tiger we suspect the wife is going to get her ass kicked. If he's a helpless wimp she'll get away with it and make out like a bandit in the divorce. But JPB gives us nothing.
I don't think JPB gives a shit about his scores. And because that is so and I fucking HATE stories that are "unfinished" I always give these stories a "One Star".
JPB is undoubtedly ONE of the most talented writers on Lit. To bad he does this shit.
I hope SOMEONE will finish the story.
Give him a chance!
Several of us have commented already on JPB's talent. If you read some of his earlier work, he did quite often deliver great endings. Maybe he intends to finish this one. He's very prolific, so it might happen soon. If not like one of his last stories someone else might take a stab at finishing it. The also very talented Mandy01 finished a JPB story not very long ago. This one looks like he set me up to finish it, after all there's already a Mustang in the story so half of my work would be done. Let's give JPB a chance. We know that he can deliver the goods, although sometimes we just don't see his stories the way he does.
Another dead fish
It sucked just like all of the stories he doesn't finish.
Stop Already
The story is short and to the point. We can draw a lot of conclusions from the story about him and her.
She lacks the respect for him, his job, their marriage and has no problem publicly fucking around on him.
JPB, nice, short and good...THANKS!!!
Now, someone, maybe Mandy or Stang, can write a similar but not me too type of story along theses lines and we'd all enjoy it. Maybe Vulcan can step up?
Anyway, it's perfect the way it is, damn thought provoking, makes some of us have 2ndThoughts about our relationships but not me, I'm happy.
THOUGHT provoking?
yeah if you are a fucking idiot....
What do you mean "No ending"?
While it's always nice to read about how the victim of an affair rips the guts out of the cheating spouse it isn't needed if the story conveys the emotions and damage done by the cheating spouse. I thought that this did that pretty well. What would be the chain of events that is going to surprise us? There are only so many outcomes you see in a cheating wife tale.
Will she claim "It was just sex. I was angry at you"? Based on her actions I don't think so.
Will she beg forgiveness and grovel at his feet? Again- based on her actions I don't think so.
Will he relent and take her back when he realizes that she's right and that he put his job ahead their marriage? Probably. Then again with JPB- probably not.
Will he go to a lawyer, change the locks, drain the accounts and humiliate her with her family? I don't think that's JPB's M.O.
Will she have a mental collapse and be institutionalized? Doubt it.
Will they go through marriage counseling and either make the marriage better than ever or part ways knowing they tried? That's not his style.
Will he ask if he can watch? Or get a cream pie when she gets home? That's consistent with his style.
This story was a departure for JPB, in a way. In a lot of his works he'd have kept quiet about knowing and cheated on her as a way to get back at her. In some of them he just breaks up/leaves without telling them why and makes them ask him (Rob) why he isn't calling/coming home/etc.
We got what we needed and he left open the door to either continue or not. And we know what direction the main character is headed in as far as his wife is concerned.
Harryin VA
...which apparently you are!!!
This was a strange one ...
Nobody wins in this one. And, does she understand or care about the obvious consequences of her actions? Who is the victim in this little story? We'll never know.
A quick short story
The marriage was already over if she would humiliate her husband the way she has done.
I would hope that he could extract revenge from her and her lover.
Thanks for the read.
Good story
this by far is one of your best stories. personally i like to hear how the husband would get revenge but still five stars good story
Realistic
Their marriage died with the argument. I have watched the debate over how a person can't just turn off the love for another for years on this site. A small argument can change the way you view a person. When the fuck yous start to fly, it will never be the same again. Some people can forgive and forget, or is it a form of denial to keep the status quo? After a few good arguments married people loose some of the love and become roommates. I for one, know men who no longer give a fuck what their wife thinks, I think we all do. Most will not forget hurtful words. The couple in this story were on the path to divorce without the cheating. I wonder if she will be so full of herself when her life starts falling apart. Those attitude adjustments can be a bitch.
Ohhh boy! I’ve had days almost like John’s
They generally go with PMS and bad hair. Good set up Bob, but I’ll leave this one to someone else. Stang? You doing anything of late...lol
I’m happy with the ending, but I know it pisses some of JPB’s readers off. It’s only when I see one character or other getting the raw end of the stick that I get involved, and this one seems to be heading along nicely.
Sally is brain dead from what I see. She’s lost any interest in her marriage. Whether that could be put at John’s feet or not isn’t totally developed. John is just trying to keep everyone happy and not having much luck...well actually he’s having heaps of luck, just not good luck. Only two ways to go here from Bob’s demented mind...
One...John capitulates and allows Sally to walk all over him. From prior stories, this is not totally out of the question for one of JPB’s endings.
Two...Sally’s toast and it’s only the mechanics of the separation that need to be fleshed out. Two ways to go with that as well...One is for her to beg for forgiveness, but I don’t see this being the case with her prior attitude. Second is for her to shrug her shoulders and take whatever she can off John and make out like a bandit. I don’t like this idea and I’d be going for John to secure his property from a bitch slut and kick her to the curb.
Just my thoughts
Amanda
Needs a Part 2
No doubt this is not the first time she has cheated on him. sally just did not care whether he knew. How does he avoid being screwed in the courts? The lack of attention due to a job is no reason to be treated like shit in a marriage otherwise soldiers would not get married.
I don't know why but I didn't like the story.
Nevertheless I gave it 5*****s.
Sorry
I am sorry I bothered to read the story as I doubt that you will ever finish it. If you believe it is finished then it deserves the one star I gave it.
This is patently unfair
I don't like blue balls when a girl gives them to me. I certainly like them just as little when an author does it to me.
Bob...bubbala...I don't mind your hanging endings where I have to figure out what's happening in the future. Ususally there's this little twist which gives A resolution of sorts.
But this one just sucks. You hint at something awesome and...nothing.
1 star - finish it
Really, just finish a fucking story once in a while...
That was a rather shitty thing to do on this one JPB!
I think it was finished, at least the wife was.
Just fucking finish your stories! I have yet to read one that is!
Wimp
Go to the store get some balls and a backbone
Damn It Bob
One way or another...FINISH the damn thing and YES - we know, she was history!
Personally, I would have liked him to turn on his car alarm and the outside lights, call the police for someone attempting to burgle his car and then acted dumb while he got a police report and witnesses!!!
stupid
just finish the damn thing.
Thanks***
For the read.
Good Start
Now to the conclusion.
Enjoyed it
Look forward to an ending.
MOST MEN WOULD HAVE BYPASSED HISTORY
and assigned her to archives. TK U MLJ LV NV
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