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Scraping the bottom of the barrel
JPB, you are a better writer than this. You know this. We, your readers, know this. You can do better than this. You have done better than this. Just because you are a prolific writer does not mean you have to publish every last bit of drivel you write (otherwise you end up like Stephen King or Michael Crichton!).
The premise behind the story is semi-interesting, but you don't take it anywhere, and the characters are not even 1 dimensional. Wife confusing her husbands long lost twin, (done to death on Lit), then being caught- but we have no emotional payout; just a dick on her cheek as the hubby grins. Why? Why is he grinning? He hates his family (otherwise he would visit them more often), so why?
not bad for a air head story
hi.
a shining example of a classical air head story.
nice to see you can make a decent air head story work in 1/3rd the normal space they normally take.
but air head story's are wasting your great talent. though i have to say fun to read if you what a good laugh. which is why i'll give it 4 stars.
yawn....
I have read better shit in bathroom stalls at the the local Dennys
Not your best effort!
But thanks for trying.
Bad Day...Slow
Not your best JPB, thanks for keeping it short. We read anything you write because it is you so, sorry you didn't feel that electric excitement that usually gets your pen to driving our thirst for more of your banter.
Hope you feel better tomorrow!!
Thanks!
Ssssneaky.....
JPB,
snuck one in on us eh!
Thanks for sharing on Lit.
x
Short and to the point
A good storyline and as always; well written.
Thanks
Since I'm selective
I haven't read this brand of story. It's too short and the characters lack development. We have no idea how her growing up with that level of sexual abuse changed her, and the men are a pair of cocks.
I give it a two, which is well below what I normally give your stories.
Juat a short little goofy story
It's obviously all just a set up and a goofy story. Sounds like she got a twofer.
We Have!!!
Been Crapped !!!!! By Bob!!!!!!!!!! This was a good one Bob.
Abuse ?
While young, it most certainly can be called abuse. BUT, in my lifetime I have learned those abused as youngsters grow up to be absolute wild partners when it comes to sex...
Except they didn't want to keep her!
After all, who wants to be married to a slut?
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