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Concourse Delema

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by SweetOblivion03/15/11

A wonderful start

and the first stanza would stand wonderfully well on its own. Possibly a case of less is more - but a great idea well executed nonetheless. S.O.

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by UnderYourSpell03/16/11

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A good idea well done for that, allowing for the fact that you are probably American and I am not and may spell things differently, I was wondering if 'Delema' is supposed to be 'dilemma' and 'demine' is 'denim'

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by vrosej1003/18/11

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I liked this some much more than your other stuff. It was clever, original and horny. It is perhaps longer than it should be and the demine thing stuck in my throat but otherwise lovely and lyrical musing.

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