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by Koba03/20/11

Very nice! For absolute certainty if my lover read me a poem like this I would be ready to go! I would be unstoppable! A 5 all the way for that reason alone! But I should add that it is very well written with very pleasant rhymess which make it even better. Nice erotic poetry!

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by UnderYourSpell03/20/11

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your meter is all over the place, writing in rhyming couplets needs lines of the same length. Try reading it out loud to yourself and see where you stumble

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