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Ancient Eyes

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by twelveoone03/22/11

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this good. 5, but a bit predicable.

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by greenmountaineer03/22/11

I think this was your best among the recent submissions. The sharp contrasts here between creation vs. destruction, randomness vs. intent, and youth vs. the absence of the "ancient eyes" came together nicely with an economy of lines; nothing superfluous here IMO. A high 5 for me.

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