Banging in the New Year

You should go back and read your story again. The name "Paul" pops up a few times. Sometimes it seems to be talking about you, and sometimes it seems to be talking about "Jerry".

Story has 2 male characters

The story has two male characters, Jerry and Paul. Paul is the narrator.

Wayne Gibbous

Too clinical

The writing is too clinical. It's not a user manual. Needs some heat. But good story. Keep at it.

As for the other comment, he means you write most of it in the first person (I), and for a section in the middle you shift into the third person (Paul). It's jarring.