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an amnesia poem

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by Anonymous

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by twelveoone03/24/11

What works

at least that's the star
that I wish upon
despite looking like a cliched ending, i feel that reducing it to a resigned figure of speech works in context.
what doesn't work is the excessive rhyme of read/said/bead...
i feel it carries it too far into triteness. A hesitant 5

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by vrosej1003/25/11

well I loved it

I gave it five and I am recommending it. I do agree with the star thing at the end. Good to hear from you Sean.

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