A Fool Stumbles Into Love Ch. 02

I think you are doing an exceptional job staying true to the characters. The story is well thought out and if you moved faster things would seem forced. I can't wait to see what happens next but hold off on the sex just yet..I don't think Cal could handle it...LOL

Love it

You have a great story going which will no doubt send us round in circles but get there in the end. Keep going I like it

Happy reader

I just wanted to let you know that I like your story and can't wait for the next chapter.

Bookmark

I have only bookmarked 3 Authors in anticipation of the next chapter in over 3 years of reading stories here. You are one of them. Keep it up.

Hooked!

I just found this story and I am hooked. More please, and soon.

Dry opinion

I totally agree with the author. There is a reason why these series are categorized romance.

Excellent story

This is without question one of the best stories I have ever read on this site.

Feeling

The one thing you never find on this website is feeling. The one thing you look forward to most in other books. And it's really here, so I don't see anything to complain about :)

trust and love

Love where this is going. Sorry now I only gave Ch 1 three stars. five stars

This one...

...just goes on getting better all the time.

Revisiting an old favourite

This is my third re-reading, and it is as good as ever. There is a sub-genre that I call romantic fiction for men, and Carvohi is a master of it.

Just Beginning

Just beginning this part, but had to comment on a couple of things.

The sudden change in Cal's financial circumstances is a little unfair. Trying to get around it by ascribing his apparent poverty to liquidity issues isn't really right.

Buying Sandy a lobster dinner was supposedly putting a real crimp in his savings for his education, and now your telling us he has "money up the ass"? Even money that isn't "fluid" can be freed up when the need is there.

And now that you have brought it up again, something about his discomfort in the boat bothered me. He supposedly made a "bed" on the deck out of the blankets and pillows. Now, if that was for Maureen, his need to lie on the hard deck would make sense. But Maureen is described as lying on Cal, therefore, wouldn't HE be lying on the "bed"?

Inconsistency

In Chapter One, Warren said Sandy had to bring Maureen because Maureen was staying with her, here Maureen is living with her parents?

Thoughts

First of all, I agree totally with both of KarenE’s comments, and by the way, the term is “liquidity", not “fluidity”.

“Fluidity” refers to the physical property of a material to flow, so water has more fluidity than molasses.

“Liquidity” refers to how readily a financial resource can be converted into cash.

Second, SHE’S offended about his assumptions about HER sexual activity? So, it’s okay for HER to comment about the state of HIS virginity, but HERS is off limits?

After all the cruelty SHE went through, how could she be even a PART of Sandy’s meanness even for a little while?

And, again with the money! Where is all the money coming from to pay for his wardrobe? Her family at least WAS cash-strapped due to her medical bills, and HIS money presumably is still tied up.

PLEASE

re - submit a slightly altered version of "A fool stumbles into love" & label it as ch.01
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this is a truly delightful , interesting & engaging story , but it has those little niggles & snags that do cause some readers to grump , moan & complain..
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a revised ch.01 , would deal with this issue & silence the nay sayers

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A Special Story

I really like the story...quite honestly, it is literally the only Internet story that has ever made my eyes water...wow such a lot of realistic personality development...it is a very special story, and I look forward to reading more!!