All Comments on 'The Contract Ch. 01'

Please don't continue this story.

Well, you have established that one of the characters is not a very nice man and we have a loving wife who regrets some earlier indiscretion at college. I find it hard to hold it against her that she was being sold to other men, although for pay or not, she was definitely putting it about freely.

No doubt he will find out who she is and we will find out if she is a faithful wife and just how badly her husband needs the business.

I thought it was great she was honest with him , so many stories I have read the wife didn't tell her husband, and her past was used as a trap for her. Look foward to reading more......

Andy probably already knows who Jim is married to and wants a way to get back at her.

I could make for a very good story if Andy uses his company business to make her his slut.

Thanks for the read.

continue this story having Andy conning Janice into being his whore again, this time letting her getting gangbanged of her own free will because she submits to and likes the rough sex, and then let Jim divorce her after finding out

There is no need to continue. So far, the wife has not turned my stomach.

that's not how real people talk , wtf is up with the wife's monolog? Don't make another chapter plz.

I agree with bigdaddyrich and a couple others. It is a good read and would like to see you continue.

Make it so Janice once again becomes his whore and he arranges a gangbang.

Typical Loving Wives trash as of late.

Let me see. A LW story where the wife is worried about an old boyfriend finding out who she is now and a husband who needs the business. So in chapter two the wife becomes a slut/whore again for the ex-boyfriend and the husband becomes a sick wimp sissy boy to the ex boyfriend. That is how 99% of these stories end up. So I agree DON'T write part two.

... at first I thought this was "another" Wimp/Cuck story which this site has too many of ( btw .. one is "too" many )! Since the wife was honest with her husband about her past,doesn't appear to want to cheat on her spouse, and he doesn't appear to be one of those spineless losers that gets off on his wife screwing some other man, I say continue.

I think you would be able to take it in more directions by not turning it into a same old/same old by having Andy getting to her. Perhaps later in the story perhaps Jim/Janice can explore others, but you have the basis of good vs evil start here.

A good story with believable characters. We should refer to Anonymous ranters as BigA's. I agree with one point a BigA made, that normally no wife would be so graphic in her description of her past unless she was embellishing it for erotic effect. In this case I thought she did for it's shock, her tale would certainly have shocked her husband into realizing who he was dealing with.

You've set the story up with drama and conflict, and it could go either way. The bad guy wants to further hurt the wife for his revenge, and getting to her through the husband. The husband is after the bad guy because he's a low life the hurt the woman he loves, and the wife might resent the bad guy's attempt to ruin her life and want to fight him as well.

What a nice setting for twisted drama! I would love to see the bad guy go after the husband to get the wife, and have the husband set up a series of hurdles, making the nose struggle. Being the son of his firm's founder, he may well not be the businessman that his father was. I'd like to see the husband sucker him into a trap, snap it shut and squeeze him dry.

GO for it! Make it happen. Maybe the wife can help in the planning, not physically, but in suggesting the way to use her former user's personality against him.

Make it happen!

Go on, have a go, but try to make it a bit different somehow.

Who eats just one chip at a meal? Of course you must continue this juicy tale. Andy will direct her to please him and others I wager. Janice is now what she was then; a beautiful woman who enjoys being seen and taken by a dominant male.

As the acorn seldom strays far from the tree I imagine Andy will teach daughter Jenny a thing or two about herself she didn't know as well. Hopefully mom gets involved in one of her lessons.

cheers, a fan.

If, he is any kind of a man, he will respect his wifes' suggestions and keep Andy away from their events. He'll carefully read the contractual agreement to make sure there isn't any serious consequences for ridiculous changes in performance.

Obviously, if he allows Andy to insist on a congratulatory dinner with their two wives, we know how the future will go.

Unfortunately, I am one of those who read your last story (regrettably) about the Lady Captain so, I'm sure you are going to have her servicing Andy and his friends, cuckolding the dimwit husband and destroying their 18 year marriage.

You JUST CAN'T help yourself, can you!!!

In whatever direction you go someone will gripe. Personally I will quit if it goes to a gang bang or even if Jim pimps her out....

You can't go wrong whatever your choice. The story is good as it is. But a follow-up would also be interesting. The husband needs the business and the wife might need to close-up that with a fiercer revenge than a simple broken nose.

Unfortunately based on your last story which started out good but quickly turned to crap here is how this will go down

she tells him to watch it

he doesn't

somehow she has to be alone/fuck/whore for the asshole

she loves it

she denies it

husband asks her

she denies it

she does it

she does it

she does it

she makes husband eat cream pie

husband asks her

she denies

husband catchers her

she denies

husband wimps and tries to reconcile

she decides she can't live without being the other guys whore

she leaves wimp husband

oh and some place it's a huge gang bang and some how every guy has a 15" cock.

So mr.author - this really should be in the fetish section under stupid slut/whore and wimp husband - it's not a loving wife situation at all - there's no love, just the same wimp/slut script over and over

The problem with continuing is that it seems you have already written yourself into a corner. Andy is a jerk who uses women. Her husband desperately needs his business. Andy will find out who Janice is and demand sex. Jim will be stuck because he needs the business. If Jim and Janice agree to Andy's demands bad things will happen. If they disagree bad things will happen. It seems like a no win situation. If you think you can write yourself out of that obvious corner, go for it. How will you maintain Jim and Janice as good people? Is Andy still a jerk? If Andy tries something how can he be stopped? Can the business be saved? Can there be a happy ending? Should there be?

please more would be great

I think its good as it is. Anything more would be a letdown to some people. Better to have a loving wife who is exactly that.

it can only lead to a divorce and Janice will be a whore.

I know I am a perverted fuck, but I think the husband is really turned on by his wife's confession and secretly sets her up to be gang banged by Andy and his business buddies.The husband did say he would not invite him (Andy) "after the contract was signed". She tries to avoid it, but realizes at some point, her confession to her husband had stirred the lustful memories of her past, which are stronger than her lost dignity. Afterwards, Andy sends her home to her pervert husband, who never confesses to his role, leaving gobs of sequel possibilites.

You are a good writer but have a problem with finishing a story and keeping your characters consistent. PLs. PLS do not go down hill the way you did with your last story

But do keep writing!

in the last story ? we already know whats going to happen. Andy and Jake have big, fat long dick, while her husband is smaller than the little finger of a new born.

So from one second to the other she is the new fucktoy of those to brothers who not only have big dicks, no they are also rich. therefore of course she sells her own daughter Jenni to them, so she will not be lonely.

I'm good am I !

so far I am already sufficiently informed about the plot and don't need to read another five chapters to see another marriage going down because your woman character is not able to have a bigger IQ than a plant.

Personally I think you should continue this tale. It held my interest and I look forward to reading more.

I don't care what anyone else says, it's a good story.

I would like to read more.

Anyone who doesn't like your stories should shut up and write a better one.

IF THEY CAN!

That is like holding the candy just out of the baby's reach.

Pretty good writing and character development except for Jim. He did say he wouldn't be inviting him to any corporate entertainment functions which suggests that he does respect his wife's opinion and wishes. We'll see if Jim has to choose between his wife and the account, especially if Andy has already gained knowledge that they are married. If it comes to the wife becoming a prostitute since Andy already knows that getting her drunk and started gets her turned on enough to accept more partners, I would just as soon you didn't continue. That's my vote

But if all you do is one of the usual endings: turn her into a fuck toy again, husband uses her to get contract, etc. then don't bother.

Nuf Said

So far it looks to have some interesting senarios for following episodes. So even though others have expressed reservations about other like-story exp.ositions of the theme, I'd like to give you the benefit of the doubt and look forward to seeing where you take us

I'LL PASS.

Humiliations is one thing and hopelessness is another, i have read many stories which entertains humiliation and cuckold lovers, but you previous story had made me think you don't even know about these things, so you turn to hopelessness , failure and sadism. Don't now what you want to achieve by writing this other than twisting readers' mind. So you loose one reader, dont worry there are still many readers who will read to end, and will continnue reading your stories, and also bitching about it, again and again, because they cant accept that your stories will always have hopeless ending.(where you make hero fail again and again, may be you want to take revenge on somebody who really did humiliated or did something to you, if i guess his name starts with J)

Your last story involved the sad failure of a marriage between two people who loved each other and one of whom had a brain misfire. Many of the commentators sneered strongly when there seemed to be a chance for the rescue of the marriage, and I'm not up to reading another story involving an interloper ruining an existing marriage even though there are many who consider a husband who loves his wife to be a wimp.

your first one was, stop now. Get some help or stop writing.

There is already too much wimpy cuckold stuff on this sight. I hope this story does not turn into another one. Most readers, I believe, still believe in the concept of keeping your vows and self respect.

I see all the usual suspects have posted their negative comments. I am intrigued. Where do you think it could go? Andy has his revenge or maybe the husband with advance knowledge sells her in return for success.

Do continue.

I'm looking forward to reading part 2. I like the premise of your story so far!

I can see lots of posibilities of where this story could go. Let us have more.

Not too badly written,but what a dissapointment in storyline. Just 3 stars.

as long as its not stereo-typical. TK U MLJ LV NV

I really don't know what to expect but I'll take my chances. No score yet. Too soon.

More Please...

Is there a more stupid lame comment for one spouse to make to another, especially when the spouse doing the asking knows the other spouse has no way of knowing what the details might be?

No, I'm sure I don't want to know the details, and that's why I stopped reading your story at that point!

Sure seems such

Just a cheap, over used excuse for the wife to be a whore.

LOL once a slut, always a slut