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*****
Five.
A five
w/o further comment.
Special recommendation
This poem is deceptively simple and transparent but brings one right into the mind of the 'teller.' But 1201's right, it explains itself. Excellent.
Then I looked into estragons other writing . He has a number of very good stories including one about a poem which is definitely worth reading.
But the scores he has been given on this site are absurdly poor, it doesn't make sense, this guy is good.
this poem would be excellent
if you made a different choice in place of 'groin'. It's one of those 'huh?' moments, because it clashes with the simple elegance of the poem. Overall, good work, Gogo.
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good read thankyou
Regrets.....
....for missed opportunities and fear at what the future holds. Perhaps a line break for "terminal", a stand-alone word to give it a greater hit.
The first of your work I've read - will look for more.
Tess
P.S.
Just returned from reading your other poetry. This is a sea change in style for you and it works.....not that I didn't enjoy the rest. :-)
Tess
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