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by Anonymous

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by twelveoone04/05/11

Interesting

Q.
"bits of plastic and metal raped raw from Her flesh,"
what does this refer to, and why is "Her" capped.
I did not vote.

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by l8bloom04/05/11

A.

"Chat" refers to computing; computers are made of bits of plastic and metal; humans typically mine the earth for raw materials without heed to accompanying damage to the surrounding habitat.
"Her" is Gaia.

Sorry this wasn't clear. I'll keep trying!

~L8.

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by GuiltyPleasure04/05/11

Your ........

....... reply to 1201 helped me to appreciate your poem more but there are still two "f"s in traffic (Spellcheck is our friend), also why abbreviate "generations"?

You've got my attention so I'll look at more of your work.

Tess

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by twelveoone04/05/11

thank you

I came back and voted, (5) I do think just one or two more clues would have done it. "Gens" lead me to believe this had something to do with computers, they are getting more eco-friendly. Don't overdo making everything clear, though.

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