I really like your style of writing. Some of the best stories I have read here.
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Anonymous03/19/12
Excellent Series
Very much enjoyed all three chapters of the tale. Well written and captivating. I liked the different points of narration and the intertwined stories. Thank you
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Anonymous05/28/12
Good writing, but some problems
I really enjoy the character development and the pacing of your stories. Unfortunately, there are multiple errors that I find VERY distracting. The biggest problem is not maintaining the point of view of the storyteller. You really should make use of an editor to proofread your stories before you publish. It would improve the quality of your work tremendously.
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Anonymous06/29/13
you big doofus!~
the ladies both leave and kelly is in serious need of a good rodgering - and you failed to provide for her relief - how inconsiderate!~ LOL
Now that we know everyone's history, you should blend them (Sharon, Alice, Kelly, Owen and AM) all together in s new adventure in an exotic local like Greece or Jamaica. Keep it up. Really love your writing style.
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Anonymous02/06/16
Anxious for next installments
Now that you got me hooked I'm looking forward to the next installment and possibly more.
English
Multiple Partners
Are fun. Group fucking is soooo exciting. A woman who can get two or more cocks at the same time is a happy woman.
well done
I really like your style of writing. Some of the best stories I have read here.
Excellent Series
Very much enjoyed all three chapters of the tale. Well written and captivating. I liked the different points of narration and the intertwined stories. Thank you
Good writing, but some problems
I really enjoy the character development and the pacing of your stories. Unfortunately, there are multiple errors that I find VERY distracting. The biggest problem is not maintaining the point of view of the storyteller. You really should make use of an editor to proofread your stories before you publish. It would improve the quality of your work tremendously.
you big doofus!~
the ladies both leave and kelly is in serious need of a good rodgering - and you failed to provide for her relief - how inconsiderate!~ LOL
Definitely need another chapter
Now that we know everyone's history, you should blend them (Sharon, Alice, Kelly, Owen and AM) all together in s new adventure in an exotic local like Greece or Jamaica. Keep it up. Really love your writing style.
Anxious for next installments
Now that you got me hooked I'm looking forward to the next installment and possibly more.
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